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1. Well-written:
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and
understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
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Prose is clear and concise, spelling and grammar are correct.
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1b. it complies with the
Manual of Style guidelines for
lead sections,
layout,
words to watch,
fiction, and
list incorporation.
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Excellent lead section, layout is great, no words to watch that I can see.
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2.
Verifiable with no original research:
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline.
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2b.
reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
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- Early life: - reference checks out OK
- Career
- Politics: references check out OK
- Utah House of Representatives:
- Elections: references check out OK
- Tenure references check out OK, but have highlighted that some material about her life may be missing
- Later life
"She served as the board's chair from 1989 to 1991." what is the reference for this?
"White offered to resign from the position of chair in 1989, due to controversy involving debt of $50,000, but the board voted to show confidence in her. Despite not wanting to serve another term she was unanimously selected to serve another term in 1990. She declined to serve another term despite having been renominated in 1991. She was selected to serve as secretary after being chair of the board." due to the controversial nature of this issue, we really need to source each sentence, please see
Wikipedia:Citing sources#Keeping_citations_close.
- All other references and material checks out
- Political positions
- Abortion: sources check out
- Equal Rights Amendment: sources check out
- Women's rights: sources check out
- Electoral history: sources check out - I admit I didn't check the percentages! -
Aussie Article Writer (
talk) 04:07, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
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2c. it contains
no original research.
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2d. it contains no
copyright violations or
plagiarism.
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3. Broad in its coverage:
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3a. it addresses the
main aspects of the topic.
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Gives a good biography, seems to cover her political positions well. However:
I noticed a number of awards that she isn't credited for, and according to
this source, "She also helped establish the Children’s Justice Center in Tooele and worked for the Tooele Adult Probation and Parole Office until she retired at the age of 78. White also served as a member of the Governor’s Commission on the Status of Women (1986–1993)". Whilst she is most notable for her legislative and political work, surely these things should be included in the article?
This source says that White wanted to reestablish Capitol Punishment. Is this something that should be covered?
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see
summary style).
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4.
Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
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For balance, the following probably needs to note the controversy from the Republican party's viewpoint "On January 22, 1991, White and five other people were selected by forty delegates to be candidates to replace Bill Pitt on the Tooele County Commission, but Edwin St. Clair was selected to fill the vacancy." The source of the controversy can be found
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Aussie Article Writer (
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- Fixed by nom. -
Aussie Article Writer (
talk) 18:01, 21 July 2021 (UTC)
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing
edit war or content dispute.
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6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as
images,
video, or
audio:
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6a. media are
tagged with their
copyright statuses, and
valid non-free use rationales are provided for
non-free content.
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6b. media are
relevant to the topic, and have
suitable captions.
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7. Overall assessment.
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