This peer review discussion has been closed.
I'm a fairly big fan of this Anime series, and I'm quite curious to know what other Wikipedia editors think of this article. It has had some restructuring lately thanks to user
Juhachi, and I would want to know what other parts need improvement so that I or other Wikipedians can work to make it a Good Article.
Lead should include a summary of the reception somewhere
The plot section seems to blast users with in-universe terms in the first paragraph. It would be better if the terms were introduced in the same order as the plot for better flow. Instead of listing all the character names, try linking them their "rank" to their respective sections.
As Shana is a very term-heavy series, there's going to be a bunch of terms no matter what. Doing it this way seemed to be sensible as it gives the reader the impression of what the setting is like before actually getting into the plot and characters.--十八07:52, 27 April 2012 (UTC)reply
For the international release/licensing, is that all of them? If not, it might be better to reword it as "... was licensed in countries such as ...".
Final paragraph in video games also needs to be sourced.
By the way, can the part be in the Reception section? I've seen other anime articles where appearances by their characters appear in the Reception section rather than a media section.
Narutolovehinata5tccsdnew03:05, 27 April 2012 (UTC)reply
See if there are reviews for the second and third anime series.
Actually, Final was
just reviewed by ANN yesterday. Well, I was planning on beefing up the reception section eventually anyway. The final paragraph in the video games section would be better suited in the reception section as a part of its legacy.--十八07:52, 27 April 2012 (UTC)reply
I don't know about the first one, the second link is broken, and the third is a blog and shouldn't be used. The
official website of the game could easily be used, which I'll do now.--十八20:51, 27 April 2012 (UTC)reply
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I'm a fairly big fan of this Anime series, and I'm quite curious to know what other Wikipedia editors think of this article. It has had some restructuring lately thanks to user
Juhachi, and I would want to know what other parts need improvement so that I or other Wikipedians can work to make it a Good Article.
Lead should include a summary of the reception somewhere
The plot section seems to blast users with in-universe terms in the first paragraph. It would be better if the terms were introduced in the same order as the plot for better flow. Instead of listing all the character names, try linking them their "rank" to their respective sections.
As Shana is a very term-heavy series, there's going to be a bunch of terms no matter what. Doing it this way seemed to be sensible as it gives the reader the impression of what the setting is like before actually getting into the plot and characters.--十八07:52, 27 April 2012 (UTC)reply
For the international release/licensing, is that all of them? If not, it might be better to reword it as "... was licensed in countries such as ...".
Final paragraph in video games also needs to be sourced.
By the way, can the part be in the Reception section? I've seen other anime articles where appearances by their characters appear in the Reception section rather than a media section.
Narutolovehinata5tccsdnew03:05, 27 April 2012 (UTC)reply
See if there are reviews for the second and third anime series.
Actually, Final was
just reviewed by ANN yesterday. Well, I was planning on beefing up the reception section eventually anyway. The final paragraph in the video games section would be better suited in the reception section as a part of its legacy.--十八07:52, 27 April 2012 (UTC)reply
I don't know about the first one, the second link is broken, and the third is a blog and shouldn't be used. The
official website of the game could easily be used, which I'll do now.--十八20:51, 27 April 2012 (UTC)reply