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I've listed this article for peer review because it has just passed GA and I hope to make it my next FAC. An peer review might make it more likely to pass.
"The giant anteater is grouped with the semi-arboreal northern and southern tamandua in the family Myrmecophagidae, which in turn is grouped with the family Cyclopedidae, whose only extant member is the arboreal silky anteater, in the suborder Vermilingua." I'm assuming that this is covered by the next reference, but could that be confirmed with a footnote, please?
Some of the section titles are a bit wonky. I've never seen the phrase Life history in the context of taxonomy (or any other subject, for that matter). What about "ecology"? I assume that Activies is supposed to be "Activities", but even this is not a particularly clear description of the section's contents.
Well, the subsection doesn't seem to really focus on any particular type of behavior, it's just Behavior minus Spacing, Foraging, and Reproduction. Perhaps this section shouldn't be a subsection at all, but should instead serve as the first few paragraphs of the Behavior section.
The last paragraph in Distribution and status is problematic. It's too short to exist as its own paragraph, and new paragraphs should not begin with transition words such as "however". I suggest either merging this with the previous paragraph, or expanding it and removing "however".
"As of 2010, the total population had declined by 30 percent over the past ten years." Do we have any stats or estimates on how many anteaters were alive in 2000 and 2010? I think that would be more informative than the percent difference. Also, if such numbers aren't available, a much more natural phrasing would be: "Between 2000 and 2010, the total population had declined by 30 percent."
In the first paragraph of Reproduction, there are three consecutive sentences that start with "During". I suggest finding alternative phrasings to avoid confusion.
There may not be anything in the literature which can answer this, but one question that is not addressed in Reproduction: How many pups does a mother raise in her lifetime?
"In the mythology and folklore of the Amazon Basin" Shouldn't this mention the people of the Amazon Basin? Perhaps this is what was meant: "In the mythology and folklore of the indigenous peoples of the Amazon Basin".
"particularly in a Yarabar myth" I'm not seeing anything on Wikipedia or Google that mentions the Yarabar people. I suggest reviewing the source to make sure that this is spelled correctly.
"The Flash cartoon Happy Tree Friends features a nerdy blue-gray anteater named Sniffles." Citation?
I don't think the existence of a cartoon character on a show with its own wiki article needs a cite but I removed the "nerdy blue-gray" part.
LittleJerry (
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00:51, 1 August 2012 (UTC)reply
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because it has just passed GA and I hope to make it my next FAC. An peer review might make it more likely to pass.
"The giant anteater is grouped with the semi-arboreal northern and southern tamandua in the family Myrmecophagidae, which in turn is grouped with the family Cyclopedidae, whose only extant member is the arboreal silky anteater, in the suborder Vermilingua." I'm assuming that this is covered by the next reference, but could that be confirmed with a footnote, please?
Some of the section titles are a bit wonky. I've never seen the phrase Life history in the context of taxonomy (or any other subject, for that matter). What about "ecology"? I assume that Activies is supposed to be "Activities", but even this is not a particularly clear description of the section's contents.
Well, the subsection doesn't seem to really focus on any particular type of behavior, it's just Behavior minus Spacing, Foraging, and Reproduction. Perhaps this section shouldn't be a subsection at all, but should instead serve as the first few paragraphs of the Behavior section.
The last paragraph in Distribution and status is problematic. It's too short to exist as its own paragraph, and new paragraphs should not begin with transition words such as "however". I suggest either merging this with the previous paragraph, or expanding it and removing "however".
"As of 2010, the total population had declined by 30 percent over the past ten years." Do we have any stats or estimates on how many anteaters were alive in 2000 and 2010? I think that would be more informative than the percent difference. Also, if such numbers aren't available, a much more natural phrasing would be: "Between 2000 and 2010, the total population had declined by 30 percent."
In the first paragraph of Reproduction, there are three consecutive sentences that start with "During". I suggest finding alternative phrasings to avoid confusion.
There may not be anything in the literature which can answer this, but one question that is not addressed in Reproduction: How many pups does a mother raise in her lifetime?
"In the mythology and folklore of the Amazon Basin" Shouldn't this mention the people of the Amazon Basin? Perhaps this is what was meant: "In the mythology and folklore of the indigenous peoples of the Amazon Basin".
"particularly in a Yarabar myth" I'm not seeing anything on Wikipedia or Google that mentions the Yarabar people. I suggest reviewing the source to make sure that this is spelled correctly.
"The Flash cartoon Happy Tree Friends features a nerdy blue-gray anteater named Sniffles." Citation?
I don't think the existence of a cartoon character on a show with its own wiki article needs a cite but I removed the "nerdy blue-gray" part.
LittleJerry (
talk)
00:51, 1 August 2012 (UTC)reply