I think it would be interesting to have an article on an Iowa representative get GA status. I've worked fairly hard on this, but I know this would not come close to satisfying criterion 1a. If I was going for FA that is. Whether it can get GA status or not I'd just like to see the article improved from the peer review. References are a problem on this one since the ones I have are basically the only ones there are. -- Psych less 04:26, 19 June 2007 (UTC)
Overall, I think almost every sentence is well-written, but you need to work on your transitions between facts.
*Is it important that he converted to Catholicism? If you can't find any information on his reasons or whether it affected his life, this is trivia and could be removed. Likewise, the information on his personal appearance could be considered trivia unless you can find a better way to work it into the article. Done
Good luck!
Karanacs 02:03, 20 June 2007 (UTC)
Karanacs 17:39, 21 June 2007 (UTC)
Done-ish. It's now a good article candidate. If anyone has any more suggestions feel free to leave them. --
Psych
less 18:21, 22 June 2007 (UTC)
I think it would be interesting to have an article on an Iowa representative get GA status. I've worked fairly hard on this, but I know this would not come close to satisfying criterion 1a. If I was going for FA that is. Whether it can get GA status or not I'd just like to see the article improved from the peer review. References are a problem on this one since the ones I have are basically the only ones there are. -- Psych less 04:26, 19 June 2007 (UTC)
Overall, I think almost every sentence is well-written, but you need to work on your transitions between facts.
*Is it important that he converted to Catholicism? If you can't find any information on his reasons or whether it affected his life, this is trivia and could be removed. Likewise, the information on his personal appearance could be considered trivia unless you can find a better way to work it into the article. Done
Good luck!
Karanacs 02:03, 20 June 2007 (UTC)
Karanacs 17:39, 21 June 2007 (UTC)
Done-ish. It's now a good article candidate. If anyone has any more suggestions feel free to leave them. --
Psych
less 18:21, 22 June 2007 (UTC)