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Giggy
Hmm... the lead should have a word in bold?
"on September 25, 2008[1] in the 2008–2009 television season" - might wanna mention the TV season before the specific date; it sounds weird at the moment.
Do you need the see also section since you have the navbox too?
Not much that can be said at the point... —Giggy 02:27, 10 August 2008 (UTC)reply
Bold is not a requirement; many FLs don't have bolded terms. I copyedited the lead. I will leave See also there for now as the other season pages have it there. GaryKing (
talk) 02:50, 10 August 2008 (UTC)reply
Comments
Change 28 in the infobox to 28 half hours.
I agree with
User:Giggy, even if it's not needed, I, personally, think something in the lead should be bold for presentation and consistency.
"It will air on Thursdays at 9:00 p.m. EDT." - Needs a citation.
"NBC has announced that one of the fifth season episodes will air after NBC's coverage of Super Bowl XLIII on February 1, 2009, prior to the The Office spin off premiere." Entertainment Weekly disagrees.
[1]
Citations needed for the the title of S05E01 as well as the episodes writers and airdate.
A script has been used to generate a semi-
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to receive suggestions on how to improve this article. Thanks! GaryKing (
talk) 00:28, 10 August 2008 (UTC)reply
Giggy
Hmm... the lead should have a word in bold?
"on September 25, 2008[1] in the 2008–2009 television season" - might wanna mention the TV season before the specific date; it sounds weird at the moment.
Do you need the see also section since you have the navbox too?
Not much that can be said at the point... —Giggy 02:27, 10 August 2008 (UTC)reply
Bold is not a requirement; many FLs don't have bolded terms. I copyedited the lead. I will leave See also there for now as the other season pages have it there. GaryKing (
talk) 02:50, 10 August 2008 (UTC)reply
Comments
Change 28 in the infobox to 28 half hours.
I agree with
User:Giggy, even if it's not needed, I, personally, think something in the lead should be bold for presentation and consistency.
"It will air on Thursdays at 9:00 p.m. EDT." - Needs a citation.
"NBC has announced that one of the fifth season episodes will air after NBC's coverage of Super Bowl XLIII on February 1, 2009, prior to the The Office spin off premiere." Entertainment Weekly disagrees.
[1]
Citations needed for the the title of S05E01 as well as the episodes writers and airdate.