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Hello and thanks to whoever picks this up! I've listed this article for peer review because I may potentially take this article up for Featured Article status in the future. It has been reviewed and listed as a Good Article, and I just want to see what would be the best actions to take in fixing it up, and what information needs to be included/excluded, stuff like that. ̶O̶n̶ ̶t̶o̶p̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶t̶h̶a̶t̶,̶ ̶I̶ ̶a̶m̶ ̶a̶l̶s̶o̶ ̶w̶a̶i̶t̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶f̶o̶r̶ ̶s̶o̶m̶e̶o̶n̶e̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶p̶i̶c̶k̶ ̶i̶t̶ ̶u̶p̶ ̶f̶o̶r̶ ̶a̶ ̶c̶o̶p̶y̶e̶d̶i̶t̶,̶ ̶s̶o̶ ̶m̶a̶n̶y̶ ̶c̶h̶a̶n̶g̶e̶s̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶a̶r̶t̶i̶c̶l̶e̶'̶s̶ ̶g̶r̶a̶m̶m̶a̶r̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ ̶s̶e̶n̶t̶e̶n̶c̶e̶ ̶s̶t̶r̶u̶c̶t̶u̶r̶e̶s̶ ̶w̶i̶l̶l̶ ̶t̶a̶k̶e̶ ̶p̶l̶a̶c̶e̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ ̶m̶a̶y̶ ̶o̶r̶ ̶m̶a̶y̶ ̶n̶o̶t̶ ̶b̶e̶ ̶a̶ ̶h̶u̶g̶e̶ ̶p̶r̶i̶o̶r̶i̶t̶y̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶t̶h̶i̶s̶ ̶r̶e̶v̶i̶e̶w̶.̶ (Copyedit finished)
Once again, thanks from NowIsntItTime( chats)( doings) 03:26, 19 October 2019 (UTC)
Sorry for the long wait. My thoughts, broken into rough categories:
Overall I think the article is in decent shape, but it needs some substantial work before it's ready for FAC. -- Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 14:59, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
Hey not a problem, sometimes it will take as long as it takes to get back to someone and that's ok...
I saw your first three issues earlier when you posted them on my talk page, and I think I fixed/clarified the sentences:
[...] it was released internationally by Filmways Pictures. Despite performing well in Germany and Japan, Roar was a box office bomb, with a worldwide gross of $2 million against a $17 million budget.
Since then, I fixed the Will Hutchins and Zakes Mokae issue, along with a few misplaced sentences you addressed above. The article has been provided with the origin of "most dangerous movie ever made" and who called it "the most expensive home movie". I took out reference to Griffith's best friend "Patsy" and replaced it with "she was replaced by a friend", hope this doesn't sound weasely, but if it does I will immediately change/remove it. I also have removed the Cinemastance, CutPrintFilm, Birth.Movies.Death, scvhistory.com, and Flixist sources...but I have a question as to whether I should keep or remove a citation from the legacy section for an interview with Hedren for the Daily Mail. While the source is known to be unreliable, it is only used in the article's passage for what she said and nothing more, but I can easily replace it something else.
Oh and I removed the two non-free images and the audio file.
Will address the other issues you have listed here soon. - NowIsntItTime( chats)( doings) 20:58, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
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Hello and thanks to whoever picks this up! I've listed this article for peer review because I may potentially take this article up for Featured Article status in the future. It has been reviewed and listed as a Good Article, and I just want to see what would be the best actions to take in fixing it up, and what information needs to be included/excluded, stuff like that. ̶O̶n̶ ̶t̶o̶p̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶t̶h̶a̶t̶,̶ ̶I̶ ̶a̶m̶ ̶a̶l̶s̶o̶ ̶w̶a̶i̶t̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶f̶o̶r̶ ̶s̶o̶m̶e̶o̶n̶e̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶p̶i̶c̶k̶ ̶i̶t̶ ̶u̶p̶ ̶f̶o̶r̶ ̶a̶ ̶c̶o̶p̶y̶e̶d̶i̶t̶,̶ ̶s̶o̶ ̶m̶a̶n̶y̶ ̶c̶h̶a̶n̶g̶e̶s̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶a̶r̶t̶i̶c̶l̶e̶'̶s̶ ̶g̶r̶a̶m̶m̶a̶r̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ ̶s̶e̶n̶t̶e̶n̶c̶e̶ ̶s̶t̶r̶u̶c̶t̶u̶r̶e̶s̶ ̶w̶i̶l̶l̶ ̶t̶a̶k̶e̶ ̶p̶l̶a̶c̶e̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ ̶m̶a̶y̶ ̶o̶r̶ ̶m̶a̶y̶ ̶n̶o̶t̶ ̶b̶e̶ ̶a̶ ̶h̶u̶g̶e̶ ̶p̶r̶i̶o̶r̶i̶t̶y̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶t̶h̶i̶s̶ ̶r̶e̶v̶i̶e̶w̶.̶ (Copyedit finished)
Once again, thanks from NowIsntItTime( chats)( doings) 03:26, 19 October 2019 (UTC)
Sorry for the long wait. My thoughts, broken into rough categories:
Overall I think the article is in decent shape, but it needs some substantial work before it's ready for FAC. -- Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 14:59, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
Hey not a problem, sometimes it will take as long as it takes to get back to someone and that's ok...
I saw your first three issues earlier when you posted them on my talk page, and I think I fixed/clarified the sentences:
[...] it was released internationally by Filmways Pictures. Despite performing well in Germany and Japan, Roar was a box office bomb, with a worldwide gross of $2 million against a $17 million budget.
Since then, I fixed the Will Hutchins and Zakes Mokae issue, along with a few misplaced sentences you addressed above. The article has been provided with the origin of "most dangerous movie ever made" and who called it "the most expensive home movie". I took out reference to Griffith's best friend "Patsy" and replaced it with "she was replaced by a friend", hope this doesn't sound weasely, but if it does I will immediately change/remove it. I also have removed the Cinemastance, CutPrintFilm, Birth.Movies.Death, scvhistory.com, and Flixist sources...but I have a question as to whether I should keep or remove a citation from the legacy section for an interview with Hedren for the Daily Mail. While the source is known to be unreliable, it is only used in the article's passage for what she said and nothing more, but I can easily replace it something else.
Oh and I removed the two non-free images and the audio file.
Will address the other issues you have listed here soon. - NowIsntItTime( chats)( doings) 20:58, 23 December 2019 (UTC)