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Reviewer: ɳorɑfʈ Talk! 06:31, 4 April 2010 (UTC) Review begun. Will get back to you tomorrow. ɳorɑfʈ Talk! 06:31, 4 April 2010 (UTC)
To start with, the first sentence of the lede "Blood rain is a phenomenon where blood appears to fall from the sky in the form of rain." I think needs to be reworked a bit. Because we all know it the natural phenomena isn't blood, yet as a literary device it may be, so something like "Blood rain is a phenomenon where a substance which is perceived to be blood falls from the sky in the form of rain. In literature, blood rain may refer to actual blood raining from the sky."
Regarding the organization of information in the article, this article is a mixture of scientific explanation, history, and literary imaginings, and those things need to be well separated. I would recommend the article's sections be organized like this:
Your references need to be standardized as well, not in two different styles of referencing (referring to McCafferty). That's a start. Hope this helps. ɳorɑfʈ Talk! 23:27, 5 April 2010 (UTC)
Regarding the organisation of the article, I'm not convinced that restructuring is necessary. There is some overlap between the two main sections, but that is because the history of the phenomenon and its explanation are linked. The explanation details the developing understanding of blood rain, from literal interpretations that it was blood – perhaps caused by gods – through to the modern interpretation that there are several causes, ie: dust and microscopic organisms. The history and use in literature section explains how the phenomenon has been recorded, how it has occurred, and how this has changed over time. To fully explain this, it has been necessary to introduce some of the explanations which are better explained later. Otherwise the change from medieval mysticism to a modern scientific approach is unexplained. Separating the literary from the historic instances is nigh on impossible, hence they are dealt together. For instance, many of the early rains may have been invented by authors to give a sense of impending doom, foreshadowing events, however who is to say that blood coloured rain didn't actually fall and that with hindsight chroniclers interpreted it as a sign? It seems likely that both historic and literary rains went hand in hand early on, and it is only with a modern understanding of the phenomenon that it falls out of use as an omen in literature. For the most part, the sources discussing blood rain have hesitated to draw black and white distinctions between the two.
As for a characteristics section, I like the idea, but don't think there's enough information to justify one. Basically, it boils down to three main characteristics: it's red, usually covers a small area, although the time is lasts is variable. This is covered in the explanation section, but I've included more details in the lead to make it more prominent. Nev1 ( talk) 22:40, 11 April 2010 (UTC)
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No improvements since April 12. Nom states unable to make improvements.
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Reviewer: ɳorɑfʈ Talk! 06:31, 4 April 2010 (UTC) Review begun. Will get back to you tomorrow. ɳorɑfʈ Talk! 06:31, 4 April 2010 (UTC)
To start with, the first sentence of the lede "Blood rain is a phenomenon where blood appears to fall from the sky in the form of rain." I think needs to be reworked a bit. Because we all know it the natural phenomena isn't blood, yet as a literary device it may be, so something like "Blood rain is a phenomenon where a substance which is perceived to be blood falls from the sky in the form of rain. In literature, blood rain may refer to actual blood raining from the sky."
Regarding the organization of information in the article, this article is a mixture of scientific explanation, history, and literary imaginings, and those things need to be well separated. I would recommend the article's sections be organized like this:
Your references need to be standardized as well, not in two different styles of referencing (referring to McCafferty). That's a start. Hope this helps. ɳorɑfʈ Talk! 23:27, 5 April 2010 (UTC)
Regarding the organisation of the article, I'm not convinced that restructuring is necessary. There is some overlap between the two main sections, but that is because the history of the phenomenon and its explanation are linked. The explanation details the developing understanding of blood rain, from literal interpretations that it was blood – perhaps caused by gods – through to the modern interpretation that there are several causes, ie: dust and microscopic organisms. The history and use in literature section explains how the phenomenon has been recorded, how it has occurred, and how this has changed over time. To fully explain this, it has been necessary to introduce some of the explanations which are better explained later. Otherwise the change from medieval mysticism to a modern scientific approach is unexplained. Separating the literary from the historic instances is nigh on impossible, hence they are dealt together. For instance, many of the early rains may have been invented by authors to give a sense of impending doom, foreshadowing events, however who is to say that blood coloured rain didn't actually fall and that with hindsight chroniclers interpreted it as a sign? It seems likely that both historic and literary rains went hand in hand early on, and it is only with a modern understanding of the phenomenon that it falls out of use as an omen in literature. For the most part, the sources discussing blood rain have hesitated to draw black and white distinctions between the two.
As for a characteristics section, I like the idea, but don't think there's enough information to justify one. Basically, it boils down to three main characteristics: it's red, usually covers a small area, although the time is lasts is variable. This is covered in the explanation section, but I've included more details in the lead to make it more prominent. Nev1 ( talk) 22:40, 11 April 2010 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
No improvements since April 12. Nom states unable to make improvements.