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The History of Mumbai recounts the growth of Mumbai from a collection of seven islands on the western coast of India becoming the commercial capital of the nation and one of the most populous cities in the world. Although human habitation existed during...
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Mumbai is the financial capital of India and one of the most populous cities in the world, and consists of seven islands on the western coast of India. Although human habitation existed during...
LinguistAt Large 22:25, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
I'm unwilling to get my hands dirty as the markup is intimidating with all the cite. I'll review section by section, first scanning for fallacies. I'll leave the lead for the last. This is my initial review.
=Nichalp «Talk»= 15:48, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
Mumbai (formerly Bombay) consists of seven islands on the western coast of India. It is the financial capital of India and one of the most populous cities in the world. Although human habitation existed during the Stone Age, the Kolis, a fishing community, are the earliest known settlers on the islands. The Maurya Empire gained control of the region during the third century BCE and transformed it into a centre of Hinduism and Buddhism. Later, between the 2nd century BCE and 9th century CE, the islands came under the control of successive dynasties: Satavahanas, Abhiras, Vakatakas, Kalachuris, Chalukyas, Rashtrakutas and the Silhara dynasty (810–1260). Dineshkannambadi ( talk) 02:11, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
Excellent suggestions. The Modified Prose. Mumbai (formerly Bombay) originally consisted of seven islands on the western coast of India. It is the financial capital of India and one of the most populous cities in the world. Although human habitation existed during the Stone Age, the Kolis, a fishing community, were the earliest known settlers of the islands. The Maurya Empire gained control of the islands during the third century BCE, and transformed it into a centre for Hindu and Buddhist culture and religion. Later, between the 2nd century BCE and 9th century CE, the islands came under the control of successive dynasties: Satavahanas, Abhiras, Vakatakas, Kalachuris, Chalukyas and Rashtrakutas, before being ruled by the Silhara dynasty from 810 to 1260.
[File:Aihole inscription of Ravi Kirti.jpg] Oh!, I think you mean Konkan Mauryas. That may be accurate because the Konkan Maurays became vassals of Chalukyas from about early 7th c. CE. Dineshkannambadi ( talk) 21:57, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
Yes, they are the Konkan Mauryas. The Greater Bombay District Gazetteer supports it. You can also ckeck Maharashtra State Gazetteers. It says As stated before, north Konkan was ruled by the Mauryas, who were probably feudatories of the Kalachuris. Kensplanet T C 16:16, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
This peer review discussion has been closed.
If you are willing to review this article and want a review of your article, then please inform me. I'll surely review it.
I've listed this article for peer review because this article has recently been listed as a GA. Efforts in improving prose and content will be appreciated. References are all reliable.
Thanks, Kensplanet T C 09:31, 2 January 2009 (UTC)
(Current version)
The History of Mumbai recounts the growth of Mumbai from a collection of seven islands on the western coast of India becoming the commercial capital of the nation and one of the most populous cities in the world. Although human habitation existed during...
(My version)
Mumbai is the financial capital of India and one of the most populous cities in the world, and consists of seven islands on the western coast of India. Although human habitation existed during...
LinguistAt Large 22:25, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
I'm unwilling to get my hands dirty as the markup is intimidating with all the cite. I'll review section by section, first scanning for fallacies. I'll leave the lead for the last. This is my initial review.
=Nichalp «Talk»= 15:48, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
Mumbai (formerly Bombay) consists of seven islands on the western coast of India. It is the financial capital of India and one of the most populous cities in the world. Although human habitation existed during the Stone Age, the Kolis, a fishing community, are the earliest known settlers on the islands. The Maurya Empire gained control of the region during the third century BCE and transformed it into a centre of Hinduism and Buddhism. Later, between the 2nd century BCE and 9th century CE, the islands came under the control of successive dynasties: Satavahanas, Abhiras, Vakatakas, Kalachuris, Chalukyas, Rashtrakutas and the Silhara dynasty (810–1260). Dineshkannambadi ( talk) 02:11, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
Excellent suggestions. The Modified Prose. Mumbai (formerly Bombay) originally consisted of seven islands on the western coast of India. It is the financial capital of India and one of the most populous cities in the world. Although human habitation existed during the Stone Age, the Kolis, a fishing community, were the earliest known settlers of the islands. The Maurya Empire gained control of the islands during the third century BCE, and transformed it into a centre for Hindu and Buddhist culture and religion. Later, between the 2nd century BCE and 9th century CE, the islands came under the control of successive dynasties: Satavahanas, Abhiras, Vakatakas, Kalachuris, Chalukyas and Rashtrakutas, before being ruled by the Silhara dynasty from 810 to 1260.
[File:Aihole inscription of Ravi Kirti.jpg] Oh!, I think you mean Konkan Mauryas. That may be accurate because the Konkan Maurays became vassals of Chalukyas from about early 7th c. CE. Dineshkannambadi ( talk) 21:57, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
Yes, they are the Konkan Mauryas. The Greater Bombay District Gazetteer supports it. You can also ckeck Maharashtra State Gazetteers. It says As stated before, north Konkan was ruled by the Mauryas, who were probably feudatories of the Kalachuris. Kensplanet T C 16:16, 14 January 2009 (UTC)