Please try and add additional reliable references to the article, and add names to the references already there, like this:

Example sentence <ref>[http://www.example.com/article/2345|Example article name]</ref>

Hope you understand. Chevy monte carlo - alt 05:30, 25 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Good job, but you will need possibly a few more reliable references\sources, to prove that he is notable enough for an encyclopedia article and (especially because he's a living person) to prove the accuracy of the article. Social networks, youtube, ect. can't be used. Looks pretty good though! Do you need help with making the picture work? ~ Qwerp Qwertus · Contact Me  · 19:58, 22 July 2010 (UTC) reply

You might also want to add an infobox to the article as well; you can use a preset template such as Template:Infobox person or something similar. Chevy monte carlo - alt 05:28, 25 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Sorry, the article seems to have been deleted for being spam/advertising. In future you need to try and make your article's tone more neutral. Chevy monte carlo - alt 05:26, 25 July 2010 (UTC) reply

I think there are problems with the tone and language of the article; at the moment it sounds like an advertisement. Please see WP:TONE or WP:POV for more information. Please try and make the article's tone more neutral. Phrases like 'is one of the world's most widely read and cited peer-reviewed academic urban journals' can remain in the article but only if there's references to prove that. Chevy monte carlo - alt 05:24, 25 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Welcome to Wikipedia! There are some issues with your proposed article.

The following should be helpful:

• Help:Getting started
• Your first article
• What Wikipedia is not

A few more points:

• the image used in your article does not appear to be copyright-free since it is linked to the person's website.
• The article uses no references and no inline citations. Please take a look at Citing sources. Citing sources for asserted facts helsp to prove an article's Notability, a key component of Wikipedia.

Hope that helps. Shearonink ( talk) 18:29, 22 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Nice work with the links, but as Shearonink says you need to try and use inline citations to display them correctly. Chevy monte carlo - alt 05:21, 25 July 2010 (UTC) reply

please delete

Do you want me to delete the article? Send me a message here, thanks. I'll provide a brief review for you anyway. You might want to consider adding an infobox and more reliable references. Also if you can try and add more links. Chevy monte carlo

Jazz Singer/Actor Jonny Fair

Okay, Wikipedia cannot be used as a reference, so please remove those references. I see you have made a few mistakes with the references, so here's an example of how it should be done:

Bob went to London <ref>[http://www.bobsmith.com/blog/125|Bob Smith's blog]</ref>.

The actual references need to be in the main part of the article, not in the references section. The references section is just for displaying the references. You need to add a {{reflist}} tag to the references section, so it will display all the references on the page with Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page). tags at the bottom in a list. Hope you understand! If you don't, please send me a message. Chevy monte carlo 05:12, 25 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Much improved in general from previous versions.

The following areas are still of concern:

• The details of the two boys' deaths (Johnathan Ball and Tim Parry), seem to be somewhat co-mingled. See Warrington bomb attacks.
• Tone of article still needs to be adjusted, for instance, another word should be substituted for "our" (as in "Our Peace Charter)
• History and Foundation Activities sections need to be sourced within the article itself as in Citing sources.
• Infobox list of Patrons (under Key people) is confusing to the casual viewer. Maybe list patrons in a separate section at the end of the article itself? (Participation by Notable people can sometimes be an indication of an article's Notability.)

Shearonink ( talk) 17:39, 22 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Please try and add suitable names to the references of the article, like this:

<ref>[http://www.newspaper.com/article/124|Newspaper article]</ref>

I hope you understand. If you don't please send me a message. Also, there's tone problems with the article. It sounds like an advertisement. Please try and rewrite it to try and make it more neutral. For more information on this please see WP:TONE or WP:POV. Thanks. Chevy monte carlo 08:46, 23 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Please try and add suitable names to the references of the article, like this:

<ref>[http://www.newspaper.com/article/124|Newspaper article]</ref>

I hope you understand. If you don't please send me a message. Thanks. Chevy monte carlo 08:42, 23 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Hi, as the template box at the top of the article says, please try and rewrite the article in a more neutral point of view/style, because at the moment the article sounds like an advertisement for the company. If it sounds like an ad it's likely to just get deleted for spam reasons, so I recommend that you do this. More information on tone and language styles on Wikipedia are available at WP:TONE or WP:POV. Thanks. Chevy monte carlo 08:40, 23 July 2010 (UTC) reply

Please add suitable names to the references, like this:

<ref>[http://www.newspaper.com/article/124|Newspaper article]</ref>

I can see you've used inline citations to display your references, and that is great, but the references just need some names. It's better to have a descriptive name that is useful to the reader rather than just a bare URL. Also please try and do the same to the external links as well, as they have the same problem. As well as this, I think you should try adding sections to the article, just to try and break up the long paragraphs you have at the moment. Finally, I think an infobox would be great. You can use a template like Template:Infobox person or something similar. Thanks. Chevy monte carlo 08:37, 23 July 2010 (UTC) reply