This rewrite is roughly six months in the making, its still not done entirely, but at this point the major overhaul is as complete as I think I am going to get without getting a second opinion (or third, or fourth, or...well you get the idea :-). I'm offering a spelling star to the first person whose brave enough to take on the article, otherwise I'm all ears as to what I can do further improve the article. The goal, as always, is FA-class. TomStar81 ( Talk) 08:40, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
Feedback on these new improvements would be appreciated. TomStar81 ( Talk) 05:43, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
Very nice, overall (as usual!); but a few minor points that ought to be cleaned up:
Keep up the great work! Kirill 03:06, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
Excellent article. Just a few comments
That's all I can catch off the top of my head. All the best with taking the article forward! Cam ( Chat) 01:45, 30 March 2008 (UTC)
Hey, Tom! Sorry for the delay. I only had time for a quick glance, but I found a number of things that would indicate a rough go at FAC. There's actually quite a lot of MoS cleanup needed; I suggest you ask Epbr123 ( talk · contribs) to run through (after you've cleaned up the citations), as he's prompt and thorough. Are terms like Montana-class and Essex-class hyphenated or not? The article is inconsistent. See my one edit for the issues I found only in the lead. There are missing conversions on many units also, and inconsistent date formatting in your citations, missing publishers, WP:MOSNUM issues, mix ups in hyphens, MOS:CAPS#All caps issues, WP:DASH issues (no unspaced emdashes), punctuation problems on WP:MOS#Captions and I found a long sentence in the lead which may indicate you should get someone fresh to run through the prose. I wouldn't recommend coming to FAC until someone else has gone through the prose, all citations are complete and consistent, and Epbr123 has run through on MoS issues. I wish I had time to just dig in and do some of this for you, but alas, my time is more constained these days. Good luck, and hope to see you at FAC soon! SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 23:35, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
This rewrite is roughly six months in the making, its still not done entirely, but at this point the major overhaul is as complete as I think I am going to get without getting a second opinion (or third, or fourth, or...well you get the idea :-). I'm offering a spelling star to the first person whose brave enough to take on the article, otherwise I'm all ears as to what I can do further improve the article. The goal, as always, is FA-class. TomStar81 ( Talk) 08:40, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
Feedback on these new improvements would be appreciated. TomStar81 ( Talk) 05:43, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
Very nice, overall (as usual!); but a few minor points that ought to be cleaned up:
Keep up the great work! Kirill 03:06, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
Excellent article. Just a few comments
That's all I can catch off the top of my head. All the best with taking the article forward! Cam ( Chat) 01:45, 30 March 2008 (UTC)
Hey, Tom! Sorry for the delay. I only had time for a quick glance, but I found a number of things that would indicate a rough go at FAC. There's actually quite a lot of MoS cleanup needed; I suggest you ask Epbr123 ( talk · contribs) to run through (after you've cleaned up the citations), as he's prompt and thorough. Are terms like Montana-class and Essex-class hyphenated or not? The article is inconsistent. See my one edit for the issues I found only in the lead. There are missing conversions on many units also, and inconsistent date formatting in your citations, missing publishers, WP:MOSNUM issues, mix ups in hyphens, MOS:CAPS#All caps issues, WP:DASH issues (no unspaced emdashes), punctuation problems on WP:MOS#Captions and I found a long sentence in the lead which may indicate you should get someone fresh to run through the prose. I wouldn't recommend coming to FAC until someone else has gone through the prose, all citations are complete and consistent, and Epbr123 has run through on MoS issues. I wish I had time to just dig in and do some of this for you, but alas, my time is more constained these days. Good luck, and hope to see you at FAC soon! SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 23:35, 10 April 2008 (UTC)