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I've listed this article for peer review because since previous GA reviews the article has improved a lot. What was said in the previous reviews of the article have been taken on board. Images have been deleted, lists removed, lead extended etc. I personally believe that the article is good enough for GA status but of course want a second opinion on this. I would like to see how you react to the lead section and the public services part in particular. If you think anything needs to be improved for GA status please just say.
Thanks, Pafcool2 ( talk) 00:10, 7 February 2011 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: Clearly a lot of work has gone into this article. It is generally well-written in the sense that the sentences are well-formed and make sense. It is reasonably well-illustrated, and I like the maps. It's certainly broad in coverage. However, problems with sourcing alone prevent it from being, at the moment, a viable GA candidate. What follows is a fairly skimpy review but lists the things that jumped out at me.
Politics of Croydon Council
Civic history
Government buildings
Geography and climate
Landmarks
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider commenting on any other article at WP:PR. I don't usually watch the PR archives or make follow-up comments. If my suggestions are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth ( talk) 01:14, 13 February 2011 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: I began the last peer review by saying: "The article, with 9,500 words of text (excluding tables and images) is way, way too long", and I ended: "Please give careful consideration to how you can slim the article down." In fact, in the two-and-a-half years since that review, the article has expanded by another 700 words. So when you say that "what was said in the previous reviews of the article have been taken on board", this is true only up to a point. To put things in perspective, this WP article is longer than that for the United States. The massive overdetailing is a critical issue, and if the article is to progress, this aspect has to be addressed. Brianboulton ( talk) 11:25, 15 February 2011 (UTC)
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because since previous GA reviews the article has improved a lot. What was said in the previous reviews of the article have been taken on board. Images have been deleted, lists removed, lead extended etc. I personally believe that the article is good enough for GA status but of course want a second opinion on this. I would like to see how you react to the lead section and the public services part in particular. If you think anything needs to be improved for GA status please just say.
Thanks, Pafcool2 ( talk) 00:10, 7 February 2011 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: Clearly a lot of work has gone into this article. It is generally well-written in the sense that the sentences are well-formed and make sense. It is reasonably well-illustrated, and I like the maps. It's certainly broad in coverage. However, problems with sourcing alone prevent it from being, at the moment, a viable GA candidate. What follows is a fairly skimpy review but lists the things that jumped out at me.
Politics of Croydon Council
Civic history
Government buildings
Geography and climate
Landmarks
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider commenting on any other article at WP:PR. I don't usually watch the PR archives or make follow-up comments. If my suggestions are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth ( talk) 01:14, 13 February 2011 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: I began the last peer review by saying: "The article, with 9,500 words of text (excluding tables and images) is way, way too long", and I ended: "Please give careful consideration to how you can slim the article down." In fact, in the two-and-a-half years since that review, the article has expanded by another 700 words. So when you say that "what was said in the previous reviews of the article have been taken on board", this is true only up to a point. To put things in perspective, this WP article is longer than that for the United States. The massive overdetailing is a critical issue, and if the article is to progress, this aspect has to be addressed. Brianboulton ( talk) 11:25, 15 February 2011 (UTC)