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I've listed this article for peer review because I feel it needs to be expanded and worked on a lot.
No pictures? Have you checked Commons or Flickr (with the appropriate licences)?
Y Done.
"a famous" - that's POV, stick to the facts.
Y Fixed. A note: Even if she's gaining popularity and becoming famous, I agree. It's not very neutral to call someone "famous". And pardon me for marking your stuff up. I just need to keep track of what I've done already.
Place citations per
WP:CITE i.e. immediately after punctuation where possible.
I would expand the lead a little to describe what she's achieved and how. Then move the family stuff down as a first section along the lines of a Personal life section (or something similar).
The
Daniela Luján you link to as a character is a real person - is that link correct?
I believe so. I think Daniela Luján is the actress who played Luz Clarita in the telenovela.
"movie befor she acted in her first telenovela" maybe reorganise the biography in that case. And "befor" needs an e.
Y Okay, partially done. Someone corrected the "e" already.
There is a [citation needed] template which needs sorting out.
"She is currently dating Omar Rodriguez Lopez from The Mars Volta." - needs referencing and a timeframe i.e. As of September 2008...
Why is the album table coloured?
Y Done.
No need to wikilink dates any more - this has been deprecated.
The "Notes" section should be called "References" and each reference should be filled in correctly with, where available, title, url, author, date, accessdate and publisher.
A script has been used to generate a semi-
automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and
house style; it can be found on the
automated peer review page for September 2008.
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I feel it needs to be expanded and worked on a lot.
No pictures? Have you checked Commons or Flickr (with the appropriate licences)?
Y Done.
"a famous" - that's POV, stick to the facts.
Y Fixed. A note: Even if she's gaining popularity and becoming famous, I agree. It's not very neutral to call someone "famous". And pardon me for marking your stuff up. I just need to keep track of what I've done already.
Place citations per
WP:CITE i.e. immediately after punctuation where possible.
I would expand the lead a little to describe what she's achieved and how. Then move the family stuff down as a first section along the lines of a Personal life section (or something similar).
The
Daniela Luján you link to as a character is a real person - is that link correct?
I believe so. I think Daniela Luján is the actress who played Luz Clarita in the telenovela.
"movie befor she acted in her first telenovela" maybe reorganise the biography in that case. And "befor" needs an e.
Y Okay, partially done. Someone corrected the "e" already.
There is a [citation needed] template which needs sorting out.
"She is currently dating Omar Rodriguez Lopez from The Mars Volta." - needs referencing and a timeframe i.e. As of September 2008...
Why is the album table coloured?
Y Done.
No need to wikilink dates any more - this has been deprecated.
The "Notes" section should be called "References" and each reference should be filled in correctly with, where available, title, url, author, date, accessdate and publisher.