Hi. I'm interested in getting this article from B-class (which it is at the moment) to GA status, but I'm not really sure what I could do to improve it. I've made many contributions to the article, and would appreciate some guidance on expanding it further. Your comments are most welcome. Cheers,
-Panser Born-(talk)14:44, 8 April 2007 (UTC)reply
Just a small suggestion here - one resource you might find very useful for expanding this article is the article on Smooth Jazz and Kenny G in a book called Bad Music: The Music We Love to Hate, edited by Christopher Washburne and Maiken Derno. (I know this sounds like a joke, but it's not - the book is available on Amazon and in most good University research libraries.)
Chubbles18:04, 8 April 2007 (UTC)reply
Personally, I would expand just a bit more the lead.
In early life, we have nothing about his family. Isn't there any relevant material?
"Influenced by the likes of Grover Washington, Jr., his own albums are usually classified as smooth jazz." Cite please.
"he was publicly criticized by two notable jazz guitarists." Why don't you tell us straight away who they are? You have another phrase about further criticisms, and then you return to the guitarists, whon you hadn't named in the first place.
IMO many quotes in a row in "Musical criticism". Maybe some recasting into alternative language wouldn't go amiss.
Hi. I'm interested in getting this article from B-class (which it is at the moment) to GA status, but I'm not really sure what I could do to improve it. I've made many contributions to the article, and would appreciate some guidance on expanding it further. Your comments are most welcome. Cheers,
-Panser Born-(talk)14:44, 8 April 2007 (UTC)reply
Just a small suggestion here - one resource you might find very useful for expanding this article is the article on Smooth Jazz and Kenny G in a book called Bad Music: The Music We Love to Hate, edited by Christopher Washburne and Maiken Derno. (I know this sounds like a joke, but it's not - the book is available on Amazon and in most good University research libraries.)
Chubbles18:04, 8 April 2007 (UTC)reply
Personally, I would expand just a bit more the lead.
In early life, we have nothing about his family. Isn't there any relevant material?
"Influenced by the likes of Grover Washington, Jr., his own albums are usually classified as smooth jazz." Cite please.
"he was publicly criticized by two notable jazz guitarists." Why don't you tell us straight away who they are? You have another phrase about further criticisms, and then you return to the guitarists, whon you hadn't named in the first place.
IMO many quotes in a row in "Musical criticism". Maybe some recasting into alternative language wouldn't go amiss.