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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take this article to FAC at some point, and would appreciate help with jargon, and prose.
Thanks, Ealdgyth - Talk 14:36, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:45, 25 July 2008 (UTC)
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take this article to FAC at some point, and would appreciate help with jargon, and prose.
Thanks, Ealdgyth - Talk 14:36, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:45, 25 July 2008 (UTC)