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I've listed this article for peer review with a view to nominating it to GA status. I would like some feedback on the current state of the article and how to improve it to meet GA requirements.
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Sotakeit (
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13:04, 6 March 2015 (UTC)
Comments from Noswall59
- In the first paragraph "greeted with a mixture of feeling" could be "greeted with fixed feelings" or "with mixed emotions".
- Before "Sophia Matilda of Gloucester" in the list of godparents, you need an "and".
- I think the children and ancestry sections ought to be referenced - I am aware that the information exists elsewhere on WP, but the article shouldn't rely on other pages being reliably sourced and, I imagine, some aren't.
- I notice that you've used Heraldica for the coat of arms, which is probably reliable, but I should think that J.H. and R.V. Pinches, Royal Heraldry, 1974 (Heraldry Today), is a better source, if Burke or Debrett do not suffice.
These are just a few things, I am sure there are a more prose tweaks that need to be made, but this a good article (lower case). Best wishes, — Noswall59 ( talk) 10:09, 25 March 2015 (UTC).
- Thanks! Updated all your points. I've used Debretts to cite the general points regarding royal heraldry and then a contemporary journal for the specifics regarding Alice's arms. Sotakeit ( talk) 10:09, 26 March 2015 (UTC)
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review with a view to nominating it to GA status. I would like some feedback on the current state of the article and how to improve it to meet GA requirements.
Thanks,
Sotakeit (
talk)
13:04, 6 March 2015 (UTC)
Comments from Noswall59
- In the first paragraph "greeted with a mixture of feeling" could be "greeted with fixed feelings" or "with mixed emotions".
- Before "Sophia Matilda of Gloucester" in the list of godparents, you need an "and".
- I think the children and ancestry sections ought to be referenced - I am aware that the information exists elsewhere on WP, but the article shouldn't rely on other pages being reliably sourced and, I imagine, some aren't.
- I notice that you've used Heraldica for the coat of arms, which is probably reliable, but I should think that J.H. and R.V. Pinches, Royal Heraldry, 1974 (Heraldry Today), is a better source, if Burke or Debrett do not suffice.
These are just a few things, I am sure there are a more prose tweaks that need to be made, but this a good article (lower case). Best wishes, — Noswall59 ( talk) 10:09, 25 March 2015 (UTC).
- Thanks! Updated all your points. I've used Debretts to cite the general points regarding royal heraldry and then a contemporary journal for the specifics regarding Alice's arms. Sotakeit ( talk) 10:09, 26 March 2015 (UTC)