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I've listed this article for peer review because it's had major overhaul. It was WAY too technical (e.g. a debate among dentists instead of an article for a layperson), had many
WP:COI issues and depended heavily on primary sources. The entire text and structure was changed and many pictures added. References are almost all either textbook, meta analysis or Cochrane reviews. A few primary papers remain, but these are "landmark" papers that discuss a very small topic in the article. It needs an editorial review especially for information that comes off as too technical.
Thanks,
Ian Furst (
talk) 19:04, 19 November 2013 (UTC)
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Suggestions generated by an automatic JavaScript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
[?]
Done but would appreciate a second set of eyes for redundancy - Consider adding more
links to the article; per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (links) and
Wikipedia:Build the web, create links to relevant articles.
[?] Done
- Avoid including
galleries in articles, as per
Wikipedia:Galleries. Common solutions to this problem include moving the gallery to
wikicommons or integrating images with the text.
[?]
Not done see below
- concepts are difficult to describe without pictures; each gallery is appropriate in my opinion as per; "if a collection of images can illustrate aspects of a subject that cannot be easily or adequately described by text or individual images". Same with use of GIFs in article, only used where stepwise progression is useful tool in understanding a concept or when showing the implant then xray allows the reader to better understand a concept.
- titles added and reformatted as per
Wikipedia:Galleries Done
- concepts are difficult to describe without pictures; each gallery is appropriate in my opinion as per; "if a collection of images can illustrate aspects of a subject that cannot be easily or adequately described by text or individual images". Same with use of GIFs in article, only used where stepwise progression is useful tool in understanding a concept or when showing the implant then xray allows the reader to better understand a concept.
- Per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 13mm, use 13 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 13 mm. [?] Done - As per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), please do not
link words in headings.
[?] Done
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) may be too long – consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
Wikipedia:Summary style.
[?] Done
- Went back and forth a lot on this; finally decided the ToC looked too complex and no one would use it, so I've removed the 3rd order headings
- There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
Allpigs are pink, so we thought ofa number ofways to turn them green.” Done major rework of lead and first section to satisfy
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a. [?]
You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas.
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Dental implant links to 1 disambiguation page (
SEM) Done
Dental implant
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because it's had major overhaul. It was WAY too technical (e.g. a debate among dentists instead of an article for a layperson), had many
WP:COI issues and depended heavily on primary sources. The entire text and structure was changed and many pictures added. References are almost all either textbook, meta analysis or Cochrane reviews. A few primary papers remain, but these are "landmark" papers that discuss a very small topic in the article. It needs an editorial review especially for information that comes off as too technical.
Thanks,
Ian Furst (
talk) 19:04, 19 November 2013 (UTC)
Suggestions generated by an automatic JavaScript program
Suggestions generated by an automatic JavaScript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
[?] Done but would appreciate a second set of eyes for redundancy
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (links) and
Wikipedia:Build the web, create links to relevant articles.
[?] Done
- Avoid including
galleries in articles, as per
Wikipedia:Galleries. Common solutions to this problem include moving the gallery to
wikicommons or integrating images with the text.
[?] Not done see below
- concepts are difficult to describe without pictures; each gallery is appropriate in my opinion as per; "if a collection of images can illustrate aspects of a subject that cannot be easily or adequately described by text or individual images". Same with use of GIFs in article, only used where stepwise progression is useful tool in understanding a concept or when showing the implant then xray allows the reader to better understand a concept.
- titles added and reformatted as per
Wikipedia:Galleries Done
- concepts are difficult to describe without pictures; each gallery is appropriate in my opinion as per; "if a collection of images can illustrate aspects of a subject that cannot be easily or adequately described by text or individual images". Same with use of GIFs in article, only used where stepwise progression is useful tool in understanding a concept or when showing the implant then xray allows the reader to better understand a concept.
- Per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 13mm, use 13 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 13 mm. [?] Done - As per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), please do not
link words in headings.
[?] Done
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) may be too long – consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
Wikipedia:Summary style.
[?] Done
- Went back and forth a lot on this; finally decided the ToC looked too complex and no one would use it, so I've removed the 3rd order headings
- There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
Allpigs are pink, so we thought ofa number ofways to turn them green.” Done major rework of lead and first section to satisfy
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a. [?]
You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas.
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Dental implant links to 1 disambiguation page (
SEM) Done