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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe that it is close to becoming a featured article (it recently reached A-class), but not quite.
Basically, I would like to know how to improve it. Thanks,
Kaguya-chan (
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14:01, 11 December 2010 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: I had never heard of Pyramid Head before reading this. I found the article to be more interesting than many pieces about computer games, largely because the analysis section adds something substantial to think about. I especially enjoyed reading that section, but I think the whole article is good. To reach FA quality, you will need to smooth and tighten the prose here and there and and clarify some ambiguities, and I have doubts about the second fair-use image. Here are a few other suggestions and comments as well:
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Design and characteristics
Silent Hill 2
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Silent Hill Homecoming
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Analysis
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I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth ( talk) 19:01, 21 December 2010 (UTC)
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I believe that it is close to becoming a featured article (it recently reached A-class), but not quite.
Basically, I would like to know how to improve it. Thanks,
Kaguya-chan (
talk)
14:01, 11 December 2010 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: I had never heard of Pyramid Head before reading this. I found the article to be more interesting than many pieces about computer games, largely because the analysis section adds something substantial to think about. I especially enjoyed reading that section, but I think the whole article is good. To reach FA quality, you will need to smooth and tighten the prose here and there and and clarify some ambiguities, and I have doubts about the second fair-use image. Here are a few other suggestions and comments as well:
Lead
Design and characteristics
Silent Hill 2
Film
Silent Hill Homecoming
Other
Analysis
Images
Other
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth ( talk) 19:01, 21 December 2010 (UTC)