- You need to add references to independent
reliable sources - unrelated to the camp. For example, newspaper articles. This is essential for all articles, a) to establish that the topic is
notable, and b) to ensure that it is
neutral.
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Primary sources can only be used with great care; without independent sources to
verify the claims, it is in danger of
looking like an advertisement.
- Be especially careful if you have a
conflict of interest.
- In addition, I suggest you
get a user account; it is not essential, but there are
lots of advantages.
Chzz
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03:22, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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This is a second request, I am looking for an outside party's opinion if this article meets the notability requirements for inclusion in Wikipedia before I move it into the namespace. Thank you for your time
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Mcmatter (
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05:26, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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- Yes, I'd say it meets the notability requirements.
- I've added details to the references using citation templates. See
User:Chzz/help/refs.
- Please change it to not use the informal 'Barb' but instead use surname, e.g. change Barb was a news journalist to Higgins was a news journalist
- If you have a
conflict of interest, then once live, please don't edit the article directly yourself, instead make suggestions on the talk page. See
WP:BESTCOI. Cheers,
Chzz
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05:47, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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- The article was extremely promotional in tone, and could have been speedy deleted under
G11 "Unambiguous advertising or promotion". I removed the promotional content with
this edit, but that does not leave much.
- You must maintain a
neutral point-of-view, and state facts from
reliable sources to demonstrate why the company is
notable enough for us to have an article - see
WP:NCORP.
- I imagine that you have a
conflict of interest, so you need to read the
business FAQ, and should not edit the article yourself; per
WP:BESTCOI you could make suggestions for edits on the articles talk page instead,
Talk:Business North East Group.
Chzz
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08:25, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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- A decent enough list of things he has done, but it seems very dry. It is good that you are not engaging in puffery, but maybe you could find something that someone else has said about him... to add some colour. At the moment, there isn't much to distinguish him from any other professor of art history.
- I have also made a couple of minor changes. In a similar vein, perhaps you could add a few more wikilinks.
- Finally, do you have information such as his date of birth and nationality? You may find
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (biographies) helpful.
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Yaris678 (
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20:36, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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- Sorry, but the tone is all wrong. It reads like it was planned for a magazine article, not an encyclopedia. Not a bad thing, except this is an encyclopedia, not a magazine.
- Given his works, it is possible he meets the
Notability guidelines, but there are zero references to
reliable sources to support any of the claims in the draft. While Wikipedia at one time allowed articles without references, that is no longer true for a Biography of a Living Person. See
Wikipedia:Biographies of living persons for more information.--
SPhilbrick
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17:13, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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- Please read
WP:COI. While it may seem odd that you would be discouraged from contributing to an article when you probably know more than any other editor, it actually makes sense in the context of the Wikipedia goals. All is not lost, though, if someone else creates an article, you are permitted, even encouraged, to post information to the related Talk Page, suggesting corrections, addition, or relevant sources, but other, uninvolved editors should make the changes.--
SPhilbrick
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17:05, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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This is my first article. I would appreciate any feedback. Also, I would like to add a company profile box along the right side, which includes Industry, Headquarters, Locations, etc. Can someone please tell me how to do this? Thank you in advance!
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Kristigaylord (
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18:41, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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- You definitely need some more
suitable references to add to the article, as it is definitely lacking in places.
Chevy
monte
carlo - alt
07:38, 9 August 2010 (UTC)
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- I hope to improve the references tonight. Thanks for the suggestion.
- Jeff
Noloader (
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20:32, 10 August 2010 (UTC)
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- Done.
- Jeff
Noloader (
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00:42, 11 August 2010 (UTC)
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This is my first article. I would like to know if I should include any other details about the individual members and their backgrounds, as well as more information about the website. Also, I would like to know I have included enough references to reliable sources, or if more should be included. This should be a good start. Thank you very much in advance for your time!
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Walterchestler (
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23:52, 8 August 2010 (UTC)
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- It's a good start, but if you've got web links you want to include, please move them to the 'External links' section instead, as URLs in the article are not really encouraged on Wikipedia. Also be careful with the
tone and point of view; it's easy to make the article sound like an advertisement, particularly with companies.
Chevy
monte
carlo - alt
07:42, 9 August 2010 (UTC)
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