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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 ( talk · contribs) 04:23, 26 November 2018 (UTC) reply

I'll do this tomorrow.-- Sturmvogel 66 ( talk) 04:23, 26 November 2018 (UTC) reply

• No DABs, external links OK
• No overlinking
• Images appropriately licensed
• Link mangrove swamp, Cape Gloucester at first use, Langilla, barge, round, battalion, regiment, anti-aircraft gun, flagship, minesweeper, bunker, Marston Mat
  • Added. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• It was the second landing the US 1st Marine Division had conducted during the war, after Guadalcanal Awkward, perhaps a "thus far" somewhere?
  • Added. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• at first but was slowed needs a comma after "first"
  • Added. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• and in 1943 there were no roads "in 1943" reads to me like a dependent clause that needs commas, or you can move it to the end of the sentence.
  • Moved. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• 3,900 feet (1,200 m)) long
  • Added. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• Perceiving that the Allies Believing
  • Done. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• convert 3926 tons of bombs
  • Done. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• as well as 12 destroyers as well as the task force flagship Awkward. Perhaps "escorted by..."
  • Done. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• follow on troops hyphen between follow and on
  • Done. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• The same for casualty receiving station and "rear area troops"
  • Done. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• but ultimately a secondary route Why ultimately?
  • Removed ultimately. It was probably a product of my poor Australian English. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• and throughout the day the blocking position was attacked reverse these clauses
  • Reworded. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• 266 for the Japanese Which, wounded or killed? Or both?
  • Killed, adjusted now. AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
• During final days of December "the" final
• I have no idea where Razorback Ridge is, nor of any significance to it. I gather that a more-detailed map isn't available?-- Sturmvogel 66 ( talk) 17:29, 26 November 2018 (UTC) reply
  • Clarified in text. There is this map: File:Cape Gloucester - Map01.png, but I'm not sure about the licencing on that one so I wasn't game to use it. Regards, AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:35, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
    • @ Sturmvogel 66: G'day, Sturm, thanks for looking at this. I think I've addressed these points. These are my changes: [1]. Please let me know if anything else is required. Cheers, AustralianRupert ( talk) 00:37, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply
      • That map looks like a derivative of the Cape Gloucester Landing map, anyway, so no loss. Your changes look good.-- Sturmvogel 66 ( talk) 00:59, 27 November 2018 (UTC) reply