Be consistent about introducing place names (e.g. as the new governor of Khwarazm. (not explained) He spent a total of seven months in the city of Balkh, (explained)
The sentence ending in (Bosworth) needs to be copy edited.
There's nothing wrong with using the quote, but the author should be properly included in the sentence, not added in brackets after the quote. Apologies for not being clearer.
Amitchell125 (
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16:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)reply
Can you clarify what in 1098/9 means? It could interpreted to mean different things to different readers.
Consider amending which was made easier due to Muhammad's young age, who was approximately 17 years old at the time to ‘made easier because Muhammad had yet to reach adulthood' (or something similar).
He died in the same year at the age of 25 – amend to 'That year he died, aged 25'?
who had Malik-Shah II executed – imo infants are not executed, but 'killed' or 'murdered'.
Be consistent about introducing place names (e.g. as the new governor of Khwarazm. (not explained) He spent a total of seven months in the city of Balkh, (explained)
The sentence ending in (Bosworth) needs to be copy edited.
There's nothing wrong with using the quote, but the author should be properly included in the sentence, not added in brackets after the quote. Apologies for not being clearer.
Amitchell125 (
talk)
16:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)reply
Can you clarify what in 1098/9 means? It could interpreted to mean different things to different readers.
Consider amending which was made easier due to Muhammad's young age, who was approximately 17 years old at the time to ‘made easier because Muhammad had yet to reach adulthood' (or something similar).
He died in the same year at the age of 25 – amend to 'That year he died, aged 25'?
who had Malik-Shah II executed – imo infants are not executed, but 'killed' or 'murdered'.