Rihanna videography

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I've listed this article for peer review because… when I removed the direct from Rihanna discography I worked hard on it. By hard I mean, I wrote the tables and the lead and properly sourced them. Now I am listing it for peer review, because in near future I want to nominate it for FLC. As a result of that I want to hear some comments that can help to improve it.

Thanks, — Tomica (talk) 17:14, 31 March 2012 (UTC) reply

Comments from What a pro.

• was disco and dance inspired[2] as its lyrical theme Uh, what?

• I don't understand your point here. What I wanted to say is the themes of both the song and the video are dance and disco themed. — Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

Oh, then change "as" to "like". Alternatively, put "as" after "was".

 Done— Tomica (talk) 08:44, 3 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• in a dangerous love triangle struggled between her lover and husband. Remove "struggled", and replace "between" with "with".

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• In 2006, Rihanna also starred No need for the "also".

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• For the new album, Rihanna presented completely new image and style.[8] Perhaps "For the album, Rihanna completely changed her image and style."

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• scenes of Rihanna naked; only covered in silver paint.' I don't think a semicolon is correct here.

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• Seven more singles were released from the album The Good Girl Gone Bad article says there are only seven singles, so remove the "more".

• " If I Never See Your Face Again" was also single from GGGB, but I don't know why constantly someone is removing from the infobox there. — Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• ; all directed by Mandler. --> "; all of them were directed by Mandler."

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• Rihanna flew to Europe, to shot --> "to shoot"

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• ideo for "Run This Town"— a collaboration Remove the space after the em-dash.

• I did it right ? — Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

Yeah.

• Jesse Williams made cameo appearance --> "made a cameo"

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• In all of them are featured various dance sequences.[32] ––> "All of them feature various dance sequences."

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• shows Rihanna naked - only covered in silver paint. Replace the hyphen with an em-dash.

• I hope I did it right. — Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

Yup.

• photography-based, late-1970s/ early-1980s situation.––> "late-1970s or early-1980s situation."

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• Is there really nothing on the "Live Your Life" video?

• No, there is. I will add. — Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• post-apocalyptic inspired video, shot in No need for the comma.

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• makes cameo appearance. ––> "makes a cameo appearance."

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• while wearing a stylized military costumes. ––> "while wearing stylized military costumes."

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• makes references to some artist ––> "to some artists"

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• Laetitia Casta makes cameo appearance ––> "makes a cameo appearance"

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• Other notable scene' ––> "Other notable scenes"

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• David Guetta makes cameo appearance. ––> "David Guetta makes a cameo appearance."

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• designed 18 feet long bed ––> "designed an 18 foot long bed" Also, consider putting a metric unit for that.

• Could you help me with the metric unit. — Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

Put this: {{convert|18|ft|m}}.

 Done— Tomica (talk) 08:44, 3 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• The video is footage of Rihanna's lifetime that she had during her 2011 Loud Tour. Remove "'s lifetime that she had".

• I don't understand what should I do :S — Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

Just make it "The video is footage of Rihanna during her 2011 Loud Tour.

Re-worded. — Tomica (talk) 08:44, 3 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• It contains reference to the 1971 film A Clockwork Orange.[82] ––> "It contains a references to the 1971 film A Clockwork Orange."

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• Merge the two cells that say "Akiva Schaffer".

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

Also merge the two cells that say "The Lonely Island" in the same table.

 Done— Tomica (talk) 08:44, 3 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• The skit was also shot for Saturday Night Live. Unlink Saturday Night Live.

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

• Add a note in the "Commercials" table saying what "—" stands for.

• I think this is better. What do you think?— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

What a pro ( talk, contribs) is on fire. 15:27, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

Sure.

• Rihanna's track, "Skin" Dablink!

•  Done— Tomica (talk) 16:50, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

Thanks for your comments. I really appreciate this help. — Tomica (talk) 17:34, 2 April 2012 (UTC) reply

You're welcome! Oh, and I changed your {{done}} templates to {{done-t}} templates because uh, that's what it says in the "How to respond to a request" section above. What a pro ( talk, contribs) is on fire. 02:14, 3 April 2012 (UTC) reply