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@ Captain Galaxy: Hi, I was looking through current video game GANs, and noticed that this article cites two unreliable sources that need to be replaced: although GiantBomb itself is an RS, their database is user-edited; and similarly, Models Resource is a fan-run site hosting user-submitted art asset rips. Just wanted to notify you so you have time to resolve this and aren't hit with a seven-day deadline when someone decides to take up the GA review.-- Alexandra IDV 06:41, 30 December 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Panini! ( talk · contribs) 11:48, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
It's annoying how long some people have to wait while others don't. A month later, I'll pick this up.
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anini
🥪 11:48, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
I watched the Scott the Woz video on the game, so consider me a professional:
"In some levels Chibi Robo can take control of certain vehicles get across large surfaces of land. These vehicles include balloons, a skateboard, a submarine, and a wake board.-> "
"Some levels use vehicles to cross large surfaces of land, such as balloons or a submarine."
"To help get to the goal, Chibi Robo possesses a power cord. This cord has two different functions."->
"To help reach the goal, Chibi Robo possesses a power cord, of which has two functions."
"This cord has two different functions."A semicolon would work better here.
"Chibi Robo can use the cord like a whip and quickly swing it in front of him, which can be used to grab items, open doors or attack enemies.""can be used" is duplicated; maybe replace one of the instances with "being able to"
"In the level, the player can..."What level? All of them?
"Additional socket can be found that grant Chibi Robo the elemental powers of fire and ice."I don't think this is worded well. They're simply power ups like in Mario, they don't make him a god or anything. Also, could you describe what they do?
"During the level, Chibi Robo's battery life depletes, which causes a game over if it reaches 0. The player must recharge with plug sockets scattered around the levels."Oddly placed, maybe move this to the end of the paragraph.
"...which can be converted into energy at the 'Chibi House'."I don't understand what this means. What is its purpose and use?
"...the player can spin a roulette wheel in order to see which stage one can go to next..."is a bad instance of "can". The wheel is required to be spun.
"...with many believing that aliens are behind the disappearance."This makes it sound like the aliens are suspects, and it could be anyone. Doesn't the video show the aliens taking the resources? I could be wrong, though.
"...such as Oceania and Europe..."The list of locations is already listed above, so this part is not needed.
"When traversing the continents, Chibi Robo comes across a wide array of different toys to befriend and offer gifts to them in the form of snacks."The plot should be like a synopsis; since this is a side quest and doesn't contribute to the core plot, this can be left out.
"Being the fifth game in the series, Zip Lash was developed by Skip Ltd., with help from Vanpool, Inc."Citation?
"Kensuke Tanabe the series producer,..."Put a comma after Tanabe, too.
"this may be the last game..."Change "this" to "it".
"The game is compatible with 57 more Amiibo toys."The paragraph jumps from the amiibo, to the game, and back to the amiibo. I'd put this sentence at the end of the paragraph, and change the beginning of this to "The game itself is..."
"forgettable and unoriginal, with uninspired level design"portion? It's a pretty big claim, and this source is situational according to WP:VG/RS. There's a lot of sources here; I bet someone else had something similar to say.
"Though critics stated that the game was "bogged down" by a lot of problems, it was praised for its sound design, visuals, and overall charm."This has no inline citations, but since its the ol' classic Nintendo game, I bet the graphics are mentioned in multiple of these unused sources. You can cite them there, but don't need to include prose, just simply those blue numbers to prove "critics" is plural.
"Critics had a major problem with the "Destination Wheel", which is the way the player moves between levels, claiming it is incredibly restrictive and pointless to the overall point of the game."
"...a mechanic in Zip Lash where Chibi Robo could harness the power of fire."This is already mentioned in gameplay. Maybe, ->
"...Nintendo posted an image on Twitter of 'Fiery Chibi-Robo'; Chibi-Robo using the fire ability."
That's it for "now", but I'M NOT DONE! I'm gonna give it one more look-through and see if I missed anything. But as it stands, I'll put this on hold until the above concerns are addressed and I can proceed in a second look. P anini 🥪 17:42, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
@ Panini!: I have corrected most of the required concerns, however I will probably get most of the larger rewording work done tomorrow when I have more time. Captain Galaxy 20:48, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
A couple of more notes before I give another re-look:
I'll most likely give this article a second look through today. P anini 🥪 11:46, 8 February 2021 (UTC)
The description which compares this entry in the series to previous entries is a bit unclear. The 2D sidescrolling aspect is unlike previous games. However, earlier games do indeed feature the "10 cm tall robot named Chibi Robo". Bigmog ( talk) 00:57, 6 February 2021 (UTC)
@ Pravall: Scott the Woz is not a notable subject for this article. It's not just a lack of citation. There is a notice at the top of the page in edit mode that specifically states to not mention Scott the Woz. It stating "Any reference to Scott The Woz will be removed, as he's a non-notable YouTuber." There is nothing against the guy, this is just enforced because this article has been vandalised many times in the past and is the reason why it is semi-protected. Captain Galaxy 20:27, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
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@ Captain Galaxy: Hi, I was looking through current video game GANs, and noticed that this article cites two unreliable sources that need to be replaced: although GiantBomb itself is an RS, their database is user-edited; and similarly, Models Resource is a fan-run site hosting user-submitted art asset rips. Just wanted to notify you so you have time to resolve this and aren't hit with a seven-day deadline when someone decides to take up the GA review.-- Alexandra IDV 06:41, 30 December 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Panini! ( talk · contribs) 11:48, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
It's annoying how long some people have to wait while others don't. A month later, I'll pick this up.
P
anini
🥪 11:48, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
I watched the Scott the Woz video on the game, so consider me a professional:
"In some levels Chibi Robo can take control of certain vehicles get across large surfaces of land. These vehicles include balloons, a skateboard, a submarine, and a wake board.-> "
"Some levels use vehicles to cross large surfaces of land, such as balloons or a submarine."
"To help get to the goal, Chibi Robo possesses a power cord. This cord has two different functions."->
"To help reach the goal, Chibi Robo possesses a power cord, of which has two functions."
"This cord has two different functions."A semicolon would work better here.
"Chibi Robo can use the cord like a whip and quickly swing it in front of him, which can be used to grab items, open doors or attack enemies.""can be used" is duplicated; maybe replace one of the instances with "being able to"
"In the level, the player can..."What level? All of them?
"Additional socket can be found that grant Chibi Robo the elemental powers of fire and ice."I don't think this is worded well. They're simply power ups like in Mario, they don't make him a god or anything. Also, could you describe what they do?
"During the level, Chibi Robo's battery life depletes, which causes a game over if it reaches 0. The player must recharge with plug sockets scattered around the levels."Oddly placed, maybe move this to the end of the paragraph.
"...which can be converted into energy at the 'Chibi House'."I don't understand what this means. What is its purpose and use?
"...the player can spin a roulette wheel in order to see which stage one can go to next..."is a bad instance of "can". The wheel is required to be spun.
"...with many believing that aliens are behind the disappearance."This makes it sound like the aliens are suspects, and it could be anyone. Doesn't the video show the aliens taking the resources? I could be wrong, though.
"...such as Oceania and Europe..."The list of locations is already listed above, so this part is not needed.
"When traversing the continents, Chibi Robo comes across a wide array of different toys to befriend and offer gifts to them in the form of snacks."The plot should be like a synopsis; since this is a side quest and doesn't contribute to the core plot, this can be left out.
"Being the fifth game in the series, Zip Lash was developed by Skip Ltd., with help from Vanpool, Inc."Citation?
"Kensuke Tanabe the series producer,..."Put a comma after Tanabe, too.
"this may be the last game..."Change "this" to "it".
"The game is compatible with 57 more Amiibo toys."The paragraph jumps from the amiibo, to the game, and back to the amiibo. I'd put this sentence at the end of the paragraph, and change the beginning of this to "The game itself is..."
"forgettable and unoriginal, with uninspired level design"portion? It's a pretty big claim, and this source is situational according to WP:VG/RS. There's a lot of sources here; I bet someone else had something similar to say.
"Though critics stated that the game was "bogged down" by a lot of problems, it was praised for its sound design, visuals, and overall charm."This has no inline citations, but since its the ol' classic Nintendo game, I bet the graphics are mentioned in multiple of these unused sources. You can cite them there, but don't need to include prose, just simply those blue numbers to prove "critics" is plural.
"Critics had a major problem with the "Destination Wheel", which is the way the player moves between levels, claiming it is incredibly restrictive and pointless to the overall point of the game."
"...a mechanic in Zip Lash where Chibi Robo could harness the power of fire."This is already mentioned in gameplay. Maybe, ->
"...Nintendo posted an image on Twitter of 'Fiery Chibi-Robo'; Chibi-Robo using the fire ability."
That's it for "now", but I'M NOT DONE! I'm gonna give it one more look-through and see if I missed anything. But as it stands, I'll put this on hold until the above concerns are addressed and I can proceed in a second look. P anini 🥪 17:42, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
@ Panini!: I have corrected most of the required concerns, however I will probably get most of the larger rewording work done tomorrow when I have more time. Captain Galaxy 20:48, 25 January 2021 (UTC)
A couple of more notes before I give another re-look:
I'll most likely give this article a second look through today. P anini 🥪 11:46, 8 February 2021 (UTC)
The description which compares this entry in the series to previous entries is a bit unclear. The 2D sidescrolling aspect is unlike previous games. However, earlier games do indeed feature the "10 cm tall robot named Chibi Robo". Bigmog ( talk) 00:57, 6 February 2021 (UTC)
@ Pravall: Scott the Woz is not a notable subject for this article. It's not just a lack of citation. There is a notice at the top of the page in edit mode that specifically states to not mention Scott the Woz. It stating "Any reference to Scott The Woz will be removed, as he's a non-notable YouTuber." There is nothing against the guy, this is just enforced because this article has been vandalised many times in the past and is the reason why it is semi-protected. Captain Galaxy 20:27, 13 April 2024 (UTC)