The Origin of Species
Dave and I have been doing a lot of recent work on this article and I would like some other feedback on how we (or I, if Dave is too busy) can improve it. Thanks. StudyAndBeWise 03:38, 13 January 2007 (UTC)
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I just spent some time updating a different article, I found on the request for peer review page, but a review of The Origin of Species would be appreciated. Thanks.
StudyAndBeWise 01:38, 17 January 2007 (UTC)
The Origin of Species
Dave and I have been doing a lot of recent work on this article and I would like some other feedback on how we (or I, if Dave is too busy) can improve it. Thanks. StudyAndBeWise 03:38, 13 January 2007 (UTC)
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- Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article. [?]
- Per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 01Miles, use 01 Miles, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 01 Miles. [?] - Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb. [?]
- Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006. [?]
- Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==. [?]
- There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
- Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: defense (A) (British: defence), categorise (B) (American: categorize), ization (A) (British: isation), any more (B) (American: anymore), curb (A) (British: kerb).
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
Allpigs are pink, so we thought ofa number ofways to turn them green.”
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a. [?]
You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, StudyAndBeWise 05:37, 13 January 2007 (UTC)
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I just spent some time updating a different article, I found on the request for peer review page, but a review of The Origin of Species would be appreciated. Thanks.
StudyAndBeWise 01:38, 17 January 2007 (UTC)