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This article about the iconic Stravinsky ballet was promoted to GA in March, completely rewritten in July upon an inquiry from User:Wretchskull, and now this PR- I hope to take it to FAC once Appalachian Spring is finished. Excited for everyone's feedback! MyCatIsAChonk ( talk) ( not me) ( also not me) ( still no) 12:46, 17 September 2023 (UTC)
As with the Appalachian Spring PR I'm only commenting on the dance side of things, and let someone more qualified to comment on the music side of things.
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I think Diaghilev's Ballets Russes by Lynn Garafola, already used as a source, can also provide additional information on the dancing. Corachow ( talk) 19:32, 17 September 2023 (UTC)
That's all from me. Overall I'm very happy with the additions. Corachow ( talk) 20:53, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
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Hello Chonk, I saw this review was open by chance and thought I might contribute. Putting down a placeholder here, will add a laundry list soon :) Schminnte [ talk to me 21:06, 18 October 2023 (UTC) Comments are arranged in section order:
...catapulting Stravinsky to international fame, and leading...– nitpicky I know, but I feel this sentence has better flow without the comma here.
...Koschei's palace, Ivan tries to follow, but is stopped by Koschei at the gates...– is the second comma needed?
A fellow Rimsky-Korsakov pupil, Jāzeps Vītols, wrote that "Stravinsky, it seems, has forgotten the concept of pleasure in sound... [His] dissonances unfortunately quickly become wearying, because there are no ideas hidden behind them."– I think this is quoted identically twice, once each in §Premieres and reception and §Subsequent productions?
Not much to say here, great job as usual. I particularly like the use of images in this one. Feel free to ping me at a FAC if needed, good luck with the WikiCup! Schminnte [ talk to me 22:00, 18 October 2023 (UTC)
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This article about the iconic Stravinsky ballet was promoted to GA in March, completely rewritten in July upon an inquiry from User:Wretchskull, and now this PR- I hope to take it to FAC once Appalachian Spring is finished. Excited for everyone's feedback! MyCatIsAChonk ( talk) ( not me) ( also not me) ( still no) 12:46, 17 September 2023 (UTC)
As with the Appalachian Spring PR I'm only commenting on the dance side of things, and let someone more qualified to comment on the music side of things.
Potential resources:
I think Diaghilev's Ballets Russes by Lynn Garafola, already used as a source, can also provide additional information on the dancing. Corachow ( talk) 19:32, 17 September 2023 (UTC)
That's all from me. Overall I'm very happy with the additions. Corachow ( talk) 20:53, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
STANDARD NOTE: I have added this PR to the Template:FAC peer review sidebar to get quicker and more responses. When this PR is closed, please remove it from the list. Also, consider adding the sidebar to your userpage to help others discover pre-FAC PRs, and please review other articles in that template. Thanks! Z1720 ( talk) 02:40, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
Hello Chonk, I saw this review was open by chance and thought I might contribute. Putting down a placeholder here, will add a laundry list soon :) Schminnte [ talk to me 21:06, 18 October 2023 (UTC) Comments are arranged in section order:
...catapulting Stravinsky to international fame, and leading...– nitpicky I know, but I feel this sentence has better flow without the comma here.
...Koschei's palace, Ivan tries to follow, but is stopped by Koschei at the gates...– is the second comma needed?
A fellow Rimsky-Korsakov pupil, Jāzeps Vītols, wrote that "Stravinsky, it seems, has forgotten the concept of pleasure in sound... [His] dissonances unfortunately quickly become wearying, because there are no ideas hidden behind them."– I think this is quoted identically twice, once each in §Premieres and reception and §Subsequent productions?
Not much to say here, great job as usual. I particularly like the use of images in this one. Feel free to ping me at a FAC if needed, good luck with the WikiCup! Schminnte [ talk to me 22:00, 18 October 2023 (UTC)