This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I intend to help take this article to FAC.
Thanks, Aaroncrick (Tassie Boy talk) 23:34, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments
An interesting article. I have been through the lead and Early life sections, and have identified numerous mainly minor points that need attention. I think it would save time if the rest of the article was copyedited before being reviewed. I am happy to do this copyedit over the next day or two, if you are agreeable (if you'd rather someone with more knowledge of Rules football did it, I won't be offended!) Anyway, here are my comments thus far:-
Let me know what you decide. As I can't watch all my peer reviews, a note on my talkpage is the quickest way of getting my intention. Brianboulton ( talk) 22:54, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
Later: can you look at the following points, arising from my copyediting:-
I should finish the remaining sections tonight or tomorrow. Brianboulton ( talk) 17:25, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
'Later still: I have finished my copyediting, although I have not touched the final two short paragraphs in the "Personal" section. Most of this information seems to border on trivia and I wonder how much is necessary. Anyway, I think the prose is a bit tidier now. When you have finished responding to the points I've raised, give my talkpage a buzz and I'll do a final redathrough. Brianboulton ( talk) 21:51, 11 July 2009 (UTC)
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I intend to help take this article to FAC.
Thanks, Aaroncrick (Tassie Boy talk) 23:34, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments
An interesting article. I have been through the lead and Early life sections, and have identified numerous mainly minor points that need attention. I think it would save time if the rest of the article was copyedited before being reviewed. I am happy to do this copyedit over the next day or two, if you are agreeable (if you'd rather someone with more knowledge of Rules football did it, I won't be offended!) Anyway, here are my comments thus far:-
Let me know what you decide. As I can't watch all my peer reviews, a note on my talkpage is the quickest way of getting my intention. Brianboulton ( talk) 22:54, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
Later: can you look at the following points, arising from my copyediting:-
I should finish the remaining sections tonight or tomorrow. Brianboulton ( talk) 17:25, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
'Later still: I have finished my copyediting, although I have not touched the final two short paragraphs in the "Personal" section. Most of this information seems to border on trivia and I wonder how much is necessary. Anyway, I think the prose is a bit tidier now. When you have finished responding to the points I've raised, give my talkpage a buzz and I'll do a final redathrough. Brianboulton ( talk) 21:51, 11 July 2009 (UTC)