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Reviewer: IDV ( talk · contribs) 20:36, 2 July 2016 (UTC)
I'll be doing this one.-- IDV talk 20:36, 2 July 2016 (UTC)
[[action role-playing game]]
to [[action role-playing game|action role-playing video game]]
to make it clear from the start that this is a video gameand features voice overs for most dialogue. It also features other role-playing elements- This makes it sound as if voice acting is an RPG element. I'd suggest either changing the wording or removing the mention of voice overs from the lead.
He searches for the Five Scrolls, which can enhance the powers of his sword, while interacting with people from Allucanet and a nearby village.
and was scored by Tsuyoshi Sekito
but has can also be used to absorb Bincho energy (an MP equivalent)- remove has, explain "MP equivalent" in a way that people unfamiliar with video games and RPGs can understand
or absorb the enemy's skill.I assume there is not just one single enemy in the game, so it should be changed to "or absorb enemies' skills"
its real strength lies in Scrolls obtained through the game which imbue Lumina with various elemental properties.almost sounds like a strategy guide here, tone-wise - I'd go with something like "instead, it can be imbued with elemental properties from Scrolls"
Lumina is primarily offensive but thanks to the five elemental scrolls it gains new skills that facilitate the platforming.- I also wonder if "thanks to" is appropriate tone-wise
and defeats it crest guardianits crest guardian
, who was in fact sealed within Lumina and not by Lumina.I don't know what you mean with "within Lumina and not by Lumina". Also, "in fact" doesn't seem to be necessary.
It is also revealed by Jon the original Brave Fencer Musashi sealed- would work better as "Jon reveals that the original Brave Fencer Musashi sealed"
Furthermore, it was he whoIs this Jon or Brave Fencer Musashi?
The story was made with the idea During development, the team used an action baseSeems like a sentence either got cut short or wasn't removed entirely
For this game, the team worked to move polygons in real time and how lights affected their appearances.- This doesn't really work, I think. It sounds like they "worked how lights affected their appearances" - something like "the team focused on moving polygons in real time and how lights affected their appearance" would be better, I think. I also don't think "For this game" is necessary.
Characters were illustrated by Tetsuya Nomura but were designed by Koji MatsuokaI don't think it's very uncommon for illustration and character design to be done by different people, so "but" should be changed to "and". I'd also switch them around, since the characters must have been designed before they were illustrated.
@ Judgesurreal777: I have found some issues, listed above, but nothing too major. If you address them within a week, I will pass the article.-- IDV talk 01:11, 5 July 2016 (UTC)
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Reviewer: IDV ( talk · contribs) 20:36, 2 July 2016 (UTC)
I'll be doing this one.-- IDV talk 20:36, 2 July 2016 (UTC)
[[action role-playing game]]
to [[action role-playing game|action role-playing video game]]
to make it clear from the start that this is a video gameand features voice overs for most dialogue. It also features other role-playing elements- This makes it sound as if voice acting is an RPG element. I'd suggest either changing the wording or removing the mention of voice overs from the lead.
He searches for the Five Scrolls, which can enhance the powers of his sword, while interacting with people from Allucanet and a nearby village.
and was scored by Tsuyoshi Sekito
but has can also be used to absorb Bincho energy (an MP equivalent)- remove has, explain "MP equivalent" in a way that people unfamiliar with video games and RPGs can understand
or absorb the enemy's skill.I assume there is not just one single enemy in the game, so it should be changed to "or absorb enemies' skills"
its real strength lies in Scrolls obtained through the game which imbue Lumina with various elemental properties.almost sounds like a strategy guide here, tone-wise - I'd go with something like "instead, it can be imbued with elemental properties from Scrolls"
Lumina is primarily offensive but thanks to the five elemental scrolls it gains new skills that facilitate the platforming.- I also wonder if "thanks to" is appropriate tone-wise
and defeats it crest guardianits crest guardian
, who was in fact sealed within Lumina and not by Lumina.I don't know what you mean with "within Lumina and not by Lumina". Also, "in fact" doesn't seem to be necessary.
It is also revealed by Jon the original Brave Fencer Musashi sealed- would work better as "Jon reveals that the original Brave Fencer Musashi sealed"
Furthermore, it was he whoIs this Jon or Brave Fencer Musashi?
The story was made with the idea During development, the team used an action baseSeems like a sentence either got cut short or wasn't removed entirely
For this game, the team worked to move polygons in real time and how lights affected their appearances.- This doesn't really work, I think. It sounds like they "worked how lights affected their appearances" - something like "the team focused on moving polygons in real time and how lights affected their appearance" would be better, I think. I also don't think "For this game" is necessary.
Characters were illustrated by Tetsuya Nomura but were designed by Koji MatsuokaI don't think it's very uncommon for illustration and character design to be done by different people, so "but" should be changed to "and". I'd also switch them around, since the characters must have been designed before they were illustrated.
@ Judgesurreal777: I have found some issues, listed above, but nothing too major. If you address them within a week, I will pass the article.-- IDV talk 01:11, 5 July 2016 (UTC)
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