WP:OVERLINK issues and red links should not be left to rot either
Link to the music video in here instead of external links
The lead's first two sentences have grammar issues with the commas
Too many uses of "it" that are too close to each other; try and use "the song" in some cases instead
For consistency, do not use "the track" at all
"the song because he wanted to use the sample in a song." this reads awkwardly, you can use "a track" to end the sentence instead since it is not writing out "the track" and is not overly repetitive
"He also said that" → "Avicii also said that"
What does "their label" refer to? Always make things like this specific.
Wikilinking on countries is pointless
United States's → US
The certifications should mention how many times it was instead, not stating it like they were all separate: "octuple platinum" instead of "eight platinum", for example
Are you sure written is the correct term for the video creation?
The third and fifth sentences of the third para read like run-ons and are you sure all of this is notable for the lead?
Development and release
Track titles should always go in speech marks without the grammar inside and never italicise things that are not supposed to be
Fix redirects and dead wikilinks
[he] in the speech marks should be replaced with the original "I" text since it reads fine due to being known as quoted
"He then mentioned that his" → "Avicii then mentioned that his"
"when Avicii was asked whether or not he intended "Levels" to be a big hit, he said, → "Avicii was asked whether or not he intended "Levels" to be a big hit and said," to avoid "beating around the bush", so to speak
"He produced 6" should say six per
MOS:NUM and who does he refer to, specifically?
""Levels," or rather, an early prototype" → "An early prototype of "Levels" since the former reads informally
"on SoundCloud on Facebook," → "on SoundCloud via Facebook"
"played in many festivals" → "was played in many festivals"
"During this time, on May 4, 2011," → "On May 4, 2011," to avoid writing out the obvious
"it was called" → "the song was referred to as"
"trailer of the song "Levels,"" → "trailer of the single "Levels","
"was released on" → "was released via"
"posted a teaser trailer" → "posted a teaser" since they are practically the same thing
"It featured the album cover" → "The trailer features the cover art" since this is not an album and the trailer did not disappear
[23][24] should both be at the end of the sentence only since it is only two citations
"and on Amazon" → "and to Amazon"
Composition
Citation(s) are needed to back up anything on the text, which currently reads jumbled due to a large number of commas
"for making the vocals a cameo," → "for sampling the vocals,"
Commercial performance
Wikilinks on countries are pointless
HashtagNumbers should be replaced properly, such as number 21 or number three; always writing out for any at number nine or lower per MOS:NUM
"2 weeks" and other number issues stick out too
"peak positiion" → "peak position" since that is an obvious typo
"has received 8 platinum" → "has received an octuple platinum" and do this for any other certifications, following the
tuple rules
Put abbreviations of certification industries in brackets
Too many uses of "it" once again
The United States and the United Kingdom should be called the US and the UK on their mentions here
Name the Hot 100 chart properly
"of December 11, 2011 as" → "of December 11, 2011 at" and do this for similar cases since "at" is obviously better in this context
Billboard wikilinked once again; massive overlinking by this point
"It stayed on the" → "the song stayed on the"
All statements need citations, though splitting three citations to different points in one sentence is incorrect unless it's a large amount like around five+
Why are the year-end Dance Club Songs and other chart chart seperately referred to as "charts"? You should change to chart, apart from at the sentence's beginning.
"on its peak position as" → "at its peak position of"
Name the UK Dance chart properly
The last para should be merged with the third since it is too short
Music video
"for a concept" → "for the concept"
Papahadjopoulos should be used for mentions outside of the first, not Petro
"behind the song "Levels"" → "behind "Levels"" since the article focuses on it as literally nothing but a song by this point
"created an concept based" → "created a concept based" as this grammar reads poorly
"It was then released on" → "It was ultimately released to" and add the full-stop at the end of the sentence
"businessman (played by Richie Greenfield)[75] walks" → "businessman, who is played by Richie Greenfield, walking" and put [75] at the end of the sentence
"with pictures next to them with people that have faces..." this reads confusingly; do the people sat next to him look like Avicii or their pictures?
"and briefly pauses and then starts" → "and briefly pauses before he starts"
"starts dialing on a phone, 911." → "starts dialing 911 on a phone."
"The music video ends with" → "The video ends with"
The synopsis is mostly well-written but are you sure everything is backed up by the refs?
"ties into the music video." → "ties into the music video:"
Awards table is useless for only two awards; write out in prose
Publisher should be cited when appropriate; same issue with work/website
All refs need accessdates
To conclude, this article is definitely in better shape than when I had to quick fail it earlier this summer, though is far from perfect. I did go through as much as a GA reviewer would have, but pointed out many issues that could have potentially lead to it being failed upon review. Overall, I do commend your hard work on this but an issue I did not identify above because it was present throughout is the inconsistency of date formatting; only one format should be used throughout, ideally the one of Avicii's home country Sweden. This article has GA potential, though. --
K. Peake21:13, 30 August 2020 (UTC)reply
WP:OVERLINK issues and red links should not be left to rot either
Link to the music video in here instead of external links
The lead's first two sentences have grammar issues with the commas
Too many uses of "it" that are too close to each other; try and use "the song" in some cases instead
For consistency, do not use "the track" at all
"the song because he wanted to use the sample in a song." this reads awkwardly, you can use "a track" to end the sentence instead since it is not writing out "the track" and is not overly repetitive
"He also said that" → "Avicii also said that"
What does "their label" refer to? Always make things like this specific.
Wikilinking on countries is pointless
United States's → US
The certifications should mention how many times it was instead, not stating it like they were all separate: "octuple platinum" instead of "eight platinum", for example
Are you sure written is the correct term for the video creation?
The third and fifth sentences of the third para read like run-ons and are you sure all of this is notable for the lead?
Development and release
Track titles should always go in speech marks without the grammar inside and never italicise things that are not supposed to be
Fix redirects and dead wikilinks
[he] in the speech marks should be replaced with the original "I" text since it reads fine due to being known as quoted
"He then mentioned that his" → "Avicii then mentioned that his"
"when Avicii was asked whether or not he intended "Levels" to be a big hit, he said, → "Avicii was asked whether or not he intended "Levels" to be a big hit and said," to avoid "beating around the bush", so to speak
"He produced 6" should say six per
MOS:NUM and who does he refer to, specifically?
""Levels," or rather, an early prototype" → "An early prototype of "Levels" since the former reads informally
"on SoundCloud on Facebook," → "on SoundCloud via Facebook"
"played in many festivals" → "was played in many festivals"
"During this time, on May 4, 2011," → "On May 4, 2011," to avoid writing out the obvious
"it was called" → "the song was referred to as"
"trailer of the song "Levels,"" → "trailer of the single "Levels","
"was released on" → "was released via"
"posted a teaser trailer" → "posted a teaser" since they are practically the same thing
"It featured the album cover" → "The trailer features the cover art" since this is not an album and the trailer did not disappear
[23][24] should both be at the end of the sentence only since it is only two citations
"and on Amazon" → "and to Amazon"
Composition
Citation(s) are needed to back up anything on the text, which currently reads jumbled due to a large number of commas
"for making the vocals a cameo," → "for sampling the vocals,"
Commercial performance
Wikilinks on countries are pointless
HashtagNumbers should be replaced properly, such as number 21 or number three; always writing out for any at number nine or lower per MOS:NUM
"2 weeks" and other number issues stick out too
"peak positiion" → "peak position" since that is an obvious typo
"has received 8 platinum" → "has received an octuple platinum" and do this for any other certifications, following the
tuple rules
Put abbreviations of certification industries in brackets
Too many uses of "it" once again
The United States and the United Kingdom should be called the US and the UK on their mentions here
Name the Hot 100 chart properly
"of December 11, 2011 as" → "of December 11, 2011 at" and do this for similar cases since "at" is obviously better in this context
Billboard wikilinked once again; massive overlinking by this point
"It stayed on the" → "the song stayed on the"
All statements need citations, though splitting three citations to different points in one sentence is incorrect unless it's a large amount like around five+
Why are the year-end Dance Club Songs and other chart chart seperately referred to as "charts"? You should change to chart, apart from at the sentence's beginning.
"on its peak position as" → "at its peak position of"
Name the UK Dance chart properly
The last para should be merged with the third since it is too short
Music video
"for a concept" → "for the concept"
Papahadjopoulos should be used for mentions outside of the first, not Petro
"behind the song "Levels"" → "behind "Levels"" since the article focuses on it as literally nothing but a song by this point
"created an concept based" → "created a concept based" as this grammar reads poorly
"It was then released on" → "It was ultimately released to" and add the full-stop at the end of the sentence
"businessman (played by Richie Greenfield)[75] walks" → "businessman, who is played by Richie Greenfield, walking" and put [75] at the end of the sentence
"with pictures next to them with people that have faces..." this reads confusingly; do the people sat next to him look like Avicii or their pictures?
"and briefly pauses and then starts" → "and briefly pauses before he starts"
"starts dialing on a phone, 911." → "starts dialing 911 on a phone."
"The music video ends with" → "The video ends with"
The synopsis is mostly well-written but are you sure everything is backed up by the refs?
"ties into the music video." → "ties into the music video:"
Awards table is useless for only two awards; write out in prose
Publisher should be cited when appropriate; same issue with work/website
All refs need accessdates
To conclude, this article is definitely in better shape than when I had to quick fail it earlier this summer, though is far from perfect. I did go through as much as a GA reviewer would have, but pointed out many issues that could have potentially lead to it being failed upon review. Overall, I do commend your hard work on this but an issue I did not identify above because it was present throughout is the inconsistency of date formatting; only one format should be used throughout, ideally the one of Avicii's home country Sweden. This article has GA potential, though. --
K. Peake21:13, 30 August 2020 (UTC)reply