Man Down (song)

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to know what else is needed for GA, as it is only a small article compared to other articles by Rihanna.

Thanks, Calvin • ⁹⁹⁹ 16:14, 30 June 2011 (UTC) reply

It needs some copy-edit work, which I can help with for now. Also, I wonder if there is more to the Controversy section which could be added. Just a thought.-- Chimino ( talk) 21:42, 4 July 2011 (UTC) reply

Okay, thanks for replying. I'm not sure if there is anymore about the video, it didn't receive or attract the backlash that S&M managed to create. Calvin • ⁹⁹⁹ 22:01, 4 July 2011 (UTC) reply

I did a bit of copy-edit to the article, and added another source of criticism (choosing to shoot in Jamaica) which is what I originally had in mind when I mentioned it. As for what else it might need for GA-status, someone with more experience should probably weigh in...-- Chimino ( talk) 02:51, 5 July 2011 (UTC) reply

• You need to write about the song's composition. What are its musical features? What genre(s) does it fall under? What instruments does it use? What is its lyrical theme? Adabow ( talk · contribs) 10:18, 5 July 2011 (UTC) reply

  I can't find any info about the chord prograssion, bpm, vocal range, instruments etc. It hasn't been published on musicnotes.com which is where that info would be. I've added a composition section but it is only 2 sentences long. There simply isn't any info about it, at least none that is viable for use on wikipedia. Calvin • ⁹⁹⁹ 22:22, 15 July 2011 (UTC) reply

  Can someone continue this please? Calvin • ⁹⁹⁹ 22:04, 22 July 2011 (UTC) reply

Comments by — Andrew _{s talk}

• File:Man Down Rihanna.jpg needs a source
• File:Rihanna - Man Down.ogg needs a tighter rationale. Why is it used? How does it meet WP:NFCC. See WP:FUR.
• Use first release date in infobox (May 3, 2011)
• Link radio formats
• "The song is also included" - why 'also'?
• gangsta is a dablink
• MOS:QUOTE try to avoid linking inside quotes
• "In the US, "Man Down" was released to the US rhythmic and urban radio on May 3, 2011" - not supported by source. Use Allaccess archives ( urban rhythmic)
• When using archived webpages (such as Digital Spy), include the original as well. Use parameters url=, archiveurl= and archivedate=
• " focuses heavily on the musical genre of electro-reggae" - reword. Maybe, 'draws heavily from the music genre of electro-reggae'?
• ""Man Down" received generally positive reviews from critics, with Jon Pareles of The New York Times said that" - grammar error
• " the rum-pa-pum ragga "Man Down" burrows neck-deep in island rhythms" is copied directly from the source. paraphrase this.
• Ref names should be as the source gives them. Use the exact same title, and only italicise if the source does so.
• iTunes refs need proper formatting, eg France: {{cite web |url=http://itunes.apple.com/fr/album/man-down/id448927545 |title=Man Down – Single |publisher=iTunes Store. Apple Inc |language=French |accessdate=July 23, 2011}}
• The music video section needs copy-editing for clarity. "The video begins on a dramatic note when Rihanna shoots a man making his way through a busy train station" is awkward
• 'Chart performance' should be placed directly after 'Critical reception' and should cover most/all charts in prose. The table section should be renamed 'Charts'

— Andrew _{s talk} 00:07, 23 July 2011 (UTC) reply

• Done. Thank you :). Have closed the review. Calvin • ⁹⁹⁹ 13:56, 23 July 2011 (UTC) reply