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I've listed this article for peer review because it reads like an advert for the band, with lots of quotes from band members.
Thanks, DavidABalch ( talk) 15:06, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
Possible areas of improvement:
DavidABalch ( talk) 13:58, 28 January 2011 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This is interesting and generally clear but thin. That may be because the band is essentially local and has not received much critical notice outside of Oxford. If the band flourishes and becomes famous, it will become possible to find more widely varied sources to cite. If not, the article can still be improved. Here are suggestions.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider commenting on any other article at WP:PR. I don't usually watch the PR archives or make follow-up comments. If my suggestions are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth ( talk) 18:44, 30 January 2011 (UTC)
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because it reads like an advert for the band, with lots of quotes from band members.
Thanks, DavidABalch ( talk) 15:06, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
Possible areas of improvement:
DavidABalch ( talk) 13:58, 28 January 2011 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This is interesting and generally clear but thin. That may be because the band is essentially local and has not received much critical notice outside of Oxford. If the band flourishes and becomes famous, it will become possible to find more widely varied sources to cite. If not, the article can still be improved. Here are suggestions.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider commenting on any other article at WP:PR. I don't usually watch the PR archives or make follow-up comments. If my suggestions are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth ( talk) 18:44, 30 January 2011 (UTC)