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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to promote it to GA class. Given the lack of historical material on the dynasty, I think the current amount of information is OK for GA status (but not for FA status). I also want users to comment on the article's neutrality, verifiability, reliability of sources, and comprehensiveness. Revealing the article's grammatical and stylistic errors is also something I want.
Thanks,
Bless sins (
talk) 00:32, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: I have made a fair number of minor changes to the text, mainly to improve grammar, remove repetitions, etc. This does not amount to a full copyedit, however. The article is generally well-written, but would benefit further from the scrutiny of a competent copyeditor.
The article is, overall, neutral in tone, although a few subjective terms such as "marvellous" should be cited or replaced. It is also reasonably comprehensive. The referencing may be a problem in that almost all citations are either to an on-line Britannica article or to the Encyclopedia of Islam. These are presumably reliable sources, but since you have not indicated page numbers or article details for the Encyclopedia of Islam references, it would be difficult for someone to attempt verification. A wider range of sources would have been preferable.
Some specific points from the text:
I hope that these comments are helpful. Brianboulton ( talk) 13:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)
CommentI'm somewhat puzzled by your statement that there is a "lack of historical data" on this period. While the 9th & 10th centuries in Egypt are not as well documented as 20th century Egypt might be, & that the average public library might be lacking in books on this period, translations of primary sources (chronologies, histories, biographies) & scholarly works do exist. You may also need to think about looking at histories of neighboring countries or events either just before or after this period for possible sources. Looking through the bibliographies of some of the related books in my personal library, Vasilev's Byzantium and the Arabs looks as if it might have useful. Other possible sources would be the works of Eutychius of Alexandria (mentioned by Steven Runciman) and History of the Patriarchs of Alexandria. A Wikipedian who may have some useful suggestions about reliable works for this period is Adam Bishop -- llywrch ( talk) 00:00, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to promote it to GA class. Given the lack of historical material on the dynasty, I think the current amount of information is OK for GA status (but not for FA status). I also want users to comment on the article's neutrality, verifiability, reliability of sources, and comprehensiveness. Revealing the article's grammatical and stylistic errors is also something I want.
Thanks,
Bless sins (
talk) 00:32, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: I have made a fair number of minor changes to the text, mainly to improve grammar, remove repetitions, etc. This does not amount to a full copyedit, however. The article is generally well-written, but would benefit further from the scrutiny of a competent copyeditor.
The article is, overall, neutral in tone, although a few subjective terms such as "marvellous" should be cited or replaced. It is also reasonably comprehensive. The referencing may be a problem in that almost all citations are either to an on-line Britannica article or to the Encyclopedia of Islam. These are presumably reliable sources, but since you have not indicated page numbers or article details for the Encyclopedia of Islam references, it would be difficult for someone to attempt verification. A wider range of sources would have been preferable.
Some specific points from the text:
I hope that these comments are helpful. Brianboulton ( talk) 13:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)
CommentI'm somewhat puzzled by your statement that there is a "lack of historical data" on this period. While the 9th & 10th centuries in Egypt are not as well documented as 20th century Egypt might be, & that the average public library might be lacking in books on this period, translations of primary sources (chronologies, histories, biographies) & scholarly works do exist. You may also need to think about looking at histories of neighboring countries or events either just before or after this period for possible sources. Looking through the bibliographies of some of the related books in my personal library, Vasilev's Byzantium and the Arabs looks as if it might have useful. Other possible sources would be the works of Eutychius of Alexandria (mentioned by Steven Runciman) and History of the Patriarchs of Alexandria. A Wikipedian who may have some useful suggestions about reliable works for this period is Adam Bishop -- llywrch ( talk) 00:00, 19 June 2008 (UTC)