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American/British trombonist and composer. Think I've got it going now; I'd appreciate any general evaluation, and esp. on citation/reference style--the article relies heavily on online sources, so it didn't seem to make sense to separate them out as "External Links". I hope my solution makes sense. Also most of the article synthesizes multiple sources so it's difficult to footnote or Harvard-cite each item. Does it seem encyclopedic? Hopefully the text establishes notability. thanks.-- Turangalila ( talk) 10:37, 16 March 2007 (UTC)
I've written a completely new article for this subject, as the previous version wasn't really up to scratch. I've added a section on roots and influences, revised and expanded a list of Tartan Noir authors, added notable works in the genre. This is my first crack at a wiki article, and I'd like to know what others think of it. Many thanks. Edofedinburgh 23:26, 16 March 2007 (UTC)
Could you come and give some comments for rivision. This is my article for screen quotas. Thank you
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Screen_Quotas
Subject of article is a longtime activist who has been in the news recently for a notable case brought against Internet Archive. Though I have tried to be extremely meticulous with sourcing statements, the subject of the article has complained on the talk page about inaccuracy and NPOV. Please review the article and double check the sources, as well as provide any feedback on how it might be improved. Thanks! Jokestress 21:33, 20 March 2007 (UTC)
I just created an article for David Pines, a theoretical physicist with a long career. The page needs a lot of clean up and is too list like.
Can someone please check this over? I added headers but I don't think I split it up right. Tikuko 17:32, 16 March 2007 (UTC)
The prose of this article has ben called strange. Please comment on what should be done to improve it.-- Shahab 10:50, 18 March 2007 (UTC)
I'm trying to compile a list of all the hidden agendas we hold dear here at Wikipedia. Your feedback on the content and format of the page, and your contributions, would be greatly appreciated! Jouster ( whisper) 22:53, 25 March 2007 (UTC)
This is my first wikipedia article. I would like some general feedback on it. Is it following the correct form? Are the sentences too long? How is my puncuation and grammer? Thanks a lot.
Description: Lilliput is a professional manufacturer of mobile lcd video.
Ive created this article and its the first one Ive created. Since I hope this isnt my last major contribution, I would like to know what I can do better next time.
Daxcon My article was flagged as being written like an advertisement. I have made changes throughout the whole page in an attempt to write it more like an encyclopedia article. However, I was hoping that I cuold have several other people look at it and make changes to it if they would like in an attempt to make it even more neutral.
First, I am obliged to explain the meaning of the word "consciousness". I would not describe it a level of self-awareness, or a sense of subjectivity, but more as an awareness of the world. I have noticed a very strange phaenomenon among the "less" educated population. They do not have a logicall concept of reality in its full term. According to their character, social situation and group in society, they subsequently, mostly completely subconsciounsly decide which feelings, effects and even moments should be shut out, because there is a risk of a "mutilation" of their conception of reality, so to speak. I ask you for help, thank you.
Hi. I've been working on this article for quite a while and would appreciate any further recommendations for improvement. Epbr123 03:41, 30 March 2007 (UTC)
Since the issue may get some more media coverage over the next year or so, as Barack Obama's presidential campaign is watched, it seemed as though it would be appropriate for Wikipedia to have an article about the " Bradley effect". Any feedback other editors would care to offer is appreciated. Mwelch 02:29, 21 March 2007 (UTC)
This is my first article of any real length, and I was just curious all around about how it was written. It's been up for a few days and nobody but a bot has made changes. Other than the obvious flaw of almost no inline citations (I have a bibliography instead), I'm not sure what else needs to be seriously worked on. So basically, I'm looking for any and every change you can make to improve this article. CSZero 21:14, 30 March 2007 (UTC)
I have been working on this article for some time and would like make it a good article. I understand that there's a long way to go but I'm not sure what I should do to improve it. This is an article about a football player, and some people have told me that a football player's page in general stands no chance for any good status, unless he is a remarkably well-known star (like David Beckham). Could anyone please kindly give me feedback on the current condition of the article. Any suggestion is very much appreciated. Thanks so much. S. Miyano 12:13, 19 March 2007 (UTC)
At Wikipedia:Peer review/Shahbag/archive2 it has been advised that a Civic Administration section should be added to the article, as well as information on geography, climate and such. How necessary is that, and how relevant? What other information is largely missing from the article, but needs to be there? I am trying to take the article to FA status. Aditya Kabir 15:56, 4 April 2007 (UTC)
Mitsubishi has a couple v8s but I only see one. This is an example of where the engines list are lacking, is there someone who can contribute to this list and other engine list as they are all lacking details for past couple years, well im hoping a Volkswagon engine list will evently be added wich I beleave are made by Audi and alot more details to each engine listed would help aswell. -- Jay173 10:10, 5 April 2007 (UTC)
This one in this article available on the Mitsubishi Raider its a 4.7 liter v8. http://research.cars.com/go/crp/research.jsp?logtype=6§ion=summary&aff=freep&call=crp&makeid=34&year=2007&modelid=148 08:39, 6 April 2007 (UTC)
On that note i think the all engine catigorys can be more detailed from now on because they are lacking this.
09:45, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
Reposting request ... I'd really appreciate it if someone would take a look and give me some feedback. My initial request was archived without any comments. Thanks.
First request (from 13 March 2007): I've just posted a complete overhaul of this page. As it's my first WP contribution, I'd appreciate any and all feedback. Before I worked on it, there was virtually no sourcing and a good deal of what I didn't think to be encyclopedic content/language. Here's a link to the diff: http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Jeremy_Sowers&diff=114682815&oldid=111020744 Thanks in advance. -- Sanfranman59 20:10, 1 April 2007 (UTC)
Looks good to me. I'm not intereested in sports at all, so I'm an objective observer. The article appears to be comprehensive. You might consider the use of the "as of" templates to indicate information that is current but that may change in the future. - Arch dude 02:01, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
I recently did a fairly major overhaul of the Renaissance ( diff) article's structure, as well as rewriting and referencing several sections (35 refs now, up from 6).
I need to know whether the new structure makes sense, and what more can be done to complete this article. I'm hoping to get it to GA status (at least). Thanks. MAIS- talk- contr 15:15, 5 April 2007 (UTC)
I did some copyedits to make the language a bit crisper. Please review. Overall, I think your changes are a massive improvement. Thanks! - Arch dude 02:53, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
I recently finished my first wiki article, and would like to make sure that I've done a decent job. The article is Cobranet. I think the intro might be a bit too short, but I'm not positive. Any other comments you might have would be appreciated. Snottywong 23:32, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
Your article looks good already. It is a credit to Wikipedia as it stands. Since I know little about the subject, I represent the "intellegent 12-year-old" to whom the intro should be addressed. In that regard, I think you need to succently address the following questions in the intro:
Going deeper, you might consider some network diagrams. You can use any tool you are comfortable with to make the diagram, and then upload it to wikicommons. Keep up the good work! - Arch dude 01:19, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
Please review and let me know what is thought of my revisions to this stub. Here is the diff page for the revisions. http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Microarchitecture&diff=next&oldid=106982850
Thank you
Timmh
nice work dude add few pictures with it
Link to difference page for revisions: [1] Calineed 18:25, 8 April 2007 (UTC)
I added the template fo a UK place, but I botched ti. I think you need to figure out how to refie this. we nnd a more detailed map, and we need the precise geolocatin of the church, but I do not know how to do this. - Arch dude 01:44, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
I wrote this article last month, and it was featured in the "Did you know?" section on the front page, but only one person besides me edited it and that was to pipe a wikilink. I'd like feedback and a review of the page. In particular, I'd like people to check the prose (I sometimes write in a bit of a clumsy manner without realizing it) and the neutrality (I think it's neutral, but the point is whether other people do or not). Do not hesitate to point out formatting or other technical improvements either. Thanks! Leebo T/ C 18:41, 11 April 2007 (UTC)
I have made an article on the emo band sleepytime trio and would like help, constructive criticism, comment, etc. Doody 09 05:29, 13 April 2007 (UTC)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Daxcon
I was hopingto get some feedback on the layout of my article. The reason that I care about my layout is that it is a company article and feel that it should follow a certain layout. Also, I was wondering if there were any other specific pages to where I could link my article or if I need to add a section to make the article more wikipedia oriented.
Hello!
I am new here, I come from the German Wikipedia and my English is not so good …
Yesterday I created the article
Frauentausch. I ask you for reading and correcting the article. I hope that there are not so many mistakes. Thanks for reading and correcting! --
Despairing
11:34, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
Hello everyone,
I have made some major edits to the above article over the past 2 days, which refers to Iran's nuclear programme.
Could you please tell me:
1. if it is NPOV enough?
2. If You think I have omitted any material fact.
Thanks in advance for your time and feedback.
SSZ 02:48, 15 April 2007 (UTC)
For historical reasons, The articles relating to the Intel Itanium are in a state of complete disarray. The main articles are IA-64, Itanium, and Itanium 2. I have proposed a merger of these articles, and I intend to complete the merger/rewrite on 16 April. My proposed new article is currently at User:Arch dude/Workspace, and I intend to move it to Itanium. Itanium is a really big deal in the computer industry. Is proponents assert that it will eventually dominate an industry that accounts for a significant percentage of the world's economy.
Please comment on the following:
Thanks.- Arch dude 00:29, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
(09:44, 9 April 2007 24.113.110.55) added:
One page could have first genration and then the second generation listed and if theres ever a third it can be listed like that aswell, rather than having to look at two seprate articals and just because they share a similer itanium name doesnt make them even close they just share some of the ia64 instruction set. This is what make the 386,pentium4 and intel core2 totaly diffrent processers for example.
Thanks for your help everyone. I updated the article in he main wikispace. - Arch dude 19:48, 19 April 2007 (UTC)
The Best Bet is a Singaporean film about the perils of gambling. I wrote this article on 31 March and have just nominated it for DYK. As the creator of RFF, surely I should benefit from it, by receiving feedback that would help me improve this article, so that the DYK nomination will be successful and the article will receive a B-class rating (and possibly GA status in future)?
Two major concerns:
-- J.L.W.S. The Special One 03:17, 4 April 2007 (UTC)
Strike is used in the USA in a simmilar manner to mean "win" or "find," as in the phrases "strike it rich," "gold strike," and "he struck oil." You might consider a small stub article on this usage of the word strike. Yes, wikipedia is not a dictionary, but this is one of many cases where a small disambiguation article is the best solution to the problem. - Arch dude 02:34, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
Video blog is a blog that contains regular video posts and is usually accompanied by an RSS feed with media enclosures. (i.e. a video podcast) Before I began editing the article, it was mostly OR from videobloggers who have an attachment to the article. I gradually (over the last 6 or so months) removed a lot of non notable content, indiscriminate links, and unsourced content after requesting citations. The article is currently undergoing an revert war between the cleaned up version and the original version (from about 6 months ago). Cleaned up version, Original Version, Difference Between Versions See the talk page for a summary of my changes and the current discussion. Pdelongchamp 15:08, 19 April 2007 (UTC)
A global problem-solving competition. I've done some work improving, want to know what should be done next. - AtionSong 21:57, 19 April 2007 (UTC)
We just completely rewrote an article stub on SQL Null, and would like to get feedback on it. Any and all feedback appreciated. Particularly we're looking for advice on style, content, citation, NPOV, etc. All the things that make a good article good. Old Article here: Old SQL NULL article, Current Article here: SQL NULL. Thanks SqlPac 17:45, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
This is an older article (first created in 2004), but it has never been in particularly good shape. Several dozen other articles link to this article, so the topic has some importance. The subject is a geographic area in the western suburbs of Philadelphia. One of the problems, probably, with this topic is that in the Philadelphia area, the Main Line is frequently considered as a "prestige" address in comparison to some other areas; this results in heated debate over which geographic areas should properly be included as part of the Main Line. Spikebrennan 14:49, 25 April 2007 (UTC)
I've been providing some guidance to User:Rob.bastholm to help improve this article from its former CSD status to at least a legitimate corporate stub that can be moved to the Main namespace. For a new editor, he has done an admirable job in looking for WP:RS to the point where this is no longer a speedy candidate. If any other editors can provide any more information, that would be helpful. Also, while I would have no qualms about moving the article to the Main namespace right now, agreement from others would definitely help, so please do let him (and me!) know. -- Kinu t/ c 19:33, 25 April 2007 (UTC)
how can this page be linked to other pages eg. mental health, mental illness, the Charter of Rights and Freedoms (s. 15), discrimination and disability?
I'm new to editing at wikipedia, and trying to learn the ropes. I've been fairly "bold" with this article, and have made substantial changes to its organization and content. I feel the middle section, "Analysis" still needs to be completely re-written, but am happy for now with the first section, "The accident flight". Please let me know if you think I'm doing a good job or not, especially with how I've used citations...I'm trying not to overdo them, but it might be considered inadequate. Thanks! Lipsticked Pig 01:17, 26 April 2007 (UTC)
I added a link to an article and when I pulled it up just now it wasn't displayed, but it is still in the edit page. Did I do it wrong?
The article is http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rocky_Flats. The link is to a book written by my dad on the history of the critical mass lab there. He was a scientist there for the entire existence of the lab. The book was written under government contract.
I would like to have this article reassessed, while I dont believe it's a stub anymore, i have added a few things that i feel that it makes it even better. The language may need to be changed also.
Hi there! I've recently started work on this detailed timeline of mission STS-51-L (the Space Shuttle Challenger disaster), and I assume it comes under the definition of a list. I'd very much like to get it to featued status, but as I have never penned a Wikipedia list before, I'd greatly appreciate any feedback with advice as to what I need to do to improve it. Thanking you in advance, Colds7ream 13:13, 26 April 2007 (UTC)
Today I found these two articles and saw that they were on the articles for deletion category so I made the obvious clarity edits, updated information, and added references to the two articles. I was wondering what other suggestions there were for fixing the articles so that they are not deleted. Also I was wondering if it is NPOV enough and if not then what would you edit to make it more NPOV. What else might I add to show the notability of the articles and the artists that they represent. God Bless, Professor Davies 20:24, 26 April 2007 (UTC)
Muchos Gracias, thank you very much I will edit those phrases and try to get third party references. God Bless, Professor Davies 03:55, 27 April 2007 (UTC)
I have translated text from the Portuguese language WP, added more information and references. Macgreco 16:37, 27 April 2007 (UTC)
Hi. I made some major edits to the article a few months ago, and now it has been tagged repeatedly. I want to eventually improve it, but I want to know what this article lacks the most. Please tell me the major things this article needs, like sources, wikify, tone, etc. I could possibly find sources, and will try to wikify. Does wikifying indicate adding links, or is it more than that? Also, what is an easy way to change the tone? Thanks. – A stroHur ricane 00 1( Talk+ Contribs+ Ubx)(+ sign here+ How's my editing?) 21:16, 28 April 2007 (UTC)
I have done a fair bit editing on the page and would like to know what else I could improve or change. I changed from the image formating (in addition to adding one) and has a result had to change some of the content as well.Furthermore more, it appears that the image for the Crystal Field Stablisation Energy section disagrees somewhat with the image Here's the diff page
http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Crystal_field_theory&diff=126918701&oldid=119466862
I am also responsible for the eight intermediate edits. -- YanA 06:26, 29 April 2007 (UTC)
I have made some more edits. The link above has been updated.-- YanA 20:47, 29 April 2007 (UTC)
Nevermind, I no longer feel that it is necessary. -- YanA 06:55, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
Hi. I made this article several months ago, and now I am requesting feedback. It has mostly been edited by other users. The talkpage states it is mostly still at Start-class, and haven't been much improved since. I want to know what the article still lacks, so someone could make it better. What does it need: more info, pov, length, sources, images, reports, interestingness, or something else? I know this is a very bright and notable object, so what needs to be improved? Thanks. – A stroHur ricane 00 1( Talk+ Contribs+ Ubx)(+ sign here+ How's my editing?) 21:09, 28 April 2007 (UTC)
Hello all! I just posted a new article disscussing Natural organic matter. I am just curious if there are specific sections I should expand on more. I welcome all feedback and opinions. Thank you for your time and efforts.
1013-alex 16:30, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
I made some changes to the the article covering the book by V.C. Andrews and created another one focusing one the movie based on the book. I would like some feedbak on whether or not my changes are more in keeping with the standards of Wikipedia and if there's more that should be done.
Jahunta07 08:39, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
Hi, I wrote BC Express sternwheeler and several other ship articles of that nature including a couple larger index type articles. I thought I'd get someone to look at this one and see how it can be improved as it is one of my favorites. I'd like to be made aware of any mistakes I'm making now, rather than repeating them over and over again. Thanks for your time. CindyBo 04:31, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
I have been working on the Humboldt State University article for a little bit now, struggling with what kind of content should go into the article of a small public university. A main problem I have is a lack of sources about the university. I have added little content, mostly correcting and changing the format. I added the History section, however. Any comments would be helpful, especially about the scope of the article. abexy 00:22, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
Hi:
This page is my attempt at giving credit to William Bengen for his research on retirement planning. I am relatively new to editing, and wanted feedback in 2 areas. 1. Since this is sort of a biography of a living person, did I violate any etiquette 2. Is it NPOV? I tried to write it as such, but don't know if it came out objective. Any suggestions welcome and I will try to follow up on them.
Thanks, Ramnarasimhan 16:07, 4 May 2007 (UTC)
For a few minutes I created the article Schloss Einstein. Because my English is not so good, I ask you for reading and improving. Thanks. -- Despairing 20:07, 5 May 2007 (UTC)
I have been working on this article recently, and I was wondering if it can be included as part of a history series on wikipedia? I am new to wikipedia so any advice on this would be great. Thanks TerritorialWaters 10:13 (UTC) 6 May 2007.
I created this article a while back, but it hasn't developed much. I was hoping for some suggestions for improvement- specifically how it might be made more relevant to the average reader. Possibly better tie-ins with other articles or specific suggestions for word-choice problems? Thanks! johnpseudo 22:26, 7 May 2007 (UTC)
I am especially looking for a standard to apply to determine which modern artists (and external links) might warrant inclusion -- the article periodically sprouts new ones (I am aware that the modern revival section currently lacks sourcing). Also, suggestions on how to appropriately expand of the lede and commentary as to whether the artwork depicted is adequately representative would be appreciated. I would like to start this on the long road toward GA and FA. Serpent's Choice 07:59, 8 May 2007 (UTC)
I first found this article as a very small stub which basically stated that it was a refuge and where it was located in Florida. For an English project, I was asked to radically expand the article and find many sources to back up the claims/facts in the article. I am fairly new to this Wikipedia thing. I would like specific help with the following:
Thanks for any help/comments/concerns... 1013-andy 02:19, 7 May 2007 (UTC)
Hey, I'm new to wikipedia and recently had an assignment for my english class to expand an article. I was just wondering if anyone had any advice to improve the article in any way, shape, or form. I would appreciate any help. Thanks. 1013-Jeff 23:12, 9 May 2007 (UTC)
full twisting layout
i started this article, and its just a stub, and i can't think of anything to add, anyone have any ideas.
Maddiekate
I'm trying to get this to GA status. Recommendations for improvement would be appreciated. Epbr123 17:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
I'm trying to get this to GA status. Recommendations for improvement would be appreciated. Epbr123 17:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
I'm trying to get this to GA status. Recommendations for improvement would be appreciated. Epbr123 17:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
I'm trying to get this to GA status. Recommendations for improvement would be appreciated. Epbr123 17:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
I did a major revision of this page. Will appreciate feedback on how to give it a better structure--that is, break it into different entries, add headings, or other suggestion on how to make it better fit the wikipedia model. Cpgruber 22:04, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
Hi. I recently created this article. However, a few days after I added a second edit, Thehedgehog ( talk · contribs) reverted it, stating it was false, and that it was a new edit. However, after checking his/her contribs, it turns out that the user has been on wiki longer than I have, but have made far less edits. In fact, the user's only edit in May 2007 was to revert this edit. How, and why? I sent that user a comment, questioning about his/her recent revert. Most likely, this user either clicked on Random article, or he/she visited another article, clicking individual links until that user arrived at that one. Unfortuneately, since that user rarely makes a lot of edits, I'm not sure he/she will reply anytime soon, which is why I am adding this comment here. If this is not the place to put this comment, please tell me where else, if anywhere, I could put it, such as the Help Desk, etc. Anyway, what should I do? With that user not likely to reply anytime soon, I'm not sure what I could do. Why do I think his/her revert was unjustified? Please see the comment on that user's talkpage, the only comment after "welcome". Also, what else should I do (when I have time) to improve that page? Thanks. -- A stroHurricane00 1( T+ C+ U) 15:51, 12 May 2007 (UTC)
The article Reversible reaction contains the following statement, which is utter rubbish.
"Irreversible reactions are often called "spontaneous" or "favorable". These reactions are usually entropically driven, as opposed to thermodynamically driven. In an irreversible reaction, there is generally a great increase in entropy."
However, before editing this out I need some information. In what context is the concept of a reversible reaction used? Clearly the context here is different from the thermodynamic one, as in Reversible process (thermodynamics).
The other difficulty I have with this idea is that all chemical reactions are equilibria. This follows directly from the relationship (at constant pressure)
Whatever the value of there is a corresponding equilibrium constant. Under standard conditions, the cases are
Is there a real difference between a reaction which is "reversible" and one that goes to an equilibrium mixture?
Petergans 10:17, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
Thanks in advance for any feedback about my first Wiki, BeetlesMod. It's intended to replace my outdated static HowTo web page, BeetleFart's Admin Mod for CS:Source.
I've added References per the Wiki style guide, citing authoritative sources for this subject matter. I haven't filled out the detail, yet, pending your feedback.
Is this a reasonable subject for Wikipedia? What else (besides content) is missing from my first Wiki?
Thanks.
Rabid—Preceding
unsigned comment added by
Rabid QODA (
talk •
contribs) 05:13, 12 May 2007.
I Not Stupid Too is Singapore's all-time second-highest grossing film. It is a sequel of the famous satirical comedy I Not Stupid, which prompted reforms in the Singapore education system.
I have spent two months on this article, and have finally finished it today. As the creator of the RFF process, surely I should be allowed to benefit from it, by getting feedback on an article I have rewritten?
Please give me general feedback and suggestions for improving the article, and assess its GA potential.
-- J.L.W.S. The Special One 11:28, 13 May 2007 (UTC)
I am trying to get certain articles on the Philippines up to featured article status. I compared the article of Metro Manila to featured articles on other cities around the world and I found out some criteria and information missing:
Also, I've been looking at other articles on places in the Philippines which I hope would reach featured status, these can be found on my page under "Hitlist". If anyone knows how we can get these articles to featured status, or added information, please tell me. Eternal dragon 09:54, 15 May 2007 (UTC)
DEAR
I LIKE TO SEND SPME LONODN PICTURE IN LONDON LITE
BUT COULD NOT FOUND PLEASE LET ME KNOW
I request for feedbacks on the following articles at my talk page- Four(Indian Soap) or Four(SAB TV) Left Right Left(SAB TV) Love Story(SAB TV) Gj talent 16:56, 16 May 2007 (UTC)
Article about a spiritual group that has been labeled a cult.
This article has been recently drastically changed. Feedback greatly appreciated. 19:45, 21 May 2007 (UTC)
I would like some outside feedback on this article, which I have worked on in spurts for over about a year. Any criticism is appreciated. Samwisep86 06:09, 17 May 2007 (UTC)
I created this article after merging-and-redirecting five stubs on individual sections of this road (the five stubs can be seen here, along with my original Aldersgate Street article). I then completely rewrote the five stubs to a common format, wrote sections for the ten stretches of road that didn't have existing pages, and sourced representative images for the more interesting stretches of road to try to provide some kind of context for the way in which this road changes character along its length. I'd like to know what others think, both of this particular article and of this concept as a way to deal with long roads that run through a number of different districts â iridescenti (talk to me!) 23:06, 18 May 2007 (UTC)
Not sure what the next phase is. At the request of another user, I have provided a distribution map and standardized/styled the references. Please advise whether this could be deemed ready for peer review. Thanksâ GRM 20:01, 19 May 2007 (UTC)
The article isn't finished; I just wanted to check I'm going in the right direction... I am intending to add articles for each book, similiar to Blast Off at Woomera Does this approach sound OK ? GrahamHardy 16:36, 15 May 2007 (UTC)
Hi, I wrote this article 'Quality Issues in Pakistani Higher Education: Accountablity vs. Improvement debate' sometime back as a university Assignment. I thought I should be placing it on the Wikipedia so that people interested in higher education could be benefited. I didn't know properly how to upload the file. Now I got the message that it should be deleted within next five days.
Could you please look into the issue?
This article is listed on WP:Vital_articles#Astronomy and I've attempted to do some further development of the page. At this point, however, I'm at a bit of a loss what else to do. The Lunar eclipse and Solar eclipse pages cover those respective topics to a high level of detail, so I think this page only needs summary-style coverage. Is anything else needed? Or should I call it done; polish it up (with refs.), and take it for a PR? Any feedback would be appreciated. Thanks! — RJH ( talk) 21:25, 21 May 2007 (UTC)
Dear volunteer editors,
Last night I posted my first article, about Micro Focus International plc, but without a category, and I would like to delete it, but can not find it!! Then this morning, I posted the article, with categories, but in PDF format... Ugh! That is not want I wanted it to look like, either... so I posted it in a different format, one in which I could use your toolbar to create links, bold items, etc., with categories included at that bottom...
I also included a new category, to add to your incredible burden... sigh...
I posted my article because I was looking for items about application portfolio management (APM) and noticed you don't have any on the site. I included links to other reference works. I wrote up the information, based on my own research about this particular company. I hope that is okay.
Please let me know.
Sincerely, Sami Menefee
I have written and contributed an article (Black Buddhist) for publication. My article does not appear when I do a google search. Can you help me to get such article published or can you explain any errors I have made. I am sight impaired and may be missing some simple written instruction. Thanks Paololarenzo 03:33, 23 May 2007 (UTC)
I'd welcome feedback, advice and help etc. on this article which I have been working on in my 'area', and have now uploaded. Suggestions how to link more properly to other articles, and how to do referencing properly (I have all the references, just not 100% sure how to present them) would be esp. welcome.
I'm actually 'pro choice' myself, but I remember reading about this in the news a few years ago, and when I noticed that the cleft palate article had only a vague, slightly out of date reference, I thought I'd write this.
Hopefully you will see that every effort has been made to ensure neutrality and that both sides of the argument are put across.
Feel free to edit/add to the article and leave comments here and on my talk page if necc.
Joistmonkey 20:55, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
Thanks guys, I've had a go at merging a few paragraphs - might do a bit more later - and will read the footnote stuff and re-read the BLP before I sort out the references etc. in a day or two. Thanks for feedback. Anyone else wanting to give any, gratefully received. This is more about me learning how to write articles well, than it is about this particular article being perfick :-) Joistmonkey 22:27, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
Bouchard was a french-argenitne corsair who, among other things, occupated California in the name of Argentina. I've been translating the article from the Spanish featured article and now I've finished and am trying to feature it here in en. I need advice. I'm contacting editors who have a high level of English and Spanish to help me with the language. Argentini an 23:57, 27 May 2007 (UTC)
Hey everyone, ive done a few minor edits to this article ( Charles Upham) and i intend to do more. The article is about one of the greatest war heros of our time! It is in desperate need of attention, can anyone suggest anything major that might improve the article a lot, i am less experienced on the subject of a good article, as i am a beginner at writing and editing articles. i intend to do some research for this article in my own time. He deserves more than this! Slowbro 00:49, 29 May 2007 (UTC)
Collaborative methods are processes, behaviors and conversations that relate to collaboration between individuals. I have written this article and created the images ⦠another set of eyes is desperately needed!
Thank you â Parhamr 11:35, 29 May 2007 (UTC)
This is a NYS EMT certification level. I re-wrote the article and would like it reviewed to see if there are any errors I have made/overlooked. Demantos 16:24, 30 May 2007 (UTC)
I am currently in the process of rewriting the article here, and I am wishing if anyone is willing to help me out during writing who is more knowledgable than me with the Pirates of the Caribbean franchise, for me to cite the tie-in books more. Alientraveller 21:05, 30 May 2007 (UTC)
The article on Harringay had been around since 2004, but was short and contained inaccuracies. Some of the original remains, including the final para which another user clearly didn't want deleted. But most of what's on the page is new. This link shows the diffs [5].
I noticed a message today about tone, and on digging down a start-up rating. Feedback please on what's needed re tone and how to move beyond start-up.
I've recently made major additions to a little-known article called Myth and ritual. Myth-ritualism and Myth-ritualist redirect there. When I originally created the article, User:KillerChihuahua immediately (and prudently, now that I think about it) hit it with an "original research" notice.
As far as I can tell, the problem wasn't that I went too far: it's that I didn't go far enough. I mentioned only a few scholars as representative examples, making the article read more like an essay than like an encyclopedia article. Now I think I've fixed the problem by adding more information and references, so I've removed the "OR" notice. User:KillerChihuahua suggested that I ask other users to look over the article.
Please take a moment to look over myth and ritual and leave feedback on its talk page. More is better!
Current version: myth and ritual
Version before my major additions: http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Myth_and_ritual&oldid=130819843
Sorry; forgot to add signature. -- Phatius McBluff 02:38, 1 June 2007 (UTC)
Please see my concerns about the hypostasis (linguistics) and hypostasis (religion) articles here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Hypostasis_%28religion%29
Sorry; forgot to add signature. -- Phatius McBluff 02:38, 1 June 2007 (UTC)
Hello everyone! I have added a new article to Wikipedia: Polyanhydrides. This is a class of polymers generally used in the medical or drug delivery fields. Any suggesstions or reccommendations would be much appreciated! polyanhydrides
A small article so far, but I would love some suggestions on how to improve it. S.dedalus 05:15, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
Been trying to add a bit more to this article as it was rather barren when I first came across it. Her name was also misspelled all over the site. I don't consider myself a writer and would appreciate any comments/help I could get on this article. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Campbecf ( talk • contribs) 08:21, 30 May 2007
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American/British trombonist and composer. Think I've got it going now; I'd appreciate any general evaluation, and esp. on citation/reference style--the article relies heavily on online sources, so it didn't seem to make sense to separate them out as "External Links". I hope my solution makes sense. Also most of the article synthesizes multiple sources so it's difficult to footnote or Harvard-cite each item. Does it seem encyclopedic? Hopefully the text establishes notability. thanks.-- Turangalila ( talk) 10:37, 16 March 2007 (UTC)
I've written a completely new article for this subject, as the previous version wasn't really up to scratch. I've added a section on roots and influences, revised and expanded a list of Tartan Noir authors, added notable works in the genre. This is my first crack at a wiki article, and I'd like to know what others think of it. Many thanks. Edofedinburgh 23:26, 16 March 2007 (UTC)
Could you come and give some comments for rivision. This is my article for screen quotas. Thank you
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Screen_Quotas
Subject of article is a longtime activist who has been in the news recently for a notable case brought against Internet Archive. Though I have tried to be extremely meticulous with sourcing statements, the subject of the article has complained on the talk page about inaccuracy and NPOV. Please review the article and double check the sources, as well as provide any feedback on how it might be improved. Thanks! Jokestress 21:33, 20 March 2007 (UTC)
I just created an article for David Pines, a theoretical physicist with a long career. The page needs a lot of clean up and is too list like.
Can someone please check this over? I added headers but I don't think I split it up right. Tikuko 17:32, 16 March 2007 (UTC)
The prose of this article has ben called strange. Please comment on what should be done to improve it.-- Shahab 10:50, 18 March 2007 (UTC)
I'm trying to compile a list of all the hidden agendas we hold dear here at Wikipedia. Your feedback on the content and format of the page, and your contributions, would be greatly appreciated! Jouster ( whisper) 22:53, 25 March 2007 (UTC)
This is my first wikipedia article. I would like some general feedback on it. Is it following the correct form? Are the sentences too long? How is my puncuation and grammer? Thanks a lot.
Description: Lilliput is a professional manufacturer of mobile lcd video.
Ive created this article and its the first one Ive created. Since I hope this isnt my last major contribution, I would like to know what I can do better next time.
Daxcon My article was flagged as being written like an advertisement. I have made changes throughout the whole page in an attempt to write it more like an encyclopedia article. However, I was hoping that I cuold have several other people look at it and make changes to it if they would like in an attempt to make it even more neutral.
First, I am obliged to explain the meaning of the word "consciousness". I would not describe it a level of self-awareness, or a sense of subjectivity, but more as an awareness of the world. I have noticed a very strange phaenomenon among the "less" educated population. They do not have a logicall concept of reality in its full term. According to their character, social situation and group in society, they subsequently, mostly completely subconsciounsly decide which feelings, effects and even moments should be shut out, because there is a risk of a "mutilation" of their conception of reality, so to speak. I ask you for help, thank you.
Hi. I've been working on this article for quite a while and would appreciate any further recommendations for improvement. Epbr123 03:41, 30 March 2007 (UTC)
Since the issue may get some more media coverage over the next year or so, as Barack Obama's presidential campaign is watched, it seemed as though it would be appropriate for Wikipedia to have an article about the " Bradley effect". Any feedback other editors would care to offer is appreciated. Mwelch 02:29, 21 March 2007 (UTC)
This is my first article of any real length, and I was just curious all around about how it was written. It's been up for a few days and nobody but a bot has made changes. Other than the obvious flaw of almost no inline citations (I have a bibliography instead), I'm not sure what else needs to be seriously worked on. So basically, I'm looking for any and every change you can make to improve this article. CSZero 21:14, 30 March 2007 (UTC)
I have been working on this article for some time and would like make it a good article. I understand that there's a long way to go but I'm not sure what I should do to improve it. This is an article about a football player, and some people have told me that a football player's page in general stands no chance for any good status, unless he is a remarkably well-known star (like David Beckham). Could anyone please kindly give me feedback on the current condition of the article. Any suggestion is very much appreciated. Thanks so much. S. Miyano 12:13, 19 March 2007 (UTC)
At Wikipedia:Peer review/Shahbag/archive2 it has been advised that a Civic Administration section should be added to the article, as well as information on geography, climate and such. How necessary is that, and how relevant? What other information is largely missing from the article, but needs to be there? I am trying to take the article to FA status. Aditya Kabir 15:56, 4 April 2007 (UTC)
Mitsubishi has a couple v8s but I only see one. This is an example of where the engines list are lacking, is there someone who can contribute to this list and other engine list as they are all lacking details for past couple years, well im hoping a Volkswagon engine list will evently be added wich I beleave are made by Audi and alot more details to each engine listed would help aswell. -- Jay173 10:10, 5 April 2007 (UTC)
This one in this article available on the Mitsubishi Raider its a 4.7 liter v8. http://research.cars.com/go/crp/research.jsp?logtype=6§ion=summary&aff=freep&call=crp&makeid=34&year=2007&modelid=148 08:39, 6 April 2007 (UTC)
On that note i think the all engine catigorys can be more detailed from now on because they are lacking this.
09:45, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
Reposting request ... I'd really appreciate it if someone would take a look and give me some feedback. My initial request was archived without any comments. Thanks.
First request (from 13 March 2007): I've just posted a complete overhaul of this page. As it's my first WP contribution, I'd appreciate any and all feedback. Before I worked on it, there was virtually no sourcing and a good deal of what I didn't think to be encyclopedic content/language. Here's a link to the diff: http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Jeremy_Sowers&diff=114682815&oldid=111020744 Thanks in advance. -- Sanfranman59 20:10, 1 April 2007 (UTC)
Looks good to me. I'm not intereested in sports at all, so I'm an objective observer. The article appears to be comprehensive. You might consider the use of the "as of" templates to indicate information that is current but that may change in the future. - Arch dude 02:01, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
I recently did a fairly major overhaul of the Renaissance ( diff) article's structure, as well as rewriting and referencing several sections (35 refs now, up from 6).
I need to know whether the new structure makes sense, and what more can be done to complete this article. I'm hoping to get it to GA status (at least). Thanks. MAIS- talk- contr 15:15, 5 April 2007 (UTC)
I did some copyedits to make the language a bit crisper. Please review. Overall, I think your changes are a massive improvement. Thanks! - Arch dude 02:53, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
I recently finished my first wiki article, and would like to make sure that I've done a decent job. The article is Cobranet. I think the intro might be a bit too short, but I'm not positive. Any other comments you might have would be appreciated. Snottywong 23:32, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
Your article looks good already. It is a credit to Wikipedia as it stands. Since I know little about the subject, I represent the "intellegent 12-year-old" to whom the intro should be addressed. In that regard, I think you need to succently address the following questions in the intro:
Going deeper, you might consider some network diagrams. You can use any tool you are comfortable with to make the diagram, and then upload it to wikicommons. Keep up the good work! - Arch dude 01:19, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
Please review and let me know what is thought of my revisions to this stub. Here is the diff page for the revisions. http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Microarchitecture&diff=next&oldid=106982850
Thank you
Timmh
nice work dude add few pictures with it
Link to difference page for revisions: [1] Calineed 18:25, 8 April 2007 (UTC)
I added the template fo a UK place, but I botched ti. I think you need to figure out how to refie this. we nnd a more detailed map, and we need the precise geolocatin of the church, but I do not know how to do this. - Arch dude 01:44, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
I wrote this article last month, and it was featured in the "Did you know?" section on the front page, but only one person besides me edited it and that was to pipe a wikilink. I'd like feedback and a review of the page. In particular, I'd like people to check the prose (I sometimes write in a bit of a clumsy manner without realizing it) and the neutrality (I think it's neutral, but the point is whether other people do or not). Do not hesitate to point out formatting or other technical improvements either. Thanks! Leebo T/ C 18:41, 11 April 2007 (UTC)
I have made an article on the emo band sleepytime trio and would like help, constructive criticism, comment, etc. Doody 09 05:29, 13 April 2007 (UTC)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Daxcon
I was hopingto get some feedback on the layout of my article. The reason that I care about my layout is that it is a company article and feel that it should follow a certain layout. Also, I was wondering if there were any other specific pages to where I could link my article or if I need to add a section to make the article more wikipedia oriented.
Hello!
I am new here, I come from the German Wikipedia and my English is not so good …
Yesterday I created the article
Frauentausch. I ask you for reading and correcting the article. I hope that there are not so many mistakes. Thanks for reading and correcting! --
Despairing
11:34, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
Hello everyone,
I have made some major edits to the above article over the past 2 days, which refers to Iran's nuclear programme.
Could you please tell me:
1. if it is NPOV enough?
2. If You think I have omitted any material fact.
Thanks in advance for your time and feedback.
SSZ 02:48, 15 April 2007 (UTC)
For historical reasons, The articles relating to the Intel Itanium are in a state of complete disarray. The main articles are IA-64, Itanium, and Itanium 2. I have proposed a merger of these articles, and I intend to complete the merger/rewrite on 16 April. My proposed new article is currently at User:Arch dude/Workspace, and I intend to move it to Itanium. Itanium is a really big deal in the computer industry. Is proponents assert that it will eventually dominate an industry that accounts for a significant percentage of the world's economy.
Please comment on the following:
Thanks.- Arch dude 00:29, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
(09:44, 9 April 2007 24.113.110.55) added:
One page could have first genration and then the second generation listed and if theres ever a third it can be listed like that aswell, rather than having to look at two seprate articals and just because they share a similer itanium name doesnt make them even close they just share some of the ia64 instruction set. This is what make the 386,pentium4 and intel core2 totaly diffrent processers for example.
Thanks for your help everyone. I updated the article in he main wikispace. - Arch dude 19:48, 19 April 2007 (UTC)
The Best Bet is a Singaporean film about the perils of gambling. I wrote this article on 31 March and have just nominated it for DYK. As the creator of RFF, surely I should benefit from it, by receiving feedback that would help me improve this article, so that the DYK nomination will be successful and the article will receive a B-class rating (and possibly GA status in future)?
Two major concerns:
-- J.L.W.S. The Special One 03:17, 4 April 2007 (UTC)
Strike is used in the USA in a simmilar manner to mean "win" or "find," as in the phrases "strike it rich," "gold strike," and "he struck oil." You might consider a small stub article on this usage of the word strike. Yes, wikipedia is not a dictionary, but this is one of many cases where a small disambiguation article is the best solution to the problem. - Arch dude 02:34, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
Video blog is a blog that contains regular video posts and is usually accompanied by an RSS feed with media enclosures. (i.e. a video podcast) Before I began editing the article, it was mostly OR from videobloggers who have an attachment to the article. I gradually (over the last 6 or so months) removed a lot of non notable content, indiscriminate links, and unsourced content after requesting citations. The article is currently undergoing an revert war between the cleaned up version and the original version (from about 6 months ago). Cleaned up version, Original Version, Difference Between Versions See the talk page for a summary of my changes and the current discussion. Pdelongchamp 15:08, 19 April 2007 (UTC)
A global problem-solving competition. I've done some work improving, want to know what should be done next. - AtionSong 21:57, 19 April 2007 (UTC)
We just completely rewrote an article stub on SQL Null, and would like to get feedback on it. Any and all feedback appreciated. Particularly we're looking for advice on style, content, citation, NPOV, etc. All the things that make a good article good. Old Article here: Old SQL NULL article, Current Article here: SQL NULL. Thanks SqlPac 17:45, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
This is an older article (first created in 2004), but it has never been in particularly good shape. Several dozen other articles link to this article, so the topic has some importance. The subject is a geographic area in the western suburbs of Philadelphia. One of the problems, probably, with this topic is that in the Philadelphia area, the Main Line is frequently considered as a "prestige" address in comparison to some other areas; this results in heated debate over which geographic areas should properly be included as part of the Main Line. Spikebrennan 14:49, 25 April 2007 (UTC)
I've been providing some guidance to User:Rob.bastholm to help improve this article from its former CSD status to at least a legitimate corporate stub that can be moved to the Main namespace. For a new editor, he has done an admirable job in looking for WP:RS to the point where this is no longer a speedy candidate. If any other editors can provide any more information, that would be helpful. Also, while I would have no qualms about moving the article to the Main namespace right now, agreement from others would definitely help, so please do let him (and me!) know. -- Kinu t/ c 19:33, 25 April 2007 (UTC)
how can this page be linked to other pages eg. mental health, mental illness, the Charter of Rights and Freedoms (s. 15), discrimination and disability?
I'm new to editing at wikipedia, and trying to learn the ropes. I've been fairly "bold" with this article, and have made substantial changes to its organization and content. I feel the middle section, "Analysis" still needs to be completely re-written, but am happy for now with the first section, "The accident flight". Please let me know if you think I'm doing a good job or not, especially with how I've used citations...I'm trying not to overdo them, but it might be considered inadequate. Thanks! Lipsticked Pig 01:17, 26 April 2007 (UTC)
I added a link to an article and when I pulled it up just now it wasn't displayed, but it is still in the edit page. Did I do it wrong?
The article is http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rocky_Flats. The link is to a book written by my dad on the history of the critical mass lab there. He was a scientist there for the entire existence of the lab. The book was written under government contract.
I would like to have this article reassessed, while I dont believe it's a stub anymore, i have added a few things that i feel that it makes it even better. The language may need to be changed also.
Hi there! I've recently started work on this detailed timeline of mission STS-51-L (the Space Shuttle Challenger disaster), and I assume it comes under the definition of a list. I'd very much like to get it to featued status, but as I have never penned a Wikipedia list before, I'd greatly appreciate any feedback with advice as to what I need to do to improve it. Thanking you in advance, Colds7ream 13:13, 26 April 2007 (UTC)
Today I found these two articles and saw that they were on the articles for deletion category so I made the obvious clarity edits, updated information, and added references to the two articles. I was wondering what other suggestions there were for fixing the articles so that they are not deleted. Also I was wondering if it is NPOV enough and if not then what would you edit to make it more NPOV. What else might I add to show the notability of the articles and the artists that they represent. God Bless, Professor Davies 20:24, 26 April 2007 (UTC)
Muchos Gracias, thank you very much I will edit those phrases and try to get third party references. God Bless, Professor Davies 03:55, 27 April 2007 (UTC)
I have translated text from the Portuguese language WP, added more information and references. Macgreco 16:37, 27 April 2007 (UTC)
Hi. I made some major edits to the article a few months ago, and now it has been tagged repeatedly. I want to eventually improve it, but I want to know what this article lacks the most. Please tell me the major things this article needs, like sources, wikify, tone, etc. I could possibly find sources, and will try to wikify. Does wikifying indicate adding links, or is it more than that? Also, what is an easy way to change the tone? Thanks. – A stroHur ricane 00 1( Talk+ Contribs+ Ubx)(+ sign here+ How's my editing?) 21:16, 28 April 2007 (UTC)
I have done a fair bit editing on the page and would like to know what else I could improve or change. I changed from the image formating (in addition to adding one) and has a result had to change some of the content as well.Furthermore more, it appears that the image for the Crystal Field Stablisation Energy section disagrees somewhat with the image Here's the diff page
http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Crystal_field_theory&diff=126918701&oldid=119466862
I am also responsible for the eight intermediate edits. -- YanA 06:26, 29 April 2007 (UTC)
I have made some more edits. The link above has been updated.-- YanA 20:47, 29 April 2007 (UTC)
Nevermind, I no longer feel that it is necessary. -- YanA 06:55, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
Hi. I made this article several months ago, and now I am requesting feedback. It has mostly been edited by other users. The talkpage states it is mostly still at Start-class, and haven't been much improved since. I want to know what the article still lacks, so someone could make it better. What does it need: more info, pov, length, sources, images, reports, interestingness, or something else? I know this is a very bright and notable object, so what needs to be improved? Thanks. – A stroHur ricane 00 1( Talk+ Contribs+ Ubx)(+ sign here+ How's my editing?) 21:09, 28 April 2007 (UTC)
Hello all! I just posted a new article disscussing Natural organic matter. I am just curious if there are specific sections I should expand on more. I welcome all feedback and opinions. Thank you for your time and efforts.
1013-alex 16:30, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
I made some changes to the the article covering the book by V.C. Andrews and created another one focusing one the movie based on the book. I would like some feedbak on whether or not my changes are more in keeping with the standards of Wikipedia and if there's more that should be done.
Jahunta07 08:39, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
Hi, I wrote BC Express sternwheeler and several other ship articles of that nature including a couple larger index type articles. I thought I'd get someone to look at this one and see how it can be improved as it is one of my favorites. I'd like to be made aware of any mistakes I'm making now, rather than repeating them over and over again. Thanks for your time. CindyBo 04:31, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
I have been working on the Humboldt State University article for a little bit now, struggling with what kind of content should go into the article of a small public university. A main problem I have is a lack of sources about the university. I have added little content, mostly correcting and changing the format. I added the History section, however. Any comments would be helpful, especially about the scope of the article. abexy 00:22, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
Hi:
This page is my attempt at giving credit to William Bengen for his research on retirement planning. I am relatively new to editing, and wanted feedback in 2 areas. 1. Since this is sort of a biography of a living person, did I violate any etiquette 2. Is it NPOV? I tried to write it as such, but don't know if it came out objective. Any suggestions welcome and I will try to follow up on them.
Thanks, Ramnarasimhan 16:07, 4 May 2007 (UTC)
For a few minutes I created the article Schloss Einstein. Because my English is not so good, I ask you for reading and improving. Thanks. -- Despairing 20:07, 5 May 2007 (UTC)
I have been working on this article recently, and I was wondering if it can be included as part of a history series on wikipedia? I am new to wikipedia so any advice on this would be great. Thanks TerritorialWaters 10:13 (UTC) 6 May 2007.
I created this article a while back, but it hasn't developed much. I was hoping for some suggestions for improvement- specifically how it might be made more relevant to the average reader. Possibly better tie-ins with other articles or specific suggestions for word-choice problems? Thanks! johnpseudo 22:26, 7 May 2007 (UTC)
I am especially looking for a standard to apply to determine which modern artists (and external links) might warrant inclusion -- the article periodically sprouts new ones (I am aware that the modern revival section currently lacks sourcing). Also, suggestions on how to appropriately expand of the lede and commentary as to whether the artwork depicted is adequately representative would be appreciated. I would like to start this on the long road toward GA and FA. Serpent's Choice 07:59, 8 May 2007 (UTC)
I first found this article as a very small stub which basically stated that it was a refuge and where it was located in Florida. For an English project, I was asked to radically expand the article and find many sources to back up the claims/facts in the article. I am fairly new to this Wikipedia thing. I would like specific help with the following:
Thanks for any help/comments/concerns... 1013-andy 02:19, 7 May 2007 (UTC)
Hey, I'm new to wikipedia and recently had an assignment for my english class to expand an article. I was just wondering if anyone had any advice to improve the article in any way, shape, or form. I would appreciate any help. Thanks. 1013-Jeff 23:12, 9 May 2007 (UTC)
full twisting layout
i started this article, and its just a stub, and i can't think of anything to add, anyone have any ideas.
Maddiekate
I'm trying to get this to GA status. Recommendations for improvement would be appreciated. Epbr123 17:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
I'm trying to get this to GA status. Recommendations for improvement would be appreciated. Epbr123 17:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
I'm trying to get this to GA status. Recommendations for improvement would be appreciated. Epbr123 17:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
I'm trying to get this to GA status. Recommendations for improvement would be appreciated. Epbr123 17:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
I did a major revision of this page. Will appreciate feedback on how to give it a better structure--that is, break it into different entries, add headings, or other suggestion on how to make it better fit the wikipedia model. Cpgruber 22:04, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
Hi. I recently created this article. However, a few days after I added a second edit, Thehedgehog ( talk · contribs) reverted it, stating it was false, and that it was a new edit. However, after checking his/her contribs, it turns out that the user has been on wiki longer than I have, but have made far less edits. In fact, the user's only edit in May 2007 was to revert this edit. How, and why? I sent that user a comment, questioning about his/her recent revert. Most likely, this user either clicked on Random article, or he/she visited another article, clicking individual links until that user arrived at that one. Unfortuneately, since that user rarely makes a lot of edits, I'm not sure he/she will reply anytime soon, which is why I am adding this comment here. If this is not the place to put this comment, please tell me where else, if anywhere, I could put it, such as the Help Desk, etc. Anyway, what should I do? With that user not likely to reply anytime soon, I'm not sure what I could do. Why do I think his/her revert was unjustified? Please see the comment on that user's talkpage, the only comment after "welcome". Also, what else should I do (when I have time) to improve that page? Thanks. -- A stroHurricane00 1( T+ C+ U) 15:51, 12 May 2007 (UTC)
The article Reversible reaction contains the following statement, which is utter rubbish.
"Irreversible reactions are often called "spontaneous" or "favorable". These reactions are usually entropically driven, as opposed to thermodynamically driven. In an irreversible reaction, there is generally a great increase in entropy."
However, before editing this out I need some information. In what context is the concept of a reversible reaction used? Clearly the context here is different from the thermodynamic one, as in Reversible process (thermodynamics).
The other difficulty I have with this idea is that all chemical reactions are equilibria. This follows directly from the relationship (at constant pressure)
Whatever the value of there is a corresponding equilibrium constant. Under standard conditions, the cases are
Is there a real difference between a reaction which is "reversible" and one that goes to an equilibrium mixture?
Petergans 10:17, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
Thanks in advance for any feedback about my first Wiki, BeetlesMod. It's intended to replace my outdated static HowTo web page, BeetleFart's Admin Mod for CS:Source.
I've added References per the Wiki style guide, citing authoritative sources for this subject matter. I haven't filled out the detail, yet, pending your feedback.
Is this a reasonable subject for Wikipedia? What else (besides content) is missing from my first Wiki?
Thanks.
Rabid—Preceding
unsigned comment added by
Rabid QODA (
talk •
contribs) 05:13, 12 May 2007.
I Not Stupid Too is Singapore's all-time second-highest grossing film. It is a sequel of the famous satirical comedy I Not Stupid, which prompted reforms in the Singapore education system.
I have spent two months on this article, and have finally finished it today. As the creator of the RFF process, surely I should be allowed to benefit from it, by getting feedback on an article I have rewritten?
Please give me general feedback and suggestions for improving the article, and assess its GA potential.
-- J.L.W.S. The Special One 11:28, 13 May 2007 (UTC)
I am trying to get certain articles on the Philippines up to featured article status. I compared the article of Metro Manila to featured articles on other cities around the world and I found out some criteria and information missing:
Also, I've been looking at other articles on places in the Philippines which I hope would reach featured status, these can be found on my page under "Hitlist". If anyone knows how we can get these articles to featured status, or added information, please tell me. Eternal dragon 09:54, 15 May 2007 (UTC)
DEAR
I LIKE TO SEND SPME LONODN PICTURE IN LONDON LITE
BUT COULD NOT FOUND PLEASE LET ME KNOW
I request for feedbacks on the following articles at my talk page- Four(Indian Soap) or Four(SAB TV) Left Right Left(SAB TV) Love Story(SAB TV) Gj talent 16:56, 16 May 2007 (UTC)
Article about a spiritual group that has been labeled a cult.
This article has been recently drastically changed. Feedback greatly appreciated. 19:45, 21 May 2007 (UTC)
I would like some outside feedback on this article, which I have worked on in spurts for over about a year. Any criticism is appreciated. Samwisep86 06:09, 17 May 2007 (UTC)
I created this article after merging-and-redirecting five stubs on individual sections of this road (the five stubs can be seen here, along with my original Aldersgate Street article). I then completely rewrote the five stubs to a common format, wrote sections for the ten stretches of road that didn't have existing pages, and sourced representative images for the more interesting stretches of road to try to provide some kind of context for the way in which this road changes character along its length. I'd like to know what others think, both of this particular article and of this concept as a way to deal with long roads that run through a number of different districts â iridescenti (talk to me!) 23:06, 18 May 2007 (UTC)
Not sure what the next phase is. At the request of another user, I have provided a distribution map and standardized/styled the references. Please advise whether this could be deemed ready for peer review. Thanksâ GRM 20:01, 19 May 2007 (UTC)
The article isn't finished; I just wanted to check I'm going in the right direction... I am intending to add articles for each book, similiar to Blast Off at Woomera Does this approach sound OK ? GrahamHardy 16:36, 15 May 2007 (UTC)
Hi, I wrote this article 'Quality Issues in Pakistani Higher Education: Accountablity vs. Improvement debate' sometime back as a university Assignment. I thought I should be placing it on the Wikipedia so that people interested in higher education could be benefited. I didn't know properly how to upload the file. Now I got the message that it should be deleted within next five days.
Could you please look into the issue?
This article is listed on WP:Vital_articles#Astronomy and I've attempted to do some further development of the page. At this point, however, I'm at a bit of a loss what else to do. The Lunar eclipse and Solar eclipse pages cover those respective topics to a high level of detail, so I think this page only needs summary-style coverage. Is anything else needed? Or should I call it done; polish it up (with refs.), and take it for a PR? Any feedback would be appreciated. Thanks! — RJH ( talk) 21:25, 21 May 2007 (UTC)
Dear volunteer editors,
Last night I posted my first article, about Micro Focus International plc, but without a category, and I would like to delete it, but can not find it!! Then this morning, I posted the article, with categories, but in PDF format... Ugh! That is not want I wanted it to look like, either... so I posted it in a different format, one in which I could use your toolbar to create links, bold items, etc., with categories included at that bottom...
I also included a new category, to add to your incredible burden... sigh...
I posted my article because I was looking for items about application portfolio management (APM) and noticed you don't have any on the site. I included links to other reference works. I wrote up the information, based on my own research about this particular company. I hope that is okay.
Please let me know.
Sincerely, Sami Menefee
I have written and contributed an article (Black Buddhist) for publication. My article does not appear when I do a google search. Can you help me to get such article published or can you explain any errors I have made. I am sight impaired and may be missing some simple written instruction. Thanks Paololarenzo 03:33, 23 May 2007 (UTC)
I'd welcome feedback, advice and help etc. on this article which I have been working on in my 'area', and have now uploaded. Suggestions how to link more properly to other articles, and how to do referencing properly (I have all the references, just not 100% sure how to present them) would be esp. welcome.
I'm actually 'pro choice' myself, but I remember reading about this in the news a few years ago, and when I noticed that the cleft palate article had only a vague, slightly out of date reference, I thought I'd write this.
Hopefully you will see that every effort has been made to ensure neutrality and that both sides of the argument are put across.
Feel free to edit/add to the article and leave comments here and on my talk page if necc.
Joistmonkey 20:55, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
Thanks guys, I've had a go at merging a few paragraphs - might do a bit more later - and will read the footnote stuff and re-read the BLP before I sort out the references etc. in a day or two. Thanks for feedback. Anyone else wanting to give any, gratefully received. This is more about me learning how to write articles well, than it is about this particular article being perfick :-) Joistmonkey 22:27, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
Bouchard was a french-argenitne corsair who, among other things, occupated California in the name of Argentina. I've been translating the article from the Spanish featured article and now I've finished and am trying to feature it here in en. I need advice. I'm contacting editors who have a high level of English and Spanish to help me with the language. Argentini an 23:57, 27 May 2007 (UTC)
Hey everyone, ive done a few minor edits to this article ( Charles Upham) and i intend to do more. The article is about one of the greatest war heros of our time! It is in desperate need of attention, can anyone suggest anything major that might improve the article a lot, i am less experienced on the subject of a good article, as i am a beginner at writing and editing articles. i intend to do some research for this article in my own time. He deserves more than this! Slowbro 00:49, 29 May 2007 (UTC)
Collaborative methods are processes, behaviors and conversations that relate to collaboration between individuals. I have written this article and created the images ⦠another set of eyes is desperately needed!
Thank you â Parhamr 11:35, 29 May 2007 (UTC)
This is a NYS EMT certification level. I re-wrote the article and would like it reviewed to see if there are any errors I have made/overlooked. Demantos 16:24, 30 May 2007 (UTC)
I am currently in the process of rewriting the article here, and I am wishing if anyone is willing to help me out during writing who is more knowledgable than me with the Pirates of the Caribbean franchise, for me to cite the tie-in books more. Alientraveller 21:05, 30 May 2007 (UTC)
The article on Harringay had been around since 2004, but was short and contained inaccuracies. Some of the original remains, including the final para which another user clearly didn't want deleted. But most of what's on the page is new. This link shows the diffs [5].
I noticed a message today about tone, and on digging down a start-up rating. Feedback please on what's needed re tone and how to move beyond start-up.
I've recently made major additions to a little-known article called Myth and ritual. Myth-ritualism and Myth-ritualist redirect there. When I originally created the article, User:KillerChihuahua immediately (and prudently, now that I think about it) hit it with an "original research" notice.
As far as I can tell, the problem wasn't that I went too far: it's that I didn't go far enough. I mentioned only a few scholars as representative examples, making the article read more like an essay than like an encyclopedia article. Now I think I've fixed the problem by adding more information and references, so I've removed the "OR" notice. User:KillerChihuahua suggested that I ask other users to look over the article.
Please take a moment to look over myth and ritual and leave feedback on its talk page. More is better!
Current version: myth and ritual
Version before my major additions: http://en.wikipedia.org/?title=Myth_and_ritual&oldid=130819843
Sorry; forgot to add signature. -- Phatius McBluff 02:38, 1 June 2007 (UTC)
Please see my concerns about the hypostasis (linguistics) and hypostasis (religion) articles here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Hypostasis_%28religion%29
Sorry; forgot to add signature. -- Phatius McBluff 02:38, 1 June 2007 (UTC)
Hello everyone! I have added a new article to Wikipedia: Polyanhydrides. This is a class of polymers generally used in the medical or drug delivery fields. Any suggesstions or reccommendations would be much appreciated! polyanhydrides
A small article so far, but I would love some suggestions on how to improve it. S.dedalus 05:15, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
Been trying to add a bit more to this article as it was rather barren when I first came across it. Her name was also misspelled all over the site. I don't consider myself a writer and would appreciate any comments/help I could get on this article. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Campbecf ( talk • contribs) 08:21, 30 May 2007