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Following successful FAC nominations for George Bernard Shaw, Hugh Walpole and Arnold Bennett I've worked on another British writer, and hope to take him too to FA. All comments on content, prose, structure or anything else will be gratefully received. Tim riley talk 10:25, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
I really know 0 about WSM except that he was one of the authors, together with D H Lawrence and Norman Douglas, published by Giuseppe Orioli in Florence in the 1930s (The Book Bag, 1932) - as that's mentioned in the Orioli article it might just be worth slipping in here - or not. The article reads fine to me. You might (?) say a bit more about the Ashenden stories and how they relate to his own experiences in Russia, etc.? all best, -- Smerus ( talk) 13:48, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
I've made a couple of little tweaks here and there (see the history), most of which are uncontentious. I'll draw one of them to your attention, which relates to commas. On the whole you don't use serial commas, but there are one or two places where you do. Whichever you settle on, it should be consistent.
Early works
1920s: travel and divorce
Short stories
Adaptations
I'll give it another readthrough in a few days to see if there is anything else. - The editor formerly known as SchroCat, editing from 2A00:23C7:2B86:9801:CDF3:7726:8C0C:5BD ( talk) 13:09, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
I have added this PR to the Template:FAC peer review sidebar to get quicker and more responses. When this PR is closed, please remove it from the list. Also, consider adding the sidebar to your userpage to help others discover pre-FAC PRs, and please review other articles in that template. Thanks, Z1720 ( talk) 04:54, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
With warm thanks to colleagues, above, for their suggestions, I'm closing the review and moving on to FAC, where needless to say, I'd love to see them join me. Tim riley talk 19:52, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
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Following successful FAC nominations for George Bernard Shaw, Hugh Walpole and Arnold Bennett I've worked on another British writer, and hope to take him too to FA. All comments on content, prose, structure or anything else will be gratefully received. Tim riley talk 10:25, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
I really know 0 about WSM except that he was one of the authors, together with D H Lawrence and Norman Douglas, published by Giuseppe Orioli in Florence in the 1930s (The Book Bag, 1932) - as that's mentioned in the Orioli article it might just be worth slipping in here - or not. The article reads fine to me. You might (?) say a bit more about the Ashenden stories and how they relate to his own experiences in Russia, etc.? all best, -- Smerus ( talk) 13:48, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
I've made a couple of little tweaks here and there (see the history), most of which are uncontentious. I'll draw one of them to your attention, which relates to commas. On the whole you don't use serial commas, but there are one or two places where you do. Whichever you settle on, it should be consistent.
Early works
1920s: travel and divorce
Short stories
Adaptations
I'll give it another readthrough in a few days to see if there is anything else. - The editor formerly known as SchroCat, editing from 2A00:23C7:2B86:9801:CDF3:7726:8C0C:5BD ( talk) 13:09, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
I have added this PR to the Template:FAC peer review sidebar to get quicker and more responses. When this PR is closed, please remove it from the list. Also, consider adding the sidebar to your userpage to help others discover pre-FAC PRs, and please review other articles in that template. Thanks, Z1720 ( talk) 04:54, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
With warm thanks to colleagues, above, for their suggestions, I'm closing the review and moving on to FAC, where needless to say, I'd love to see them join me. Tim riley talk 19:52, 24 August 2022 (UTC)