First ever article, is it ok? Templeknight7 ( talk) 10:49, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
Is this article merely an abridged version of the legislation or is it an article exploring how 'No Secrets' works? If it is the latter, you need to explain how it sits alongside the General Social Care Council's code of practice and in particular a person's right to choose. For example, what if the abused doesn't want anything done about their situation? You also need to consider how the act compliments or contravenes the Data Protection Act (1998).
Your article should also be balanced which it isn't, particularly when exploring 'the way forward'. Many people would argue for example that further legislation is unnecessary, after all vulnerable adults have the same rights as anyone else under the Offences Against the Persons Act (1968) and the Human Rights Act (1958). And that no amount of law making has ever prevented law breaking. This may not be a school of thought that you subscribe to, but it needs to be represented nevertheless.
Don't give up though, it could be an interesting article and might attract contributions from other editors.
I was also going to point out that statutes (and case law) should be underlined but having spent some time trying to do this myself, I can see why you probably didn't!--
Ykraps (
talk) 15:54, 22 June 2010 (UTC)
Just completed an article about Designer Previews. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Strohlnco/Karen_Fisher,_Designer_Previews I would like some feedback. Strohlnco ( talk) 19:38, 15 June 2010 (UTC)
Hi - I am looking on feedback on the article http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Francis_Jocky and how to create a musician's wiki with this. Unfortunately I did not find a template, if there's anything like that out there? Thanks for reviewing and suggestions. I am a huge fan of Francis Jocky and think he needs to have a wiki.
Humanpower ( talk) 17:59, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
I wrote an article on the Mohamed Mounir album El Ard... El Salam. Would someone be able to review the article please?
Voiceofplanet (
talk) 21:32, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
I wrote this article about a jewelry designer I really like. I can't believe she isn't on Wikipedia. Just wanted feedback so I could get it to stay on here. I have nevre used this before so I wanted feedback to get help on making my article good. Thank you.
Adorned8 (
talk) 21:39, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
So this was a revamp I did beginning on the 15th—my third, but only significant one. I tried getting as much information as possible, but because it's a poorly-documented establishment (excluding newspaper articles and the provincial government's education archives which were of great help), I had little to work on. What I really want to get done is the following, and I'd like a little help with how to proceed doing it:
If there's anything else you wish to add, feel free to tell me what you think. Anything is appreciated. EricLeb01 ( Page | Talk) 22:59, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
I am requesting feedback for the article entitle Global Task Force on Expanded Access to Cancer Care and Control in Developing Countries. Thank you.
Amandahgei ( talk) 22:59, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
First ever article, is it ok? Templeknight7 ( talk) 10:49, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
Is this article merely an abridged version of the legislation or is it an article exploring how 'No Secrets' works? If it is the latter, you need to explain how it sits alongside the General Social Care Council's code of practice and in particular a person's right to choose. For example, what if the abused doesn't want anything done about their situation? You also need to consider how the act compliments or contravenes the Data Protection Act (1998).
Your article should also be balanced which it isn't, particularly when exploring 'the way forward'. Many people would argue for example that further legislation is unnecessary, after all vulnerable adults have the same rights as anyone else under the Offences Against the Persons Act (1968) and the Human Rights Act (1958). And that no amount of law making has ever prevented law breaking. This may not be a school of thought that you subscribe to, but it needs to be represented nevertheless.
Don't give up though, it could be an interesting article and might attract contributions from other editors.
I was also going to point out that statutes (and case law) should be underlined but having spent some time trying to do this myself, I can see why you probably didn't!--
Ykraps (
talk) 15:54, 22 June 2010 (UTC)
Just completed an article about Designer Previews. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Strohlnco/Karen_Fisher,_Designer_Previews I would like some feedback. Strohlnco ( talk) 19:38, 15 June 2010 (UTC)
Hi - I am looking on feedback on the article http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Francis_Jocky and how to create a musician's wiki with this. Unfortunately I did not find a template, if there's anything like that out there? Thanks for reviewing and suggestions. I am a huge fan of Francis Jocky and think he needs to have a wiki.
Humanpower ( talk) 17:59, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
I wrote an article on the Mohamed Mounir album El Ard... El Salam. Would someone be able to review the article please?
Voiceofplanet (
talk) 21:32, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
I wrote this article about a jewelry designer I really like. I can't believe she isn't on Wikipedia. Just wanted feedback so I could get it to stay on here. I have nevre used this before so I wanted feedback to get help on making my article good. Thank you.
Adorned8 (
talk) 21:39, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
So this was a revamp I did beginning on the 15th—my third, but only significant one. I tried getting as much information as possible, but because it's a poorly-documented establishment (excluding newspaper articles and the provincial government's education archives which were of great help), I had little to work on. What I really want to get done is the following, and I'd like a little help with how to proceed doing it:
If there's anything else you wish to add, feel free to tell me what you think. Anything is appreciated. EricLeb01 ( Page | Talk) 22:59, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
I am requesting feedback for the article entitle Global Task Force on Expanded Access to Cancer Care and Control in Developing Countries. Thank you.
Amandahgei ( talk) 22:59, 20 June 2010 (UTC)