I am seeking a peer review of this article because I invested a lot of time in the research and writing of it, and would like to make it as good as possible.
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Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
Wikipedia:Lead. The lead should have an appropriate number of paragraphs, and adequately summarize the article as a whole.[?]
You may wish to consider adding an appropriate
infobox for this article. Though not all editors like them.[?]
Please consider adding {{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}} along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.[?]
Headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). For example, if there was a section called ==The Biography==, it could be changed to ==Biography==.[?]
There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article-please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
This battle is considered a Union victory
might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations.[?]
This article needs
footnotes, so that readers can see from where particular information is taken. See
WP:CITE for an in depth guide.[?]
Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
I would recommend merging the "Death" and "Legacy" sections, as very short sections are generally deprecated.
I am seeking a peer review of this article because I invested a lot of time in the research and writing of it, and would like to make it as good as possible.
Bowie60 (
talk) 00:48, 24 May 2008 (UTC)reply
Javascript review
The following suggestions were generated with the aid of a semi-automatic
javascript program.
Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
Wikipedia:Lead. The lead should have an appropriate number of paragraphs, and adequately summarize the article as a whole.[?]
You may wish to consider adding an appropriate
infobox for this article. Though not all editors like them.[?]
Please consider adding {{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}} along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.[?]
Headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). For example, if there was a section called ==The Biography==, it could be changed to ==Biography==.[?]
There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article-please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
This battle is considered a Union victory
might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations.[?]
This article needs
footnotes, so that readers can see from where particular information is taken. See
WP:CITE for an in depth guide.[?]
Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
I would recommend merging the "Death" and "Legacy" sections, as very short sections are generally deprecated.