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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to nominate it at
WP:FLC and would like to receive creative feedback on what needs to be done to get it there. The article/list is modeled after the featured
List of National Treasures of Japan (sculptures). PS: I know that the lead needs expansion and I am currently rewriting and expanding it.
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09:25, 25 October 2009 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: The main list is a most impressive piece of work, and I congratulate you on it. There are, however, several issues related to the article and its overall presentation. First, this is a "list", and as such is subject to different rules from tose that relate to a prose article. In particular, the text does not have to be comprehensive, and should contain only sufficient information to make the purpose of the list clear. You say you think the lead needs expanding; I would say it is plenty long enough as it is, and could possibly do with some pruning, in fact. Whether you decide to do that or not, there are numerous prose fixes required, which I have listed below. I have also done some punctuation and minor prose fixes myself.
I hope that you are able to use these points to improve the list. Brianboulton ( talk) 22:32, 6 November 2009 (UTC)
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to nominate it at
WP:FLC and would like to receive creative feedback on what needs to be done to get it there. The article/list is modeled after the featured
List of National Treasures of Japan (sculptures). PS: I know that the lead needs expansion and I am currently rewriting and expanding it.
bamse (
talk)
09:25, 25 October 2009 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: The main list is a most impressive piece of work, and I congratulate you on it. There are, however, several issues related to the article and its overall presentation. First, this is a "list", and as such is subject to different rules from tose that relate to a prose article. In particular, the text does not have to be comprehensive, and should contain only sufficient information to make the purpose of the list clear. You say you think the lead needs expanding; I would say it is plenty long enough as it is, and could possibly do with some pruning, in fact. Whether you decide to do that or not, there are numerous prose fixes required, which I have listed below. I have also done some punctuation and minor prose fixes myself.
I hope that you are able to use these points to improve the list. Brianboulton ( talk) 22:32, 6 November 2009 (UTC)