This article is large and full of detailed information, with quality images. Contributed to be mostly experienced users, little vandalism. The article I feel could have room for improvement, and I wish it to be a featured article. So we need to improve it. Rasillon 22:36, 12 January 2007 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 23:23, 12 January 2007 (UTC)
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- Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article. [?]
- See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article. [?]
- As per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using January 30th was a great day, use January 30 was a great day. [?]
- Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==. [?]
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article. [?]
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at Wikipedia:Guide to layout. [?]
- There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
Allpigs are pink, so we thought ofa number ofways to turn them green.”
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
- As done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2] [?]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}s. - Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a. [?]
You may wish to browse through
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Senators
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- This article has undergone numerous positive changes since this peer review was initiated. Further feedback would be welcomed. John the mackem 22:54, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
This article is large and full of detailed information, with quality images. Contributed to be mostly experienced users, little vandalism. The article I feel could have room for improvement, and I wish it to be a featured article. So we need to improve it. Rasillon 22:36, 12 January 2007 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 23:23, 12 January 2007 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article. [?]
- See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article. [?]
- As per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using January 30th was a great day, use January 30 was a great day. [?]
- Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==. [?]
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article. [?]
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at Wikipedia:Guide to layout. [?]
- There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
Allpigs are pink, so we thought ofa number ofways to turn them green.”
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
- As done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2] [?]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}s. - Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a. [?]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Senators
Talk |
Contribs
00:36, 13 January 2007 (UTC)
- This article has undergone numerous positive changes since this peer review was initiated. Further feedback would be welcomed. John the mackem 22:54, 21 January 2007 (UTC)