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I want to know what this article needs in terms of content and comprehensive before I begin making major overhauls to it, because I'd like to ultimately bring it to FAC eventually. Gary King (
talk) 20:12, 4 February 2009 (UTC)reply
Comments by David Fuchs
Whoops, Ruhr just reminded me about this. I've been sucking into my own world of projects. Anyhow...
You telling me you can't have a 3 paragraph lead for 23 KB of info?
I know you were bugging me about 'shopping a logo, but IMO Samus is actually more representative of the series as a whole anyhow, so it's a better fit. A more substantial FUR would be nice, however.
Metroid (series)#Antagonists reads just like I suspect it was created; a chopped up and combined hash of non-notable character articles. It's poorly stitched together and overly long. Covering only the important antagonists from multiple games (metriods, ridley, dark samus, etc.) would be a better route.
The story secition looks as though its trying to decide whether it's an integrated list or summaries with subsections. Organizing it in a table like
Myst (series) or just streamlining it to prose like
Halo (series) might be better options, especially since you then just have a bare link to list of media right below it, which should go regardless.
There's some sections which have excessively clunky prose, such as the litany of "also"s in "In other media".
Not sure about how defensible the gameplay shots are in development.
What makes
[1] a reliable source? Why is
Overclocked Remix a reliable indicator of music popularity?
Okay, will get to this in due time. I have yet to begin editing on this article (I opened this PR to receive feedback on how to proceed first, since I have absolutely no idea). Gary King (
talk) 02:12, 17 February 2009 (UTC)reply
A script has been used to generate a semi-
automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and
house style; it can be found on the
automated peer review page for February 2009.
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I want to know what this article needs in terms of content and comprehensive before I begin making major overhauls to it, because I'd like to ultimately bring it to FAC eventually. Gary King (
talk) 20:12, 4 February 2009 (UTC)reply
Comments by David Fuchs
Whoops, Ruhr just reminded me about this. I've been sucking into my own world of projects. Anyhow...
You telling me you can't have a 3 paragraph lead for 23 KB of info?
I know you were bugging me about 'shopping a logo, but IMO Samus is actually more representative of the series as a whole anyhow, so it's a better fit. A more substantial FUR would be nice, however.
Metroid (series)#Antagonists reads just like I suspect it was created; a chopped up and combined hash of non-notable character articles. It's poorly stitched together and overly long. Covering only the important antagonists from multiple games (metriods, ridley, dark samus, etc.) would be a better route.
The story secition looks as though its trying to decide whether it's an integrated list or summaries with subsections. Organizing it in a table like
Myst (series) or just streamlining it to prose like
Halo (series) might be better options, especially since you then just have a bare link to list of media right below it, which should go regardless.
There's some sections which have excessively clunky prose, such as the litany of "also"s in "In other media".
Not sure about how defensible the gameplay shots are in development.
What makes
[1] a reliable source? Why is
Overclocked Remix a reliable indicator of music popularity?
Okay, will get to this in due time. I have yet to begin editing on this article (I opened this PR to receive feedback on how to proceed first, since I have absolutely no idea). Gary King (
talk) 02:12, 17 February 2009 (UTC)reply