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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 ( talk · contribs) 22:12, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
for a time, too colloquial
at which he served, you use "in which" later in the lead, which sounds better to me
for 20 seasons, and was their all-time winscomma not needed
Lappenbusch was hired by the school as assistant line coach in 1931., not immediately apparent to the layman that this is referencing American football
mass producedshould have a dash in it
of the day including Frank Leahy of Notre Dame.comma before including
and died in September 1996 in Enumclaw, Washingtonwould make sense.
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 22:12, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 ( talk · contribs) 22:12, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
for a time, too colloquial
at which he served, you use "in which" later in the lead, which sounds better to me
for 20 seasons, and was their all-time winscomma not needed
Lappenbusch was hired by the school as assistant line coach in 1931., not immediately apparent to the layman that this is referencing American football
mass producedshould have a dash in it
of the day including Frank Leahy of Notre Dame.comma before including
and died in September 1996 in Enumclaw, Washingtonwould make sense.
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 22:12, 22 August 2023 (UTC)