The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
This article has seen multiple edits since I opened this review, including some that have been reverted since the comment above, but now seems relatively stable. I will therefore look to start my review.
simongraham (
talk)
16:25, 26 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Comments
The article is of substantial length, with 8.440 words of readable prose.
The lead is a reasonable length at 618 words.
It is currently assessed as a C class article.
38.8% of authorship is by
12george1, 25.6% by
Drdpw, with contributions from 212 other users.
In the
talk page, it is noted that pages related to the season have been at risk of
vandalism. This article has been subject to vandalism, but that has been
reverted.
Please hyphenate "near average", "third costliest" "well-above average" when used as an adjective in the lead, for example in "near-average accumulated cyclone energy" and "the third-costliest Atlantic hurricane season" "a well-above-average season".
I believe "This was done after later analysis of lower chances of an El Niño during the season" should be "This was done after a later analysis of the lower chances of an El Niño during the season". Please check this and reword as needed.
Is it possible to rephrase "One disturbance over the Gulf of Mexico during the middle of the month was briefly designated as a potential tropical cyclone, but it did not organize into a tropical cyclone" to avoid the repeat of "tropical cyclone".
PTCs and TCs are there own things. The only way I could see it working is by saying just "...not organized into one" but that leaves it somewhat open to what is referring to. Though I might just be overanalyzing it.
✶Mitch199811✶12:57, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Please rephrase "The disturbance brought heavy rain to coastal Tamaulipas and coastal South Texas, but no significant impacts associated with the disturbance were reported." to avoid the duplication of "disturbance".
The final table has links for the locations impacted even though these have already been linked in the body. This is consistent with the
2019 Atlantic hurricane season, which was passed for GA on 20 August 2020.
Spot checks confirm that the accessible sources are still live. Suggest adding archive URLs.
Spot checks of Blake 2022, Masters & Henson 2022 and Saunders & Lea 2021 confirm they are all about the subject.
I cannot see Blake's first name in the report on Danielle.
I'm not sure what you're talking about with this one. The tropical cyclone report on Danielle? That was written by Robbie Berg, who I correctly mentioned --
12george1 (
talk)
05:02, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
At the bottom, it says "Forecaster Blake". If you check the
staff page, he is listed in the top middle column under "Senior Hurricane Specialists" subheading. No one else on staff at the NHC has that last name.--
12george1 (
talk)
20:09, 31 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Most of the sources are contemporary reports in newspaper articles, and thus
primary sources as defined in
WP:PRIMARYNEWS.
However, as per
WP:PRIMARYSOURCE, "Do not base an entire article on primary sources, and be cautious about basing large passages on them". Please add some secondary sources.
@
12george1: This is a real tour de force. Please look at my comments above and ping me when you would like me to take another look.
simongraham (
talk) 16:44, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
@
12george1: I see that many edits have taken place. Are you ready for me to review please?
simongraham (
talk)
19:40, 31 August 2023 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
This article has seen multiple edits since I opened this review, including some that have been reverted since the comment above, but now seems relatively stable. I will therefore look to start my review.
simongraham (
talk)
16:25, 26 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Comments
The article is of substantial length, with 8.440 words of readable prose.
The lead is a reasonable length at 618 words.
It is currently assessed as a C class article.
38.8% of authorship is by
12george1, 25.6% by
Drdpw, with contributions from 212 other users.
In the
talk page, it is noted that pages related to the season have been at risk of
vandalism. This article has been subject to vandalism, but that has been
reverted.
Please hyphenate "near average", "third costliest" "well-above average" when used as an adjective in the lead, for example in "near-average accumulated cyclone energy" and "the third-costliest Atlantic hurricane season" "a well-above-average season".
I believe "This was done after later analysis of lower chances of an El Niño during the season" should be "This was done after a later analysis of the lower chances of an El Niño during the season". Please check this and reword as needed.
Is it possible to rephrase "One disturbance over the Gulf of Mexico during the middle of the month was briefly designated as a potential tropical cyclone, but it did not organize into a tropical cyclone" to avoid the repeat of "tropical cyclone".
PTCs and TCs are there own things. The only way I could see it working is by saying just "...not organized into one" but that leaves it somewhat open to what is referring to. Though I might just be overanalyzing it.
✶Mitch199811✶12:57, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Please rephrase "The disturbance brought heavy rain to coastal Tamaulipas and coastal South Texas, but no significant impacts associated with the disturbance were reported." to avoid the duplication of "disturbance".
The final table has links for the locations impacted even though these have already been linked in the body. This is consistent with the
2019 Atlantic hurricane season, which was passed for GA on 20 August 2020.
Spot checks confirm that the accessible sources are still live. Suggest adding archive URLs.
Spot checks of Blake 2022, Masters & Henson 2022 and Saunders & Lea 2021 confirm they are all about the subject.
I cannot see Blake's first name in the report on Danielle.
I'm not sure what you're talking about with this one. The tropical cyclone report on Danielle? That was written by Robbie Berg, who I correctly mentioned --
12george1 (
talk)
05:02, 27 August 2023 (UTC)reply
At the bottom, it says "Forecaster Blake". If you check the
staff page, he is listed in the top middle column under "Senior Hurricane Specialists" subheading. No one else on staff at the NHC has that last name.--
12george1 (
talk)
20:09, 31 August 2023 (UTC)reply
Most of the sources are contemporary reports in newspaper articles, and thus
primary sources as defined in
WP:PRIMARYNEWS.
However, as per
WP:PRIMARYSOURCE, "Do not base an entire article on primary sources, and be cautious about basing large passages on them". Please add some secondary sources.
@
12george1: This is a real tour de force. Please look at my comments above and ping me when you would like me to take another look.
simongraham (
talk) 16:44, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
@
12george1: I see that many edits have taken place. Are you ready for me to review please?
simongraham (
talk)
19:40, 31 August 2023 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.