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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm preparing it for FAC. Will not close the PR until I'm given the green light. I'm mostly here for a thorough prose review.
Thanks, Wolverine XI ( talk to me) 08:34, 5 April 2024 (UTC)
No idea how much time I have, but happy to make a start with a review here:
The narwhal inhabits Arctic waters, and is only vulnerable to predatory attacks from polar bears, orcas and humans.. The word only doesn't seem supported by the body (right?). Probably reads easier without too
Its name is derived from the Old Norse word nárfeels awkward, aybe rewrite as --> Its name comes from the Old Norse word nár, meaning "corpse," which possibly refers to the animal's gray, mottled skin and its habit of remaining motionless at the water's surface, a behavior known as "logging" that usually happens in the summer.
During summer population counts along different coastal inlets of Baffin Island, calf numbers varied from 0.05% to 5% of the total numbering from 10,000 to 35,000 narwhals, suggesting that higher calf counts may reflect calving and nursery habitats in favourable inlets. Can you rephrase, perhaps in two sentences?
altering sea ice coverage in their environment, especially in their northern wintering grounds such as the Baffin Bay and Davis Strait regions. --> due to sea ice decline. More concise.
They emerged during the late Pliocene epoch and, therefore, must have undergone adaptation to glacials and climate change. This implies they may be adaptable to current climate change. The paper is however about a region where there was temporarily more sea ice. Better to use more recent sourcing.
That's all from me. Overall, it's probably best to first focus on sourcing. You cite quite a few old archived websites and scientific papers. Do newer sources (from the last 10-15 years, sometimes last 5 years) still agree? When you've updated your sources, a visit to WP:GOCE can't harm. I'm not the best with prose, but could easily give suggestions.
—Femke 🐦 ( talk) 20:12, 20 April 2024 (UTC), 07:56, 21 April 2024 (UTC), 13:07, 21 April 2024 (UTC)
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm preparing it for FAC. Will not close the PR until I'm given the green light. I'm mostly here for a thorough prose review.
Thanks, Wolverine XI ( talk to me) 08:34, 5 April 2024 (UTC)
No idea how much time I have, but happy to make a start with a review here:
The narwhal inhabits Arctic waters, and is only vulnerable to predatory attacks from polar bears, orcas and humans.. The word only doesn't seem supported by the body (right?). Probably reads easier without too
Its name is derived from the Old Norse word nárfeels awkward, aybe rewrite as --> Its name comes from the Old Norse word nár, meaning "corpse," which possibly refers to the animal's gray, mottled skin and its habit of remaining motionless at the water's surface, a behavior known as "logging" that usually happens in the summer.
During summer population counts along different coastal inlets of Baffin Island, calf numbers varied from 0.05% to 5% of the total numbering from 10,000 to 35,000 narwhals, suggesting that higher calf counts may reflect calving and nursery habitats in favourable inlets. Can you rephrase, perhaps in two sentences?
altering sea ice coverage in their environment, especially in their northern wintering grounds such as the Baffin Bay and Davis Strait regions. --> due to sea ice decline. More concise.
They emerged during the late Pliocene epoch and, therefore, must have undergone adaptation to glacials and climate change. This implies they may be adaptable to current climate change. The paper is however about a region where there was temporarily more sea ice. Better to use more recent sourcing.
That's all from me. Overall, it's probably best to first focus on sourcing. You cite quite a few old archived websites and scientific papers. Do newer sources (from the last 10-15 years, sometimes last 5 years) still agree? When you've updated your sources, a visit to WP:GOCE can't harm. I'm not the best with prose, but could easily give suggestions.
—Femke 🐦 ( talk) 20:12, 20 April 2024 (UTC), 07:56, 21 April 2024 (UTC), 13:07, 21 April 2024 (UTC)