This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because i'd like to nominate it for FAC one day. Any feedback would be nice, and i'd be happy to review your peer review in exchange. Just let me know if you have an article you'd like me to review when you leave comments here.
Don't think you should send it
FAC yet (you should send it through an A-class review on
MilHist for some more feedback that might make the article fail on FAC).
Not certain that the citation in the lead is necessary, since it should be cited in the body
I don't know. As mentioned in the article there is limited information available on his later years. Both the sources I have that mention his death don't state the cause, though he was 78 and I do have a a source that he died in a nursing home, so it was certainly natural causes. Which natural cause, however, we'll probably never know.
Freikorp (
talk)
00:17, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
Want some more images (if they are copyrighted upload the to Wikipedia under
fair use).
Tried to add another image of him in his later life under fair use, but
was told since there is a free image of him (which is a featured picture no less) it was unlikely that we'd be able to justify fair use of another picture just of him.
Freikorp (
talk)
00:17, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
Should have info on when and where he died in the lead.
I don't really see why that would be needed. His date of death is already mentioned, and there's nothing particularly interesting or unusual about dying in a nursing home in the country where he lived for a significant portion of his life.
Freikorp (
talk)
10:38, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
All citations need page numbers (for example "Bodley 1968").
The two citations that don't have page numbers ('Bodley 1945' and 'Bodley 1968') are specifically citing the dust jacket and back cover respectively (as is specified in the 'Bibliography' section); there's no page number to cite.
Freikorp (
talk)
00:55, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
Add some isbns or oclcs for your sources. They can be found on
here.
I'll take a look at that peer review either later today or in a couple days time (won't have internet access tomorrow or most of the day after).
Freikorp (
talk)
00:55, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (
push to talk)
"Bodley was appointed assistant military attaché to Paris on 15 August 1918. ... As assistant military attaché Bodley attended": Bodley was appointed assistant military attaché to Paris on 15 August 1918, and attended
As was discussed recently at WT:FAC, "stated" doesn't work well when it's used a lot; it can be considered the verb form of "statement", and not everyone is making a statement.
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because i'd like to nominate it for FAC one day. Any feedback would be nice, and i'd be happy to review your peer review in exchange. Just let me know if you have an article you'd like me to review when you leave comments here.
Don't think you should send it
FAC yet (you should send it through an A-class review on
MilHist for some more feedback that might make the article fail on FAC).
Not certain that the citation in the lead is necessary, since it should be cited in the body
I don't know. As mentioned in the article there is limited information available on his later years. Both the sources I have that mention his death don't state the cause, though he was 78 and I do have a a source that he died in a nursing home, so it was certainly natural causes. Which natural cause, however, we'll probably never know.
Freikorp (
talk)
00:17, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
Want some more images (if they are copyrighted upload the to Wikipedia under
fair use).
Tried to add another image of him in his later life under fair use, but
was told since there is a free image of him (which is a featured picture no less) it was unlikely that we'd be able to justify fair use of another picture just of him.
Freikorp (
talk)
00:17, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
Should have info on when and where he died in the lead.
I don't really see why that would be needed. His date of death is already mentioned, and there's nothing particularly interesting or unusual about dying in a nursing home in the country where he lived for a significant portion of his life.
Freikorp (
talk)
10:38, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
All citations need page numbers (for example "Bodley 1968").
The two citations that don't have page numbers ('Bodley 1945' and 'Bodley 1968') are specifically citing the dust jacket and back cover respectively (as is specified in the 'Bibliography' section); there's no page number to cite.
Freikorp (
talk)
00:55, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
Add some isbns or oclcs for your sources. They can be found on
here.
I'll take a look at that peer review either later today or in a couple days time (won't have internet access tomorrow or most of the day after).
Freikorp (
talk)
00:55, 8 March 2015 (UTC)reply
Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (
push to talk)
"Bodley was appointed assistant military attaché to Paris on 15 August 1918. ... As assistant military attaché Bodley attended": Bodley was appointed assistant military attaché to Paris on 15 August 1918, and attended
As was discussed recently at WT:FAC, "stated" doesn't work well when it's used a lot; it can be considered the verb form of "statement", and not everyone is making a statement.