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I’ve taken on an assignment to help McKinsey & Company improve their Wikipedia article through discussion and collaboration. Much of the content on the article is highly controversial and so I’ve prepared a Talk page note to discuss, provide sources and information. Would anyone be willing to give me a second opinion on my neutrality and whether my suggestions are fair before I share it? See my draft here. User:King4057 (COI Disclosure on User Page) 20:44, 4 April 2012 (UTC)
I'm wondering if any cooperating people want to help User:Mdubakov out. He wants an article about his software, TargetProcess. I CSDed it and then Malik Shabazz deleted it. I haven't really got time to advise on COI stuff, so I leave it in your collective capable hands. See User talk:Tom Morris#TargetProcess page deletion for more details. — Tom Morris ( talk) 12:15, 17 April 2012 (UTC)
I had a quick look. The Dr. Dobbs citation is promisingly reliable. Any more like that? You can reference your own site but third party cites are preferred WP:3PARTY. The article itself needs work. It looks like a marketing datasheet of bullet list features not an encyclopedia article. Take a look at some articles marked " good" or (a notch up) " featured" to get the idea. Also put the {{Request edit}} template on the talk page of your sand box. It might get more eyeballs on your draft. Good luck! hth Woz2 ( talk) 14:45, 25 April 2012 (UTC)
I've previously posted on this page to ask for help with the Strayer University article, and would now like to request assistance with a new draft I have prepared for the Jack Welch Management Institute. JWMI is an online business program, founded by Jack Welch and now owned by Strayer University. The institute does not currently have its own article, although I believe that it meets the GNG: there are multiple reliable sources that feature the institute and provide enough detail for an overview of its history and academic programs. Also, searching for "Jack Welch Institute" incorrectly directs readers to the Chancellor University article. While the institute was founded at Chancellor, it was acquired by Strayer University in November 2011. With advice and support from William Beutler (WWB), I've created a new draft article and added this to my userspace. Due to Strayer's connection with the institute, I'd rather not move the article into live space myself and I hope that editors here are able to help. It should be noted that this draft is not an exhaustive article on the institute but rather an overview, providing key, encyclopedic details. I think it is mostly complete, but other editors may want to add more information once the article is live. The draft has 2 main sections, plus an introduction, references, and external links:
I look forward to editors' feedback on the draft. I have this page on my watchlist and I'll respond to questions as soon as I can. Thanks. -- Hamilton83 ( talk) 16:06, 27 April 2012 (UTC)
Per my note above, I recently prepared a new draft article for the Jack Welch Management Institute, but after an initial review realized there were some edits I needed to make before it was ready. I've now made the changes to the draft article that I had in mind and it is ready for editors to review again. Please can you take a look at the current version of the draft and let me know if there are any edits needed or if it is ready to be moved live? Your comments are welcome here, or in the thread above. Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 12:52, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
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Dear Wikipedia colleagues,
I would like to propose a number of changes to this article as many of the facts within are now currently out of date. I represent the company in a communications capacity and I am therefore a trustworthy source of information for this page. Links and references to articles to validate all the amendments I'm proposing are also enclosed.
I have provided the link to all recommended revisions and would be grateful of assistance with this matter.
http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Infront_Sports_%26_Media&diff=476127845&oldid=475589201
To summarise the changes I am proposing cover the following:
Thanks for your assistance.
I've posted here before, asking for help with the article for the Jack Welch Management Institute, and I'm now working on suggestions to improve the article for the institute's founder Jack Welch, which I'd like to ask for some help with. I've recently made some suggestions on the article's Talk page to address issues such as outdated information in the article's introduction and infobox, and the lack of information on his post-GE career. I'd appreciate if editors here could review these suggestions and make the edits if you're able to do so. Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 21:01, 31 May 2012 (UTC)
Thanks so much again to Woz2 for helping me with the Jack Welch Management Institute article. I've just uploaded a logo to be added to the infobox: File:Jack Welch Management Institute Logo.png. Could someone here please add this to the article for me? Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 19:33, 6 June 2012 (UTC)
Back in March, WWB Too and Silverseren collaborated on a new article for Jesse Thomas here. Following on from that, I'd like to ask for some help updating the article with a photo for the infobox and fixing a few little typos that happened later due to copyediting by other editors. Just to clarify, this request is on behalf of JESS3, so I'd rather not make any direct edits myself. I've added an edit request on the talk page with a list of the typos and link to the photo to add to the infobox. Any help would be gratefully received. Thanks in advance, 16912 Rhiannon ( talk) 21:49, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
Thank you Silverseren for your help with my previous requests. Since my last post on this page, I've made some more suggestions on the Talk page for Jack Welch's article regarding changes to help improve its content. The new suggestions include adding material to the new "Post-GE career" section and removal of unsourced criticisms. If any editors here are able to review the edits I've suggested and make them edits if they agree, I would be grateful. Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 14:36, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
Hi all, new project here. On behalf of the Managed Funds Association, an association representing the alternative investment industry, I've recently researched and written three new drafts of existing articles on financial topics. Each of these drafts is proposed as a replacement for an existing but underdeveloped, poorly written article, with few (if any) citations.
All three drafts are in my user space:
Since these three topics are very closely linked, with overlapping histories and regulation, I've worked on them at the same time. Some of the same sources are used in all three drafts and some of the material is very similar if not largely the same. It might make sense for editors who review the articles to look at them together, but if you would prefer not to, I'd recommend reviewing the draft for Commodity Pool Operator first.
Out of the three articles, the current article for Commodity Pool Operator is the worst. The entire article is just five sentences long, and it begins with a quote from the National Futures Association's official definition of a CPO. The definition is not easy for a layperson to understand, and there are no wikilinks to concepts mentioned such as "commodity pool" or "futures contracts" that would help someone understand them.
The draft I've prepared is very simple and aims to provide a general overview of what a CPO is and how this entity has developed. (The structure and content is similar in the CTA and Managed futures account drafts.) Below, I've explained in a little detail what is now included in the CPO draft:
I appreciate this is a complicated topic, so I'm also going to post a note to the Talk page at WikiProject Finance to see if anyone there is able to help review. However, that WikiProject is not quite as active as this, so I hope that editors can help here, even if not experts in the field. If you have any questions at all, please reply here and I'll respond as soon as I'm able. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 14:33, 25 May 2012 (UTC)
You plagiarised USCFTC. Recheck your articles where you cite USCFTC, in particular, the sentence regarding the length of time commodities have been traded is direct plagiarism.
Fifelfoo: Legal articles in student law journals are allowed, and can be cited by a United States court as authoritative in the opinion of the judge. Why wouldn't we on Wikipedia allow a similar legal publication to be used as a source? Pine ✉ 06:30, 28 May 2012 (UTC)
I just wanted to note this discussion as to why Fifelfoo is here. I am not making a bearing on whether his comments above are legitimate (some look like they are, some look like they aren't), but I am noting that there seems to be a bias in dealing with this page. Silver seren C 17:52, 28 May 2012 (UTC)
Thanks again for everyone's input here, it's great to get varied points of view on my drafts. Further to the discussion above, I've now placed a note at WP:RS/N to Seek additional opinions about whether Lexology.com can be used as a source. Pending a reply, I've left the source in my drafts and will take whatever action the editors there suggest. One possible option is to replace Lexology with an article in the Wall Street Journal and possibly also an article from Hedgeweek that describe the CFTC rules change, albeit not as clearly.
The updates I've made, including diffs to illustrate:
Here are links to the three updated History sections:
If you'd like to look at these again now and let me know if this has solved the issues raised by Fifelfoo above, I would be grateful. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 22:15, 30 May 2012 (UTC)
Hi again, John and any others following this discussion. Short version of the below: based on further research, and feedback from my clients, I agree the suggested changes are reasonable, and I've updated all three drafts accordingly. You can see all the changes in the diffs I've linked below:
The specific changes I've made to the drafts in my userspace are as follows:
While I've added the detail about the lawsuit (using this Bloomberg article as a citation), I'm curious as to what others think about including this. Compared to the other information in the drafts, which take a broader historical view, information about the lawsuit is likely to become dated very quickly and need to be updated.
For added convenience, some additional relevant links:
I'm open to more feedback if there is any, or, if there is consensus for moving the drafts into article space, I'm more than open to that as well. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 17:19, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
After a request on my talk page from WWB Too, I have completed a history merge of all three articles. However, after I did that, I started to wonder whether Commodity Pool Operator is correctly titled. The other 2 use standard capitalization (first word capped, second and third lower case). As far as I can tell a commodity pool operator is a regular noun, not a proper noun, so that would mean the article should be at Commodity pool operator. But I was afraid I'm missing something. If my logic is correct, anyone can move the article to the new correct title (it won't require an admin). Qwyrxian ( talk) 00:49, 9 June 2012 (UTC)
Thanks again for all the thorough reviews and assistance in taking these three articles live. John M Baker suggested above that the articles for Commodity pool operator and Commodity trading advisor should mention that their definitions changed under Dodd-Frank amendments to the Commodity Exchange Act. To follow up on this, I've done some research to find sources for this information and prepared new wording to add in each article's History section, as a new ending to the single paragraph:
For the CPO article:
For the CTA article:
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Finding a source with commentary on this particular change was a challenge—due to the number of changes under the Dodd-Frank Act, not every change was the subject of clear and concise commentary. The CFTC release I've cited here was the clearest source I could find that described the change to the historical definitions, however it is undated. In order to be specific about the date the Dodd-Frank changes occurred, I have included the Dodd-Frank Act as a citation. It is only used for the date of the change; all the details, including the quotes, are from the CFTC.
As noted above, I think these would work best as a new conclusion to the History section in each article. If others agree, I'd appreciate it if someone can make these additions. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 17:15, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
I posted here last month seeking assistance for some small edits on the Pacific Gas & Electric Company article. I have just added another note to the article's talk page, regarding three subsections of the company's early history to the point it was incorporated under its modern name. I am looking for assistance from a volunteer editor, if anyone is able. Thanks, PParmley ( talk) 19:35, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
My latest project is actually an old one revisited: late last year, I created an article on behalf of the Association of Global Automakers, only to have the process go awry. (In fact, I believe the trouble surrounding it is part of what led to the creation of WikiProject Cooperation in the first place—many thanks to Silver in that.) I'd like to see if that issue can be resolved now.
Here's the quick background:
So this is where we're at now.
With feedback from AGA, I've prepared another proposed draft. It makes a sincere effort to preserve as much as possible from the current, disputed version. Many of the recent changes described above relate to legitimate public policy topics on which AGA has been involved, albeit written in an unduly negative tone; I've aimed to bring these subjects to neutral.
In order to facilitate this process, and allow editors who are looking at this for the first time to easily compare previous versions of these articles, I've updated my user space to include: a) the last pre-dispute version, b) the current, disputed version of the article, and c) my new draft, the proposed replacement. I've also included the diffs between them, all accessible here:
Since this was a tricky process in the first place, I'm not necessarily looking for speedy resolution—I'm looking for a durable one. Worth noting, I'm also disinclined to seek out the editors involved before. I don't believe they acted in good faith then, and I wouldn't expect them to now. I had considered taking this through peer review, but this seemed like the better forum to explain the situation. Any feedback on the draft, or advice on how best to handle this would be very appreciated. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 17:03, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
Since this one is a bit complicated, and seeing as how I didn't explain specific differences between versions above, I've gone back and accounted for all of the key differences between versions, listed below with links to specific sections, old and new. Overall, my approach was not to remove anything unless it was unsourced or absolutely incorrect based on the source. Where possible, I have kept wording per the current version. In all other cases, I followed the sources to present a neutral version of events, and checked with AGA to ensure that the information is accurate. The section that has changed the most is the one focusing on Fuel economy and emissions as this did not accurately reflect the events and the details of the lawsuits. Here are the details, organized by top-level heading:
I hope that helps, and I wish there was a way to make it simpler. Any feedback on all of this would be very welcome. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 22:33, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
I'm OK with either time frame, and I'm also cool with leaving an undeletable draft in my userspace; my standard practice already is to keep old drafts around, unless turned into a redirect when going live. And thanks for posting that notice on the Global Automakers Talk page, Qwyrxian. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 12:15, 2 July 2012 (UTC)
I have proposed that a log be kept of poorly behaving paid editors who become subject to administrative actions, such that the community can identify common off-site origins of poor editing behaviour by paid editors: Wikipedia:Village_pump_(proposals)#Log_of_sources_of_poor_paid_advocacy_editing. Fifelfoo ( talk) 01:24, 10 July 2012 (UTC)
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I have been requested to create a new article as a paid editor for William Whitecloud. Having explored the pages on Biographies of Living Persons and Notability, I'm not sure the proposed article would pass muster for inclusion. Before I even start tackling the article itself (which would need major reworking from the proposed version to get NPOV), I'd like to get some feedback on whether the subject meets Notability guidelines. I'm including the first paragraph of the proposed article and some links. If the consensus is no, any concrete reasoning that I could relay to the client would be greatly appreciated.
William Whitecloud is an African born Australian author and self transformation facilitator dedicated to empowering others in living soul-inspired lives. His first book The Magician's Way is an Australian #1 metaphysical best seller and his Living From Greatness year long trainings from 2000 to 2010 were the most successful self transformation programs of their time.
Thank you! Alexwillis ( talk) 14:04, 14 June 2012 (UTC)
Thank you! I just uploaded the entire article as the client sent it to me. I think it obviously needs some major work. Alexwillis ( talk) 21:51, 14 June 2012 (UTC)
On a side note: the same client has requested some VERY minor changes to the pages for MySpace and Chris DeWolfe--six sentences added altogether, all factual and documented. If you wouldn't mind, could you create user subpages for these--or maybe since they're so minor, it would be more efficient for me to make the changes directly to those pages.... Alexwillis ( talk) 22:08, 14 June 2012 (UTC)
For Chris DeWolfe: (add to first paragraph) Currently, DeWolfe is the CEO of Social Gaming Network (SGN).
(add to fourth paragraph) In February 2012, Mindjolt officially changed its name to SGN.
(add to fifth paragraph) DeWolfe also has an MBA from the University of Southern California. He was honored by his alma mater USC as Alumni Entrepreneur of the year in 2006. [6]
(add to last paragraph)In 2006, DeWolfe was named one of TIME’s 100 most influential people in the world. [7] In 2007, he was chosen by Barbara Walters as one of her 10 most fascinating people. [8] DeWolfe also served on the board of directors of the Los Angeles County Museum of Art.
For MySpace (they were not specific as to placement, but I can work that out):
MySpace had a significant influence in pop culture and music. [9]
MySpace created a gaming platform that launched the successes of Zynga and Rock You, among others. [10]
MySpace started the trend of creating unique URLS for companies and artists. [11]
MySpace generated $800 million in fiscal year 2008. [12] Alexwillis ( talk) 22:52, 14 June 2012 (UTC)
Any feedback for the proposed changes for MySpace and Chris DeWolfe?
Also, I'd appreciate any specific pointers on how I can improve the William Whitecloud article....
Thanks! 71.166.104.220 ( talk) 13:59, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
It's fine--And thanks for updating those two pages! I'm not sure what to do about William Whitecloud--all references that the client sent me are at the end of the article of in my userspace. I asked for more, especially news references and the client had none, and web searches have turned up nothing new..... 71.179.113.59 ( talk) 19:13, 1 July 2012 (UTC)
I'll work on POV.....Here's an interview: [13]
Not sure how much that helps either.... Alexwillis ( talk) 02:19, 5 July 2012 (UTC)
Totally understandable. I'll reopen the issue when we get more substantial references. I really appreciate all your help. Thank you! Alexwillis ( talk) 15:38, 10 July 2012 (UTC)
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I have four simple requests to make on this article, which I created on behalf of the awarding organization earlier this year: at the time, I accidentally omitted three names in the source list, and put one in the wrong place. Earlier in the week I posted a concise explanation and request tag on that article's Talk page, but have not yet had any replies. If anyone here is willing to review the changes and implement them, I'd be most grateful. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 12:38, 6 July 2012 (UTC)
Hi folks. I've placed a {{request edit}}
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User talk:Eclipsed/Silvina Moschini for review for mainspace-readiness. Please note I'm a connected contributor to the subject. Thanks! --
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Dear Editors... I'm also not exactly clear on whether I should place this request on the Paid Editor help page, or on the actual article stub page. So I'll place it on both, and treat this as a learning experience.
I am an employee at DragonSearch, helping The RIDE (unique tour experience in New York City in that the theatrical company stages spontaneous performances on the city streets without stopping the vehicle, entertaining passersby along with tour passengers). I'm investigating how we can update the page stub that existed for The RIDE, but is gone now. There have been numerous articles regarding The RIDE in NYC, as well as a partnership with Madame Tussauds at Times Square. The official website is [www.experiencetheride.com here]. I know according to the COI guidelines I should bring this suggested update to you as a "paid editor" to proceed with edits to the stub. Can you help?
Stub as it was: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Ride_%28bus_tour%29
Stub as it is: http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=The_Ride_(bus_tour)&action=edit&redlink=1
I've included the contents of the page which was erased recently. Is there a way We can improve on this information?
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THE RIDE is an operator of guided tour buses that acts a tourist attraction in New York City. The 4.2-mile midtown route Tour takes approximately 75 minutes, but will fluctuate based on the current Midtown traffic conditions. THE RIDE departs from 46th and Broadway and stays around Times Square, Columbus Circle, and the Theatre District, New York The Ride offers energetic tour guides, street performers and surprises. The experience on any given day may include jugglers performing on the sidewalk or a “businessman” who unexpectedly sings and dances on the street corner. The RIDE also recreates famous scenes of New York, such as Alfred Eisenstaedt famous photograph of V-J Day in Times Square while introducing some new NY favorites like the Columbus Circle ballerina. The first RIDE bus took to the streets on September 16th, 2010 with the first tickets available on August 12th, 2010. Public tickets are available for purchase whether through the RIDE website, Telecharge or at THE RIDE’S Box Office at Madame_Tussauds http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Madame_Tussauds / http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Madame_Tussauds_NYC.jpg. THE RIDE box office is open daily from 10AM to 8PM.
At a cost of $1.3 million dollars, THE RIDE is the tallest mode of transportation allowed on the streets of New York by federal law. The custom-made vehicles feature 49 stadium-style seating that turns riders sideways. One side of the bus is panoramic windows that allow tourists to see all of the activity in Times Square and huge skylights to view the New York City landmarks. The interior of the bus boasts an IMAX theater-worth of surround sound audio equipment and 40 video screens, with 3000 mood-enhancing LED lights, floor shaker technology, a wireless sound system that incorporates the sounds of the street performances.
In addition to the original RIDE, the Fazzino RIDE was introduced on May 3rd 2012 and public tours began on May 4th, 2012. Based on the pop art works of Charles Fazzino, the Fazzino RIDE is covered with a custom made wrapper depicting a vision of Fazzino’s New York City and Swarovski crystals. The Fazzino RIDE is scheduled for a limited run until Labor Day 2012.
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I’ve been updating Zurich Insurance Group’s page to try and ensure that it best represents the company. There is a section on the page entitled ‘Criticism’ which is out of date and is not a fair representation of the company. It was removed, but has now been added again. Wondered what you would suggest as a next step? — Preceding unsigned comment added by GraRey ( talk • contribs) 15:36, 24 July 2012 (UTC)
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I have been requested to create a Wikipedia entry for a client. The company name is DoneDeal and is mentioned under the Ireland section of this page:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Schibsted. I added the Ireland section and the line there while first exploring how to edit in Wikipedia. I believe I have kept to a neutral point of view in what I have put together already - would somebody be willing to create a page for DoneDeal and include the content below? I hope I've followed all the instructions properly, as I'd done some research to ensure I was declaring a conflict of interest properly. If there are any reasons for refusal, feedback welcome. — Preceding
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DoneDeal runs DoneDeal.ie, a classifieds website in Ireland.
DoneDeal was set up in Wexford, Ireland in 2005 by husband and wife Fred Karlsson and Geraldine Karlsson [1] . Fred Karlsson and Geraldine Karlsson set up the site so that people could sell items online, like they could in Sweden where they had returned from and where Fred Karlsson also hails from [2]. Schibsted Media Group took a 50.09% [3] stake in the company in 2011. DoneDeal’s revenues for the year ending April 2011 were just over €3 million [4]. The CEO of DoneDeal is John Warburton [5].
‘DoneDeal.ie’ was the fastest rising Google search in Ireland in 2011 [6] . DoneDeal is a member of the Interactive Advertising Bureau in Ireland [7]. DoneDeal is ABC audited [8] [9] . DoneDeal has raised hundreds of thousands of euro for charity by donating a portion of ads to charities [10] . DoneDeal has both iPhone and Android apps [11] . References
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First, thanks for coming to the right place and disclosing your client status. I'm a bit confused -- are you doing an article on DoneDeal (Company), or DoneDeal.ie (website)? I believe they could be two separate pages, with two separate determinations of whether they are notable enough for inclusion. I can see the argument for the website, but I don't know that the company necessarily merits its own article (as opposed to a redirect to the DoneDeal.ie website article, which until there is enough to merit a separate page on the company, would contain information on both).
Additionally, I'd like to see more meat to the article, especially in the history section. As well, things like "Is audited by ABC" are not really helpful as individual sentences and should be folded in somehow with more informative and relevant prose. Note: I'm talking stylistically here now, not in terms of conflict. ⇒ SWATJester Son of the Defender 12:46, 26 July 2012 (UTC)
Hi Swatjester, thanks for the comprehensive answer. I will get clarification on whether it should be a page on the company and website (I regard both as the one entity) and get a more meaty piece together, I was just keeping it to the bare facts because of the conflict of interest. Apologies in advance if this comment doesn't come through right, I'm still getting to grips with Wikipedia. -- Eklar ( talk) 20:34, 26 July 2012 (UTC)
I have gone through several rounds of edits with an editor who was assisting me in reviewing a draft page in my user space for an article on Stevens Institute of Technology which I updated to include more references and be more consistent with the guidelines for college and university articles than the article now live on Wikipedia (I have a COI).
I reached what seemed to be a final round of edits a few months back, making the draft article ready for the editor's final review. However, the editor has not had an opportunity to do that final review, so I am seeking assistance from someone else.
The full dialogue about the edits can be found here - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Stevens_Institute_of_Technology#Updating_page_along_guidelines_for_college_and_university_articles. The draft article in my user space can be found here - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:QueenCity11/Stevens_Institute_of_Technology.
One additional note - I used the general Help tag to draw the attention of an editor who gave a quick review but was not comfortable doing more because he/she was not familiar with the guidelines for college and university articles. The editor did make one change, moving information about a lawsuit to its own section. Based on the Wikipedia guidelines for college and university articles, I am not sure if the lawsuit should be its own section or instead a subsection within a different section, and I ask that that question be given consideration. Thank you for the help. QueenCity11 ( talk) 12:59, 9 July 2012 (UTC)
All done. While I don't mind helping, Silver seren, if your concern was just a need for admin tools, here they weren't necessary. Per WP:MERGE, in cases where the history is overlapping (as they were here), we can't do a history merge. Instead, we just have to make do with a copy-and-paste with attribution in edit summaries and both article's talk pages (and making sure the draft isn't deleted). Qwyrxian ( talk) 01:25, 1 August 2012 (UTC)
I work with Huawei and am looking for help for help in removing some unverified claims from the Huawei article as well as the article for Ren Zhengfei, the company's founder. In both articles an editor has inserted statements claiming Ren Zhengfei has affiliation with the Chinese Communist Party, though no sources verifying this are provided. Huawei and Ren Zhengfei were reported on in The Economist and no such statement was made there. No reliable source has made this claim, and these should be removed. Please see my original request on the Huawei talk page which has been unanswered for more than 48 hours. I have also left a request on Ren Zhengfei's talk page. Thank you, -- Bouteloua ( talk) 01:34, 2 August 2012 (UTC)
Hello, I'm looking for help addressing a serious issue in Oklahoma Representative John Sullivan's article. Currently the article contains a section titled "Criminal record" that details allegations regarding his arrest record. This section is given undue attention by appearing in the table of contents and contains unnecessary information.
While I understand that the allegation by his opponent and its coverage in news sources makes this information notable, I would like to request that it be moved to the "Elections" section of the article, because the issue first arose during his election in 2004. It is only in the context of the campaign and election that the arrest record is notable.
I would also like to request that the section be revised to remove the specific details it currently contains. The incidents were a long time ago, and have not received major coverage since, apart from in the context explained above. I think it would make most sense to summarize the section.
I am asking for help here, rather than editing the article, because I work for Representative Sullivan. I have also left a request on the article talk page which can be seen here and on the BLP Noticeboard page, which can be seen here, where discussion has unfortunately dried up. I would appreciate if editors here could review this section and make the necessary changes. Let me know if you have any questions. I will respond here. Thanks, EdwardDC ( talk) 22:17, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
I've posted here before to ask for help reviewing new material and changes to articles related to my employer, Strayer University, and I hope someone here can help again. I've noticed that recent changes to the Jack Welch Management Institute article have introduced some errors into the article. There are issues with grammar, formatting and also an error in description of timeline of the institute's acquisition by Strayer. I've listed all the issues I can see in an edit request on the article's Talk page. Can someone please review the errors and make the necessary changes? Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 17:55, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
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I'm looking for help in correcting an inaccurate date in the article about Bob Corker. In the Early life and family section, Sen. Corker's wedding date is inaccurately listed as May 18, 1987. This biography from his website shows the correct date of January 10, 1987. I am seeking to avoid making direct edits to the article because I am with the Senator's campaign. I hope that someone here can fix this, and also consider implementing the new information on the discussion page that has been approved by another editor (but not yet added). Thanks. Mark from tn ( talk) 15:44, 15 August 2012 (UTC)
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I have been hired to make changes to Aber Whitcomb's page.
The proposed new text is as follows:
As CTO of Social Gaming Network (SGN), a multiplatform game developer and distributor, Aber Whitcomb oversees the cross-platform technology strategy and plays an important role in developing and operating SGN titles on a global scale. Whitcomb is a recognized expert in large scale computing, networking and storage and frequently speaks on these topics at industry events. [1] [2]
Prior to SGN, Whitcomb’s most recent role was CTO and co-founder of MySpace where he was responsible for the engineering and technical operations groups. [3] InfoWorld named Whitcomb as one of the “Top 25 CTOs of 2009.” [4]
Whitcomb is a co-founder of i/o Ventures, an early stage startup program that focuses heavily on mentorship. [5] He graduated from the University of Washington and was born and raised in Bellingham, WA.
I think the references in the current article cover this pretty well, but let me know if we need more.
Thanks in advance! Alexwillis ( talk) 22:20, 15 August 2012 (UTC)
Sure! See above. Alexwillis ( talk) 13:26, 17 August 2012 (UTC)
BTW, I'd like to also ask your advice about another page Cade McNown. He's hired me to make changes (he feels some statements may be misleading or false), but has yet to be specific...but one place he has been specific is that he'd prefer the lead photo to be something more specific to his career than a photo from a team he never really played for. He'd prefer this one: http://www.google.com/imgres?hl=en&sa=X&rlz=1C1CHFX_enUS455US455&biw=1024&bih=509&tbm=isch&prmd=imvnso&tbnid=9x8ZvGLzFlybDM:&imgrefurl=http://bleacherreport.com/articles/1114251-50-star-players-that-peaked-in-college-football&docid=nXhwxhjnnNxohM&imgurl=http://cdn.bleacherreport.net/images_root/slides/photos/002/052/059/396753_display_image.jpg%253F1332389905&w=263&h=400&ei=UdEuUJe1IIGM6QGLyYHYAg&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=94&vpy=100&dur=36&hovh=277&hovw=182&tx=108&ty=206&sig=104162640990892616719&page=2&tbnh=142&tbnw=90&start=12&ndsp=15&ved=1t:429,r:5,s:12,i:132
Or should I just wait until he get the rest of his...stuff...together. Alexwillis ( talk) 23:23, 17 August 2012 (UTC)
I think your changes to Aber Whitcomb are fine, so if you could implement that, I'd be appreciative. As for the Cade McNown image, from what I've read here, fair use would apply since he's retired....but I'm probably much less of an expert on this than you are. Thanks for the referral! I'll follow my original instincts and wait until I get concrete changes to the article itself, and then pull in User:Moonriddengirl if needed. Thanks! Alexwillis ( talk) 06:12, 18 August 2012 (UTC)
You're awesome. You'll probably see me again when I get text changes for Cade McNown...:) Thanks! Alex. Alexwillis ( talk) 03:57, 19 August 2012 (UTC)
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I’ve taken on an assignment to help McKinsey & Company improve their Wikipedia article through discussion and collaboration. Much of the content on the article is highly controversial and so I’ve prepared a Talk page note to discuss, provide sources and information. Would anyone be willing to give me a second opinion on my neutrality and whether my suggestions are fair before I share it? See my draft here. User:King4057 (COI Disclosure on User Page) 20:44, 4 April 2012 (UTC)
I'm wondering if any cooperating people want to help User:Mdubakov out. He wants an article about his software, TargetProcess. I CSDed it and then Malik Shabazz deleted it. I haven't really got time to advise on COI stuff, so I leave it in your collective capable hands. See User talk:Tom Morris#TargetProcess page deletion for more details. — Tom Morris ( talk) 12:15, 17 April 2012 (UTC)
I had a quick look. The Dr. Dobbs citation is promisingly reliable. Any more like that? You can reference your own site but third party cites are preferred WP:3PARTY. The article itself needs work. It looks like a marketing datasheet of bullet list features not an encyclopedia article. Take a look at some articles marked " good" or (a notch up) " featured" to get the idea. Also put the {{Request edit}} template on the talk page of your sand box. It might get more eyeballs on your draft. Good luck! hth Woz2 ( talk) 14:45, 25 April 2012 (UTC)
I've previously posted on this page to ask for help with the Strayer University article, and would now like to request assistance with a new draft I have prepared for the Jack Welch Management Institute. JWMI is an online business program, founded by Jack Welch and now owned by Strayer University. The institute does not currently have its own article, although I believe that it meets the GNG: there are multiple reliable sources that feature the institute and provide enough detail for an overview of its history and academic programs. Also, searching for "Jack Welch Institute" incorrectly directs readers to the Chancellor University article. While the institute was founded at Chancellor, it was acquired by Strayer University in November 2011. With advice and support from William Beutler (WWB), I've created a new draft article and added this to my userspace. Due to Strayer's connection with the institute, I'd rather not move the article into live space myself and I hope that editors here are able to help. It should be noted that this draft is not an exhaustive article on the institute but rather an overview, providing key, encyclopedic details. I think it is mostly complete, but other editors may want to add more information once the article is live. The draft has 2 main sections, plus an introduction, references, and external links:
I look forward to editors' feedback on the draft. I have this page on my watchlist and I'll respond to questions as soon as I can. Thanks. -- Hamilton83 ( talk) 16:06, 27 April 2012 (UTC)
Per my note above, I recently prepared a new draft article for the Jack Welch Management Institute, but after an initial review realized there were some edits I needed to make before it was ready. I've now made the changes to the draft article that I had in mind and it is ready for editors to review again. Please can you take a look at the current version of the draft and let me know if there are any edits needed or if it is ready to be moved live? Your comments are welcome here, or in the thread above. Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 12:52, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
{{edit request}}
Dear Wikipedia colleagues,
I would like to propose a number of changes to this article as many of the facts within are now currently out of date. I represent the company in a communications capacity and I am therefore a trustworthy source of information for this page. Links and references to articles to validate all the amendments I'm proposing are also enclosed.
I have provided the link to all recommended revisions and would be grateful of assistance with this matter.
http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Infront_Sports_%26_Media&diff=476127845&oldid=475589201
To summarise the changes I am proposing cover the following:
Thanks for your assistance.
I've posted here before, asking for help with the article for the Jack Welch Management Institute, and I'm now working on suggestions to improve the article for the institute's founder Jack Welch, which I'd like to ask for some help with. I've recently made some suggestions on the article's Talk page to address issues such as outdated information in the article's introduction and infobox, and the lack of information on his post-GE career. I'd appreciate if editors here could review these suggestions and make the edits if you're able to do so. Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 21:01, 31 May 2012 (UTC)
Thanks so much again to Woz2 for helping me with the Jack Welch Management Institute article. I've just uploaded a logo to be added to the infobox: File:Jack Welch Management Institute Logo.png. Could someone here please add this to the article for me? Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 19:33, 6 June 2012 (UTC)
Back in March, WWB Too and Silverseren collaborated on a new article for Jesse Thomas here. Following on from that, I'd like to ask for some help updating the article with a photo for the infobox and fixing a few little typos that happened later due to copyediting by other editors. Just to clarify, this request is on behalf of JESS3, so I'd rather not make any direct edits myself. I've added an edit request on the talk page with a list of the typos and link to the photo to add to the infobox. Any help would be gratefully received. Thanks in advance, 16912 Rhiannon ( talk) 21:49, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
Thank you Silverseren for your help with my previous requests. Since my last post on this page, I've made some more suggestions on the Talk page for Jack Welch's article regarding changes to help improve its content. The new suggestions include adding material to the new "Post-GE career" section and removal of unsourced criticisms. If any editors here are able to review the edits I've suggested and make them edits if they agree, I would be grateful. Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 14:36, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
Hi all, new project here. On behalf of the Managed Funds Association, an association representing the alternative investment industry, I've recently researched and written three new drafts of existing articles on financial topics. Each of these drafts is proposed as a replacement for an existing but underdeveloped, poorly written article, with few (if any) citations.
All three drafts are in my user space:
Since these three topics are very closely linked, with overlapping histories and regulation, I've worked on them at the same time. Some of the same sources are used in all three drafts and some of the material is very similar if not largely the same. It might make sense for editors who review the articles to look at them together, but if you would prefer not to, I'd recommend reviewing the draft for Commodity Pool Operator first.
Out of the three articles, the current article for Commodity Pool Operator is the worst. The entire article is just five sentences long, and it begins with a quote from the National Futures Association's official definition of a CPO. The definition is not easy for a layperson to understand, and there are no wikilinks to concepts mentioned such as "commodity pool" or "futures contracts" that would help someone understand them.
The draft I've prepared is very simple and aims to provide a general overview of what a CPO is and how this entity has developed. (The structure and content is similar in the CTA and Managed futures account drafts.) Below, I've explained in a little detail what is now included in the CPO draft:
I appreciate this is a complicated topic, so I'm also going to post a note to the Talk page at WikiProject Finance to see if anyone there is able to help review. However, that WikiProject is not quite as active as this, so I hope that editors can help here, even if not experts in the field. If you have any questions at all, please reply here and I'll respond as soon as I'm able. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 14:33, 25 May 2012 (UTC)
You plagiarised USCFTC. Recheck your articles where you cite USCFTC, in particular, the sentence regarding the length of time commodities have been traded is direct plagiarism.
Fifelfoo: Legal articles in student law journals are allowed, and can be cited by a United States court as authoritative in the opinion of the judge. Why wouldn't we on Wikipedia allow a similar legal publication to be used as a source? Pine ✉ 06:30, 28 May 2012 (UTC)
I just wanted to note this discussion as to why Fifelfoo is here. I am not making a bearing on whether his comments above are legitimate (some look like they are, some look like they aren't), but I am noting that there seems to be a bias in dealing with this page. Silver seren C 17:52, 28 May 2012 (UTC)
Thanks again for everyone's input here, it's great to get varied points of view on my drafts. Further to the discussion above, I've now placed a note at WP:RS/N to Seek additional opinions about whether Lexology.com can be used as a source. Pending a reply, I've left the source in my drafts and will take whatever action the editors there suggest. One possible option is to replace Lexology with an article in the Wall Street Journal and possibly also an article from Hedgeweek that describe the CFTC rules change, albeit not as clearly.
The updates I've made, including diffs to illustrate:
Here are links to the three updated History sections:
If you'd like to look at these again now and let me know if this has solved the issues raised by Fifelfoo above, I would be grateful. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 22:15, 30 May 2012 (UTC)
Hi again, John and any others following this discussion. Short version of the below: based on further research, and feedback from my clients, I agree the suggested changes are reasonable, and I've updated all three drafts accordingly. You can see all the changes in the diffs I've linked below:
The specific changes I've made to the drafts in my userspace are as follows:
While I've added the detail about the lawsuit (using this Bloomberg article as a citation), I'm curious as to what others think about including this. Compared to the other information in the drafts, which take a broader historical view, information about the lawsuit is likely to become dated very quickly and need to be updated.
For added convenience, some additional relevant links:
I'm open to more feedback if there is any, or, if there is consensus for moving the drafts into article space, I'm more than open to that as well. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 17:19, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
After a request on my talk page from WWB Too, I have completed a history merge of all three articles. However, after I did that, I started to wonder whether Commodity Pool Operator is correctly titled. The other 2 use standard capitalization (first word capped, second and third lower case). As far as I can tell a commodity pool operator is a regular noun, not a proper noun, so that would mean the article should be at Commodity pool operator. But I was afraid I'm missing something. If my logic is correct, anyone can move the article to the new correct title (it won't require an admin). Qwyrxian ( talk) 00:49, 9 June 2012 (UTC)
Thanks again for all the thorough reviews and assistance in taking these three articles live. John M Baker suggested above that the articles for Commodity pool operator and Commodity trading advisor should mention that their definitions changed under Dodd-Frank amendments to the Commodity Exchange Act. To follow up on this, I've done some research to find sources for this information and prepared new wording to add in each article's History section, as a new ending to the single paragraph:
For the CPO article:
For the CTA article:
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Finding a source with commentary on this particular change was a challenge—due to the number of changes under the Dodd-Frank Act, not every change was the subject of clear and concise commentary. The CFTC release I've cited here was the clearest source I could find that described the change to the historical definitions, however it is undated. In order to be specific about the date the Dodd-Frank changes occurred, I have included the Dodd-Frank Act as a citation. It is only used for the date of the change; all the details, including the quotes, are from the CFTC.
As noted above, I think these would work best as a new conclusion to the History section in each article. If others agree, I'd appreciate it if someone can make these additions. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 17:15, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
I posted here last month seeking assistance for some small edits on the Pacific Gas & Electric Company article. I have just added another note to the article's talk page, regarding three subsections of the company's early history to the point it was incorporated under its modern name. I am looking for assistance from a volunteer editor, if anyone is able. Thanks, PParmley ( talk) 19:35, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
My latest project is actually an old one revisited: late last year, I created an article on behalf of the Association of Global Automakers, only to have the process go awry. (In fact, I believe the trouble surrounding it is part of what led to the creation of WikiProject Cooperation in the first place—many thanks to Silver in that.) I'd like to see if that issue can be resolved now.
Here's the quick background:
So this is where we're at now.
With feedback from AGA, I've prepared another proposed draft. It makes a sincere effort to preserve as much as possible from the current, disputed version. Many of the recent changes described above relate to legitimate public policy topics on which AGA has been involved, albeit written in an unduly negative tone; I've aimed to bring these subjects to neutral.
In order to facilitate this process, and allow editors who are looking at this for the first time to easily compare previous versions of these articles, I've updated my user space to include: a) the last pre-dispute version, b) the current, disputed version of the article, and c) my new draft, the proposed replacement. I've also included the diffs between them, all accessible here:
Since this was a tricky process in the first place, I'm not necessarily looking for speedy resolution—I'm looking for a durable one. Worth noting, I'm also disinclined to seek out the editors involved before. I don't believe they acted in good faith then, and I wouldn't expect them to now. I had considered taking this through peer review, but this seemed like the better forum to explain the situation. Any feedback on the draft, or advice on how best to handle this would be very appreciated. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 17:03, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
Since this one is a bit complicated, and seeing as how I didn't explain specific differences between versions above, I've gone back and accounted for all of the key differences between versions, listed below with links to specific sections, old and new. Overall, my approach was not to remove anything unless it was unsourced or absolutely incorrect based on the source. Where possible, I have kept wording per the current version. In all other cases, I followed the sources to present a neutral version of events, and checked with AGA to ensure that the information is accurate. The section that has changed the most is the one focusing on Fuel economy and emissions as this did not accurately reflect the events and the details of the lawsuits. Here are the details, organized by top-level heading:
I hope that helps, and I wish there was a way to make it simpler. Any feedback on all of this would be very welcome. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 22:33, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
I'm OK with either time frame, and I'm also cool with leaving an undeletable draft in my userspace; my standard practice already is to keep old drafts around, unless turned into a redirect when going live. And thanks for posting that notice on the Global Automakers Talk page, Qwyrxian. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 12:15, 2 July 2012 (UTC)
I have proposed that a log be kept of poorly behaving paid editors who become subject to administrative actions, such that the community can identify common off-site origins of poor editing behaviour by paid editors: Wikipedia:Village_pump_(proposals)#Log_of_sources_of_poor_paid_advocacy_editing. Fifelfoo ( talk) 01:24, 10 July 2012 (UTC)
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I have been requested to create a new article as a paid editor for William Whitecloud. Having explored the pages on Biographies of Living Persons and Notability, I'm not sure the proposed article would pass muster for inclusion. Before I even start tackling the article itself (which would need major reworking from the proposed version to get NPOV), I'd like to get some feedback on whether the subject meets Notability guidelines. I'm including the first paragraph of the proposed article and some links. If the consensus is no, any concrete reasoning that I could relay to the client would be greatly appreciated.
William Whitecloud is an African born Australian author and self transformation facilitator dedicated to empowering others in living soul-inspired lives. His first book The Magician's Way is an Australian #1 metaphysical best seller and his Living From Greatness year long trainings from 2000 to 2010 were the most successful self transformation programs of their time.
Thank you! Alexwillis ( talk) 14:04, 14 June 2012 (UTC)
Thank you! I just uploaded the entire article as the client sent it to me. I think it obviously needs some major work. Alexwillis ( talk) 21:51, 14 June 2012 (UTC)
On a side note: the same client has requested some VERY minor changes to the pages for MySpace and Chris DeWolfe--six sentences added altogether, all factual and documented. If you wouldn't mind, could you create user subpages for these--or maybe since they're so minor, it would be more efficient for me to make the changes directly to those pages.... Alexwillis ( talk) 22:08, 14 June 2012 (UTC)
For Chris DeWolfe: (add to first paragraph) Currently, DeWolfe is the CEO of Social Gaming Network (SGN).
(add to fourth paragraph) In February 2012, Mindjolt officially changed its name to SGN.
(add to fifth paragraph) DeWolfe also has an MBA from the University of Southern California. He was honored by his alma mater USC as Alumni Entrepreneur of the year in 2006. [6]
(add to last paragraph)In 2006, DeWolfe was named one of TIME’s 100 most influential people in the world. [7] In 2007, he was chosen by Barbara Walters as one of her 10 most fascinating people. [8] DeWolfe also served on the board of directors of the Los Angeles County Museum of Art.
For MySpace (they were not specific as to placement, but I can work that out):
MySpace had a significant influence in pop culture and music. [9]
MySpace created a gaming platform that launched the successes of Zynga and Rock You, among others. [10]
MySpace started the trend of creating unique URLS for companies and artists. [11]
MySpace generated $800 million in fiscal year 2008. [12] Alexwillis ( talk) 22:52, 14 June 2012 (UTC)
Any feedback for the proposed changes for MySpace and Chris DeWolfe?
Also, I'd appreciate any specific pointers on how I can improve the William Whitecloud article....
Thanks! 71.166.104.220 ( talk) 13:59, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
It's fine--And thanks for updating those two pages! I'm not sure what to do about William Whitecloud--all references that the client sent me are at the end of the article of in my userspace. I asked for more, especially news references and the client had none, and web searches have turned up nothing new..... 71.179.113.59 ( talk) 19:13, 1 July 2012 (UTC)
I'll work on POV.....Here's an interview: [13]
Not sure how much that helps either.... Alexwillis ( talk) 02:19, 5 July 2012 (UTC)
Totally understandable. I'll reopen the issue when we get more substantial references. I really appreciate all your help. Thank you! Alexwillis ( talk) 15:38, 10 July 2012 (UTC)
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I have four simple requests to make on this article, which I created on behalf of the awarding organization earlier this year: at the time, I accidentally omitted three names in the source list, and put one in the wrong place. Earlier in the week I posted a concise explanation and request tag on that article's Talk page, but have not yet had any replies. If anyone here is willing to review the changes and implement them, I'd be most grateful. Cheers, WWB Too ( talk) 12:38, 6 July 2012 (UTC)
Hi folks. I've placed a {{request edit}}
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Dear Editors... I'm also not exactly clear on whether I should place this request on the Paid Editor help page, or on the actual article stub page. So I'll place it on both, and treat this as a learning experience.
I am an employee at DragonSearch, helping The RIDE (unique tour experience in New York City in that the theatrical company stages spontaneous performances on the city streets without stopping the vehicle, entertaining passersby along with tour passengers). I'm investigating how we can update the page stub that existed for The RIDE, but is gone now. There have been numerous articles regarding The RIDE in NYC, as well as a partnership with Madame Tussauds at Times Square. The official website is [www.experiencetheride.com here]. I know according to the COI guidelines I should bring this suggested update to you as a "paid editor" to proceed with edits to the stub. Can you help?
Stub as it was: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Ride_%28bus_tour%29
Stub as it is: http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=The_Ride_(bus_tour)&action=edit&redlink=1
I've included the contents of the page which was erased recently. Is there a way We can improve on this information?
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THE RIDE is an operator of guided tour buses that acts a tourist attraction in New York City. The 4.2-mile midtown route Tour takes approximately 75 minutes, but will fluctuate based on the current Midtown traffic conditions. THE RIDE departs from 46th and Broadway and stays around Times Square, Columbus Circle, and the Theatre District, New York The Ride offers energetic tour guides, street performers and surprises. The experience on any given day may include jugglers performing on the sidewalk or a “businessman” who unexpectedly sings and dances on the street corner. The RIDE also recreates famous scenes of New York, such as Alfred Eisenstaedt famous photograph of V-J Day in Times Square while introducing some new NY favorites like the Columbus Circle ballerina. The first RIDE bus took to the streets on September 16th, 2010 with the first tickets available on August 12th, 2010. Public tickets are available for purchase whether through the RIDE website, Telecharge or at THE RIDE’S Box Office at Madame_Tussauds http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Madame_Tussauds / http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Madame_Tussauds_NYC.jpg. THE RIDE box office is open daily from 10AM to 8PM.
At a cost of $1.3 million dollars, THE RIDE is the tallest mode of transportation allowed on the streets of New York by federal law. The custom-made vehicles feature 49 stadium-style seating that turns riders sideways. One side of the bus is panoramic windows that allow tourists to see all of the activity in Times Square and huge skylights to view the New York City landmarks. The interior of the bus boasts an IMAX theater-worth of surround sound audio equipment and 40 video screens, with 3000 mood-enhancing LED lights, floor shaker technology, a wireless sound system that incorporates the sounds of the street performances.
In addition to the original RIDE, the Fazzino RIDE was introduced on May 3rd 2012 and public tours began on May 4th, 2012. Based on the pop art works of Charles Fazzino, the Fazzino RIDE is covered with a custom made wrapper depicting a vision of Fazzino’s New York City and Swarovski crystals. The Fazzino RIDE is scheduled for a limited run until Labor Day 2012.
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I’ve been updating Zurich Insurance Group’s page to try and ensure that it best represents the company. There is a section on the page entitled ‘Criticism’ which is out of date and is not a fair representation of the company. It was removed, but has now been added again. Wondered what you would suggest as a next step? — Preceding unsigned comment added by GraRey ( talk • contribs) 15:36, 24 July 2012 (UTC)
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I have been requested to create a Wikipedia entry for a client. The company name is DoneDeal and is mentioned under the Ireland section of this page:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Schibsted. I added the Ireland section and the line there while first exploring how to edit in Wikipedia. I believe I have kept to a neutral point of view in what I have put together already - would somebody be willing to create a page for DoneDeal and include the content below? I hope I've followed all the instructions properly, as I'd done some research to ensure I was declaring a conflict of interest properly. If there are any reasons for refusal, feedback welcome. — Preceding
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DoneDeal runs DoneDeal.ie, a classifieds website in Ireland.
DoneDeal was set up in Wexford, Ireland in 2005 by husband and wife Fred Karlsson and Geraldine Karlsson [1] . Fred Karlsson and Geraldine Karlsson set up the site so that people could sell items online, like they could in Sweden where they had returned from and where Fred Karlsson also hails from [2]. Schibsted Media Group took a 50.09% [3] stake in the company in 2011. DoneDeal’s revenues for the year ending April 2011 were just over €3 million [4]. The CEO of DoneDeal is John Warburton [5].
‘DoneDeal.ie’ was the fastest rising Google search in Ireland in 2011 [6] . DoneDeal is a member of the Interactive Advertising Bureau in Ireland [7]. DoneDeal is ABC audited [8] [9] . DoneDeal has raised hundreds of thousands of euro for charity by donating a portion of ads to charities [10] . DoneDeal has both iPhone and Android apps [11] . References
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First, thanks for coming to the right place and disclosing your client status. I'm a bit confused -- are you doing an article on DoneDeal (Company), or DoneDeal.ie (website)? I believe they could be two separate pages, with two separate determinations of whether they are notable enough for inclusion. I can see the argument for the website, but I don't know that the company necessarily merits its own article (as opposed to a redirect to the DoneDeal.ie website article, which until there is enough to merit a separate page on the company, would contain information on both).
Additionally, I'd like to see more meat to the article, especially in the history section. As well, things like "Is audited by ABC" are not really helpful as individual sentences and should be folded in somehow with more informative and relevant prose. Note: I'm talking stylistically here now, not in terms of conflict. ⇒ SWATJester Son of the Defender 12:46, 26 July 2012 (UTC)
Hi Swatjester, thanks for the comprehensive answer. I will get clarification on whether it should be a page on the company and website (I regard both as the one entity) and get a more meaty piece together, I was just keeping it to the bare facts because of the conflict of interest. Apologies in advance if this comment doesn't come through right, I'm still getting to grips with Wikipedia. -- Eklar ( talk) 20:34, 26 July 2012 (UTC)
I have gone through several rounds of edits with an editor who was assisting me in reviewing a draft page in my user space for an article on Stevens Institute of Technology which I updated to include more references and be more consistent with the guidelines for college and university articles than the article now live on Wikipedia (I have a COI).
I reached what seemed to be a final round of edits a few months back, making the draft article ready for the editor's final review. However, the editor has not had an opportunity to do that final review, so I am seeking assistance from someone else.
The full dialogue about the edits can be found here - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Stevens_Institute_of_Technology#Updating_page_along_guidelines_for_college_and_university_articles. The draft article in my user space can be found here - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:QueenCity11/Stevens_Institute_of_Technology.
One additional note - I used the general Help tag to draw the attention of an editor who gave a quick review but was not comfortable doing more because he/she was not familiar with the guidelines for college and university articles. The editor did make one change, moving information about a lawsuit to its own section. Based on the Wikipedia guidelines for college and university articles, I am not sure if the lawsuit should be its own section or instead a subsection within a different section, and I ask that that question be given consideration. Thank you for the help. QueenCity11 ( talk) 12:59, 9 July 2012 (UTC)
All done. While I don't mind helping, Silver seren, if your concern was just a need for admin tools, here they weren't necessary. Per WP:MERGE, in cases where the history is overlapping (as they were here), we can't do a history merge. Instead, we just have to make do with a copy-and-paste with attribution in edit summaries and both article's talk pages (and making sure the draft isn't deleted). Qwyrxian ( talk) 01:25, 1 August 2012 (UTC)
I work with Huawei and am looking for help for help in removing some unverified claims from the Huawei article as well as the article for Ren Zhengfei, the company's founder. In both articles an editor has inserted statements claiming Ren Zhengfei has affiliation with the Chinese Communist Party, though no sources verifying this are provided. Huawei and Ren Zhengfei were reported on in The Economist and no such statement was made there. No reliable source has made this claim, and these should be removed. Please see my original request on the Huawei talk page which has been unanswered for more than 48 hours. I have also left a request on Ren Zhengfei's talk page. Thank you, -- Bouteloua ( talk) 01:34, 2 August 2012 (UTC)
Hello, I'm looking for help addressing a serious issue in Oklahoma Representative John Sullivan's article. Currently the article contains a section titled "Criminal record" that details allegations regarding his arrest record. This section is given undue attention by appearing in the table of contents and contains unnecessary information.
While I understand that the allegation by his opponent and its coverage in news sources makes this information notable, I would like to request that it be moved to the "Elections" section of the article, because the issue first arose during his election in 2004. It is only in the context of the campaign and election that the arrest record is notable.
I would also like to request that the section be revised to remove the specific details it currently contains. The incidents were a long time ago, and have not received major coverage since, apart from in the context explained above. I think it would make most sense to summarize the section.
I am asking for help here, rather than editing the article, because I work for Representative Sullivan. I have also left a request on the article talk page which can be seen here and on the BLP Noticeboard page, which can be seen here, where discussion has unfortunately dried up. I would appreciate if editors here could review this section and make the necessary changes. Let me know if you have any questions. I will respond here. Thanks, EdwardDC ( talk) 22:17, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
I've posted here before to ask for help reviewing new material and changes to articles related to my employer, Strayer University, and I hope someone here can help again. I've noticed that recent changes to the Jack Welch Management Institute article have introduced some errors into the article. There are issues with grammar, formatting and also an error in description of timeline of the institute's acquisition by Strayer. I've listed all the issues I can see in an edit request on the article's Talk page. Can someone please review the errors and make the necessary changes? Thanks, Hamilton83 ( talk) 17:55, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
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I'm looking for help in correcting an inaccurate date in the article about Bob Corker. In the Early life and family section, Sen. Corker's wedding date is inaccurately listed as May 18, 1987. This biography from his website shows the correct date of January 10, 1987. I am seeking to avoid making direct edits to the article because I am with the Senator's campaign. I hope that someone here can fix this, and also consider implementing the new information on the discussion page that has been approved by another editor (but not yet added). Thanks. Mark from tn ( talk) 15:44, 15 August 2012 (UTC)
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I have been hired to make changes to Aber Whitcomb's page.
The proposed new text is as follows:
As CTO of Social Gaming Network (SGN), a multiplatform game developer and distributor, Aber Whitcomb oversees the cross-platform technology strategy and plays an important role in developing and operating SGN titles on a global scale. Whitcomb is a recognized expert in large scale computing, networking and storage and frequently speaks on these topics at industry events. [1] [2]
Prior to SGN, Whitcomb’s most recent role was CTO and co-founder of MySpace where he was responsible for the engineering and technical operations groups. [3] InfoWorld named Whitcomb as one of the “Top 25 CTOs of 2009.” [4]
Whitcomb is a co-founder of i/o Ventures, an early stage startup program that focuses heavily on mentorship. [5] He graduated from the University of Washington and was born and raised in Bellingham, WA.
I think the references in the current article cover this pretty well, but let me know if we need more.
Thanks in advance! Alexwillis ( talk) 22:20, 15 August 2012 (UTC)
Sure! See above. Alexwillis ( talk) 13:26, 17 August 2012 (UTC)
BTW, I'd like to also ask your advice about another page Cade McNown. He's hired me to make changes (he feels some statements may be misleading or false), but has yet to be specific...but one place he has been specific is that he'd prefer the lead photo to be something more specific to his career than a photo from a team he never really played for. He'd prefer this one: http://www.google.com/imgres?hl=en&sa=X&rlz=1C1CHFX_enUS455US455&biw=1024&bih=509&tbm=isch&prmd=imvnso&tbnid=9x8ZvGLzFlybDM:&imgrefurl=http://bleacherreport.com/articles/1114251-50-star-players-that-peaked-in-college-football&docid=nXhwxhjnnNxohM&imgurl=http://cdn.bleacherreport.net/images_root/slides/photos/002/052/059/396753_display_image.jpg%253F1332389905&w=263&h=400&ei=UdEuUJe1IIGM6QGLyYHYAg&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=94&vpy=100&dur=36&hovh=277&hovw=182&tx=108&ty=206&sig=104162640990892616719&page=2&tbnh=142&tbnw=90&start=12&ndsp=15&ved=1t:429,r:5,s:12,i:132
Or should I just wait until he get the rest of his...stuff...together. Alexwillis ( talk) 23:23, 17 August 2012 (UTC)
I think your changes to Aber Whitcomb are fine, so if you could implement that, I'd be appreciative. As for the Cade McNown image, from what I've read here, fair use would apply since he's retired....but I'm probably much less of an expert on this than you are. Thanks for the referral! I'll follow my original instincts and wait until I get concrete changes to the article itself, and then pull in User:Moonriddengirl if needed. Thanks! Alexwillis ( talk) 06:12, 18 August 2012 (UTC)
You're awesome. You'll probably see me again when I get text changes for Cade McNown...:) Thanks! Alex. Alexwillis ( talk) 03:57, 19 August 2012 (UTC)