Use only "Maymandi" instead of "Ahmad Maymandi" throughout the article after you mention the full name in the first sentence.
Begin "and would thereafter rapidly rise to higher offices" with a new sentence.
"However, after a brief civil war" - remove "However".
"once again" -> "again".
Begin "which he at first rejected..." with a new sentence.
"but later in 1031 accepted" -> "but alter accepted in 1031".
Biography
Origins and early career
Use "Ahmad Maymandi" the first time you mention his name and "Maymandi" for the rest of the article instead of "Ahmad".
"However, during" -> no need for "However" here.
"was later promoted" - better if we use the year in which he was promoted instead of "later", if that is possible.
"who was much more experienced" -> "who had more administrative experience".
"shortly" - again, better if we can have the year or how shortly that happened.
"thus putting an end" -> "ending"
If you are using "Ghaznavid Empire" in the lead, make sure you use the same in the prose instead of "Ghaznavid dynasty" and "Ghaznavid kingdom".
First vizierate and downfall
Use his surname, "Maymandi" and not his name "Ahmad".
Link "vizier"
"governor of Khorasan, and tax-collector" -> remove comma
What is "ca." in "ca. 1011"? Am I missing something?
"probably also" -> remove "also".
"he in reality used" -> "he used".
"shortly " - again, better if we can have a proper time-frame.
"was then appointed" -> "was appointed".
Second vizierate and death
Again, use his surname, "Maymandi".
"He then met him" -> "He met him".
Why and when did he refuse?
"took revenge" - how?
"some time" - I strongly suggest that you use the year or suitable time-frame here.
"who, like his father, also gained the vizier office" -> "who also gained the vizier office".
"who, like Ahmad, also" -> "who also".
Sources
Do not capitalize the title in the citation even if the actual title in the source is capitalized.
That should be enough. There is no fixed time limit and you can take your time. I will only fail this nomination if you fail to respond for a very long time (a few weeks to a month or two). Regards, Yash!14:43, 21 February 2016 (UTC)reply
"but later in 1031 accepted" -> "but alter accepted in 1031". - Done.
Biography
Origins and early career
Use "Ahmad Maymandi" the first time you mention his name and "Maymandi" for the rest of the article instead of "Ahmad". - Done.
"However, during" -> no need for "However" here. - Done.
"was later promoted" - better if we use the year in which he was promoted instead of "later", if that is possible. - Unfortunately no date is mentioned.
"who was much more experienced" -> "who had more administrative experience". - Done.
"shortly" - again, better if we can have the year or how shortly that happened. - Done.
"thus putting an end" -> "ending" - Done.
If you are using "Ghaznavid Empire" in the lead, make sure you use the same in the prose instead of "Ghaznavid dynasty" and "Ghaznavid kingdom". - Will do.
First vizierate and downfall
Use his surname, "Maymandi" and not his name "Ahmad". - Done.
Link "vizier" - Done.
"governor of Khorasan, and tax-collector" -> remove comma - Done.
What is "ca." in "ca. 1011"? Am I missing something? - Removed "ca.".
"probably also" -> remove "also". - Done.
"he in reality used" -> "he used". - Done.
"shortly " - again, better if we can have a proper time-frame. - Done.
"was then appointed" -> "was appointed". - Done.
Second vizierate and death
Again, use his surname, "Maymandi". - Done.
"He then met him" -> "He met him". - Done.
Why and when did he refuse? - Will do.
"took revenge" - how? - That isn't mentioned in the sources I used.
"some time" - I strongly suggest that you use the year or suitable time-frame here. - Done.
"who, like his father, also gained the vizier office" -> "who also gained the vizier office". - Done.
Use only "Maymandi" instead of "Ahmad Maymandi" throughout the article after you mention the full name in the first sentence.
Begin "and would thereafter rapidly rise to higher offices" with a new sentence.
"However, after a brief civil war" - remove "However".
"once again" -> "again".
Begin "which he at first rejected..." with a new sentence.
"but later in 1031 accepted" -> "but alter accepted in 1031".
Biography
Origins and early career
Use "Ahmad Maymandi" the first time you mention his name and "Maymandi" for the rest of the article instead of "Ahmad".
"However, during" -> no need for "However" here.
"was later promoted" - better if we use the year in which he was promoted instead of "later", if that is possible.
"who was much more experienced" -> "who had more administrative experience".
"shortly" - again, better if we can have the year or how shortly that happened.
"thus putting an end" -> "ending"
If you are using "Ghaznavid Empire" in the lead, make sure you use the same in the prose instead of "Ghaznavid dynasty" and "Ghaznavid kingdom".
First vizierate and downfall
Use his surname, "Maymandi" and not his name "Ahmad".
Link "vizier"
"governor of Khorasan, and tax-collector" -> remove comma
What is "ca." in "ca. 1011"? Am I missing something?
"probably also" -> remove "also".
"he in reality used" -> "he used".
"shortly " - again, better if we can have a proper time-frame.
"was then appointed" -> "was appointed".
Second vizierate and death
Again, use his surname, "Maymandi".
"He then met him" -> "He met him".
Why and when did he refuse?
"took revenge" - how?
"some time" - I strongly suggest that you use the year or suitable time-frame here.
"who, like his father, also gained the vizier office" -> "who also gained the vizier office".
"who, like Ahmad, also" -> "who also".
Sources
Do not capitalize the title in the citation even if the actual title in the source is capitalized.
That should be enough. There is no fixed time limit and you can take your time. I will only fail this nomination if you fail to respond for a very long time (a few weeks to a month or two). Regards, Yash!14:43, 21 February 2016 (UTC)reply
"but later in 1031 accepted" -> "but alter accepted in 1031". - Done.
Biography
Origins and early career
Use "Ahmad Maymandi" the first time you mention his name and "Maymandi" for the rest of the article instead of "Ahmad". - Done.
"However, during" -> no need for "However" here. - Done.
"was later promoted" - better if we use the year in which he was promoted instead of "later", if that is possible. - Unfortunately no date is mentioned.
"who was much more experienced" -> "who had more administrative experience". - Done.
"shortly" - again, better if we can have the year or how shortly that happened. - Done.
"thus putting an end" -> "ending" - Done.
If you are using "Ghaznavid Empire" in the lead, make sure you use the same in the prose instead of "Ghaznavid dynasty" and "Ghaznavid kingdom". - Will do.
First vizierate and downfall
Use his surname, "Maymandi" and not his name "Ahmad". - Done.
Link "vizier" - Done.
"governor of Khorasan, and tax-collector" -> remove comma - Done.
What is "ca." in "ca. 1011"? Am I missing something? - Removed "ca.".
"probably also" -> remove "also". - Done.
"he in reality used" -> "he used". - Done.
"shortly " - again, better if we can have a proper time-frame. - Done.
"was then appointed" -> "was appointed". - Done.
Second vizierate and death
Again, use his surname, "Maymandi". - Done.
"He then met him" -> "He met him". - Done.
Why and when did he refuse? - Will do.
"took revenge" - how? - That isn't mentioned in the sources I used.
"some time" - I strongly suggest that you use the year or suitable time-frame here. - Done.
"who, like his father, also gained the vizier office" -> "who also gained the vizier office". - Done.