Autism
I edited the first paragraph of the Asperger's and Kenner's Syndrome segment for clarity and brevity. -- JSeer 7:55, 29 Jan 2005
This article has a lot of good information about autism and it has the potential to become much better than it is. However, some parts need some POV help and a good overview from someone who knows a lot about this issue. -- Szyslak 11:24, 15 Dec 2004 (UTC)
- I support this candidate --
Dorfl
- Dorfl, this isn't WP:FAC. - Ta bu shi da yu 04:22, 31 Dec 2004 (UTC)
- I can see a lot of effort has gone into this. I suspect that the parents of an autist child have edited this article: if you're reading this then my heart goes out to you. It makes what I'm about to say to be so much harder.
- I have rewritten the first sentence of the history section to be more NPOV.
- "Historically, autistics were widely thought of being doomed to no possible improvement at all. This lack of expectations led to a self-fullfiling prophecy of observing no improvement in autistics with heavy Institutional damage, which was in turn due to the idea that autistics can't improve." This needs a source.
- "Research has suggested that although autistic children are attached to their parents, their expression of this attachment is unusual and difficult to "read."" Which research has shown this please? We need to be able to verify this information.
- The footnotes should be in the format Wikipedia:Footnotes.
- What is a "refrigerator mother"? I honestly have never heard of that term, though a person who deals with Autism probably would. Could we have that further explained?
- The section "Aspects of autism" has the words "Some things to mention here". That's close to a peacock phrase, and it needs to be changed. Also, the bullets should be converted to prose. I found it hard to read the section (blame this on tiredness), so I'm not sure how much I can comment on it.
- The references section needs to be like we suggest in Wikipedia:Cite sources.
- One further issue: the page is 46KB long. This usually indicates that some sections should be placed into their own article and that new article should be summarised in summary form.
- I will definitely support this article on WP:FAC once these problems are resolved. I think this is a great article and does much to help with people's understanding of Autism. The authors should all be congratulated on a fine effort! - Ta bu shi da yu 04:22, 31 Dec 2004 (UTC)
Autism
I edited the first paragraph of the Asperger's and Kenner's Syndrome segment for clarity and brevity. -- JSeer 7:55, 29 Jan 2005
This article has a lot of good information about autism and it has the potential to become much better than it is. However, some parts need some POV help and a good overview from someone who knows a lot about this issue. -- Szyslak 11:24, 15 Dec 2004 (UTC)
- I support this candidate --
Dorfl
- Dorfl, this isn't WP:FAC. - Ta bu shi da yu 04:22, 31 Dec 2004 (UTC)
- I can see a lot of effort has gone into this. I suspect that the parents of an autist child have edited this article: if you're reading this then my heart goes out to you. It makes what I'm about to say to be so much harder.
- I have rewritten the first sentence of the history section to be more NPOV.
- "Historically, autistics were widely thought of being doomed to no possible improvement at all. This lack of expectations led to a self-fullfiling prophecy of observing no improvement in autistics with heavy Institutional damage, which was in turn due to the idea that autistics can't improve." This needs a source.
- "Research has suggested that although autistic children are attached to their parents, their expression of this attachment is unusual and difficult to "read."" Which research has shown this please? We need to be able to verify this information.
- The footnotes should be in the format Wikipedia:Footnotes.
- What is a "refrigerator mother"? I honestly have never heard of that term, though a person who deals with Autism probably would. Could we have that further explained?
- The section "Aspects of autism" has the words "Some things to mention here". That's close to a peacock phrase, and it needs to be changed. Also, the bullets should be converted to prose. I found it hard to read the section (blame this on tiredness), so I'm not sure how much I can comment on it.
- The references section needs to be like we suggest in Wikipedia:Cite sources.
- One further issue: the page is 46KB long. This usually indicates that some sections should be placed into their own article and that new article should be summarised in summary form.
- I will definitely support this article on WP:FAC once these problems are resolved. I think this is a great article and does much to help with people's understanding of Autism. The authors should all be congratulated on a fine effort! - Ta bu shi da yu 04:22, 31 Dec 2004 (UTC)