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Reviewer: MWright96 ( talk · contribs) 20:30, 27 July 2021 (UTC) reply

Am going to be reviewing this article for the July 2021 GAN Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 20:30, 27 July 2021 (UTC) reply

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a ( major aspects): b ( focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "in the 73-frame final." - hyphen should be an en dash per MOS:DASH
• "The world snooker championship was not contested again until 1964." - why was this the case?

Background

• The citation needed tag needs sorting out at the end of the second paragraph needs addressing

Summary

• "The 1957 World Professional Match-play Championship was held at Saint Helier, Jersey," - maybe include the dates of the tournament?
• "During the dead frames, which had an audience of around 80 people, Rea compiled the highest break of the match, a 92." - in which dead frame was the 92 break made?
• The term break should be wikilinked only on the first mention to the appropriate article
• "making an 85 break during the session." - in which frame was this break made during that session?
• "With the six evening frames shared between the paid," - spelling error
• "Williams then won the following frame, and added another which he won on a re-spotted black." - repetition of "won"
• "The final was over 73 frames." - maybe added the dates the final took place on
• "The highest break of the first day was 67, made by Rea." - in which frame was this 67 break made?

• The Jersey Evening Post, which has a fuller report than other sources, mentions an 88 break in frame 4 so I've added that in. BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 14:14, 28 July 2021 (UTC) reply

• "In the evening, Williams won the first frame with a 65 break that received that the Jersey Evening Post reported" - think the text in bold is unneeded
• For the same sentence, the Jersey Evening Post should be italised since it is a printed publication
• "with the highest break in the afternoon session just 34, by Kennerley." - some words missing from this sentence

Schedule

• The table can have a header included and the refs in the table moved to the header and in numerical order

References=

• All the references obtained from Google Newspapers should be mentioned as such in the via= field

Shall put the review on hold to allow the editor to address or query each of the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 13:05, 28 July 2021 (UTC) reply

Many thanks, MWright96. I've amended the article in response to all of the points above. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 14:24, 28 July 2021 (UTC) reply

@ BennyOnTheLoose: Shall now be promoting this article to GA class MWright96 (talk) 13:52, 29 July 2021 (UTC) reply