See
this glossary of Civil War artillery terms definitions of rimbase and other terms like pendulum hausse. If possible, explain how the improved sights worked and why the original sights were changed.
Thanks. I bookmarked that link. Done I rechecked the source and added more details. The source said the new sight was improved, but didn't fully explain why.
hyphenate cast iron, wrought iron
Not done The names of the Wikipedia articles for these 2 terms are not hyphenated, so it isn't clear why this is necessary.
In this form, they're a compound adjective modifying cannon, just like muzzle-loading. There are redirects for the hyphenated form
Done For the noun, it's cast iron; for the adjective, it's cast-iron, etc.
Projectile weights and range should be saved for the main body, IMO
Done Removed from introduction paragraph.
inflicting injury passive voice
Done Rewrote phrase.
Flexible isn't the appropriate term when discussing metallurgy. Use brittle and ductile with links
Done Link brittle and ductility.
What's a pendulum hausse rear sight?
Not sure I cannot find an explanation anywhere. I just used "rear sight".
Done Added "pendulum hausse" back in, but without explaining what it is, since the source didn't explain. In any case, it was replaced by an apparently superior system that I described.
The caliber was the same as that of a smoothbore 3-pounder gun, which fired a round shot with a diameter of 2.9 inches Why is this relevant or important?
Done Sentence re-phrased so it hopefully made more sense.
Can you elaborate on the different ammunition makers and why Schenkl was barred from use?
Done Rewrote this. Actually, both Schenkl and Hotchkiss shells were unsuitable for use with Parrott rifles. Added reason why Hotchkiss was not used, but source did not explain why Schenkl was also bad.
Better, but what does "too great an impact" actually mean? Did it tend to separate the shell from the sabot or something?
Done Added: Number of rifling grooves was different for 10-pounder Parrott and 3-inch Ordnance rifle. Hotchkiss sabot was torn off when fired from a 10-pounder Parrott.
Move this to the beginning of the Specifications section: The 10-pounder Parrott rifle was a muzzle-loader.
Done
57 10-pounder spell out the quantity or reword the sentence so that the quantity and name aren't adjacent
Done Removed or replaced all civilwarhome citations and moved it to Further reading.
Edit1
The civilwarhome ref was moved to Further reading and other sources were used. Add more detail about ammunition types. Questioned why hyphenation was requested. Why 2.9-inch caliber was used. More fixes are coming.
Djmaschek (
talk)
21:25, 15 August 2023 (UTC)reply
See
this glossary of Civil War artillery terms definitions of rimbase and other terms like pendulum hausse. If possible, explain how the improved sights worked and why the original sights were changed.
Thanks. I bookmarked that link. Done I rechecked the source and added more details. The source said the new sight was improved, but didn't fully explain why.
hyphenate cast iron, wrought iron
Not done The names of the Wikipedia articles for these 2 terms are not hyphenated, so it isn't clear why this is necessary.
In this form, they're a compound adjective modifying cannon, just like muzzle-loading. There are redirects for the hyphenated form
Done For the noun, it's cast iron; for the adjective, it's cast-iron, etc.
Projectile weights and range should be saved for the main body, IMO
Done Removed from introduction paragraph.
inflicting injury passive voice
Done Rewrote phrase.
Flexible isn't the appropriate term when discussing metallurgy. Use brittle and ductile with links
Done Link brittle and ductility.
What's a pendulum hausse rear sight?
Not sure I cannot find an explanation anywhere. I just used "rear sight".
Done Added "pendulum hausse" back in, but without explaining what it is, since the source didn't explain. In any case, it was replaced by an apparently superior system that I described.
The caliber was the same as that of a smoothbore 3-pounder gun, which fired a round shot with a diameter of 2.9 inches Why is this relevant or important?
Done Sentence re-phrased so it hopefully made more sense.
Can you elaborate on the different ammunition makers and why Schenkl was barred from use?
Done Rewrote this. Actually, both Schenkl and Hotchkiss shells were unsuitable for use with Parrott rifles. Added reason why Hotchkiss was not used, but source did not explain why Schenkl was also bad.
Better, but what does "too great an impact" actually mean? Did it tend to separate the shell from the sabot or something?
Done Added: Number of rifling grooves was different for 10-pounder Parrott and 3-inch Ordnance rifle. Hotchkiss sabot was torn off when fired from a 10-pounder Parrott.
Move this to the beginning of the Specifications section: The 10-pounder Parrott rifle was a muzzle-loader.
Done
57 10-pounder spell out the quantity or reword the sentence so that the quantity and name aren't adjacent
Done Removed or replaced all civilwarhome citations and moved it to Further reading.
Edit1
The civilwarhome ref was moved to Further reading and other sources were used. Add more detail about ammunition types. Questioned why hyphenation was requested. Why 2.9-inch caliber was used. More fixes are coming.
Djmaschek (
talk)
21:25, 15 August 2023 (UTC)reply