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I've listed this article for peer review because it looks to be a good candidate for a Good Article, and some feedback on what (if anything) needs to be done might push people along.
Thanks, IdiotSavant ( talk) 00:32, 3 December 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: To get ready for GAN, the article would have to be re-organized significantly. For one thing, the lede should be a summary of the whole article and should not include material that is undeveloped in the main text. It would be helpful to readers who live outside New Zealand if the first main text section included background material about New Zealand election procedures in general and about this election in particular. Some of that material appears in the existing lede and some, the 2005 material for example, seems to be tacked on in the form of bulleted lists near the bottom of the article. To make this into a good article, I think you have to re-write with a foreign audience in mind; that audience may know nothing about the geography, history, or politics of New Zealand. Here are a few more specific suggestions related mainly to prose and Manual of Style issues.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth ( talk) 03:24, 10 December 2009 (UTC)
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because it looks to be a good candidate for a Good Article, and some feedback on what (if anything) needs to be done might push people along.
Thanks, IdiotSavant ( talk) 00:32, 3 December 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: To get ready for GAN, the article would have to be re-organized significantly. For one thing, the lede should be a summary of the whole article and should not include material that is undeveloped in the main text. It would be helpful to readers who live outside New Zealand if the first main text section included background material about New Zealand election procedures in general and about this election in particular. Some of that material appears in the existing lede and some, the 2005 material for example, seems to be tacked on in the form of bulleted lists near the bottom of the article. To make this into a good article, I think you have to re-write with a foreign audience in mind; that audience may know nothing about the geography, history, or politics of New Zealand. Here are a few more specific suggestions related mainly to prose and Manual of Style issues.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth ( talk) 03:24, 10 December 2009 (UTC)