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Much-Binding-in-the-Marsh was a BBC radio comedy starring Kenneth Horne and Richard Murdoch; it was one of the shows that built up Horne's reputation prior to his great successes with Beyond Our Ken and Round the Horne. This article went through a re-write in 2022 and a further recent brush up, with a possible FAC shot, unless reviewers counsel otherwise. - SchroCat ( talk) and Tim riley talk 12:16, 28 June 2024 (UTC)
I'll take a crack at this one, looking forward to a good read.
broadcast from 1944 to 1950 and 1951 to 1954 by BBC Radio and in 1950–51 by Radio Luxembourgbe rephrased in relation to the BBC, something like "broadcast from 1944 to 1954 by BBC Radio, with one season broadcast by Radio Luxembourg in 1950–1951"? This reduces repetition and sounds more natural to me.
finally the show became the chronicle of a newspaper, The Weekly Bind."Finally" could be rephrased to "for its last season" for more clarity.
Among the supporting cast were, I think "was" instead of "were" as "supporting cast" is singular.
Singers in the musical interludes in the show included Gwen Catley, Maudie Edwards. Binnie Hale and Doris Hare.To remove repetition, try "Singers in the show's musical interludes included Gwen Catley, Maudie Edwards, Binnie Hale and Doris Hare"?
Stand Easy for the Army and, for the Royal Air Forcesuperfluous space after comma.
a BBC radio show for the Air Force, based on those who worked for the RAF Balloon Commandcomma is unnecessary.
More to come later. All the best, Schminnte [ talk to me 20:54, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
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Much-Binding-in-the-Marsh was a BBC radio comedy starring Kenneth Horne and Richard Murdoch; it was one of the shows that built up Horne's reputation prior to his great successes with Beyond Our Ken and Round the Horne. This article went through a re-write in 2022 and a further recent brush up, with a possible FAC shot, unless reviewers counsel otherwise. - SchroCat ( talk) and Tim riley talk 12:16, 28 June 2024 (UTC)
I'll take a crack at this one, looking forward to a good read.
broadcast from 1944 to 1950 and 1951 to 1954 by BBC Radio and in 1950–51 by Radio Luxembourgbe rephrased in relation to the BBC, something like "broadcast from 1944 to 1954 by BBC Radio, with one season broadcast by Radio Luxembourg in 1950–1951"? This reduces repetition and sounds more natural to me.
finally the show became the chronicle of a newspaper, The Weekly Bind."Finally" could be rephrased to "for its last season" for more clarity.
Among the supporting cast were, I think "was" instead of "were" as "supporting cast" is singular.
Singers in the musical interludes in the show included Gwen Catley, Maudie Edwards. Binnie Hale and Doris Hare.To remove repetition, try "Singers in the show's musical interludes included Gwen Catley, Maudie Edwards, Binnie Hale and Doris Hare"?
Stand Easy for the Army and, for the Royal Air Forcesuperfluous space after comma.
a BBC radio show for the Air Force, based on those who worked for the RAF Balloon Commandcomma is unnecessary.
More to come later. All the best, Schminnte [ talk to me 20:54, 5 July 2024 (UTC)