I think the tone of this article needs to be improved, so I'm sending this to peer review. Otherwise the content isn't too bad IMO. -
Ta bu shi da yu 08:44, 18 May 2006 (UTC)reply
In the top section, the 2nd paragraph seems a bit long and contains a lot of info that should probably be contained below. I would trim it some.
Briancua 18:55, 12 June 2006 (UTC)reply
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Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a no-break space - between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
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This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
I think the tone of this article needs to be improved, so I'm sending this to peer review. Otherwise the content isn't too bad IMO. -
Ta bu shi da yu 08:44, 18 May 2006 (UTC)reply
In the top section, the 2nd paragraph seems a bit long and contains a lot of info that should probably be contained below. I would trim it some.
Briancua 18:55, 12 June 2006 (UTC)reply
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program. They may or may not be accurate for the article in question (due to possible javascript errors/uniqueness of articles). If the following suggestions are completely incorrect about the article, please drop a note on
my talk page.
Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a no-break space - between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.