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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to get feedback to assist in bringing it up to GA standard.
Thanks, BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 13:13, 5 March 2020 (UTC)
Closing PR - helpful comments received from Lee Vilenski. BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 23:29, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
- comments from Lee Vilenski
Hi Benny,
The lede is the big issue with this one. It's quite a well sourced article. I should note, I saw two videos in the references, so you might want to check that they are reliable sources. There are some issues with paragraphing (better to have multiple sentences in a paragraph.) I noticed theres a link to 2013 Asian Indoor and Martial Arts Games – Six-red snooker, which would be better as saying "she won a medal at the 2013 Asian Indoor and Martial Arts Games in the six-red snooker event. I'd also suggest a Copyedit. Otherwise, probably good to go. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 09:43, 6 March 2020 (UTC)
Ng On-yee
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to get feedback to assist in bringing it up to GA standard.
Thanks, BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 13:13, 5 March 2020 (UTC)
Closing PR - helpful comments received from Lee Vilenski. BennyOnTheLoose ( talk) 23:29, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
- comments from Lee Vilenski
Hi Benny,
The lede is the big issue with this one. It's quite a well sourced article. I should note, I saw two videos in the references, so you might want to check that they are reliable sources. There are some issues with paragraphing (better to have multiple sentences in a paragraph.) I noticed theres a link to 2013 Asian Indoor and Martial Arts Games – Six-red snooker, which would be better as saying "she won a medal at the 2013 Asian Indoor and Martial Arts Games in the six-red snooker event. I'd also suggest a Copyedit. Otherwise, probably good to go. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 09:43, 6 March 2020 (UTC)